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IT'S HEEREEE C8 yay! ^^ First page!! Please leave a comment, tell me what you think (even though it's hardly begun...hehe) x) SO I'M NOT SURE WHY THIS LOOKS KIND OF BAD ...it should look good since I spent dayssss upon daysss on it. lmao fffffffff OH WELL, I'll just revise my technique for the next page.
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I've been meaning to comment on this for awhile since someone suggested it into the #Comic-Creations Favourites. So do forgive if, say, certain things have improved/changed since you posted. xD
Anyway, I really am loving the background work. It pulls out the colors and environments to make a very rich atmosphere. The enhanced details are truly amazing. The panels are placed nicely so the flow goes smoothly. Text and balloons are placed adequately so reading is easy. Overall quite an excellent job! C:
I'm at odds whether or not to say I feel it jumped in too quick. We don't know any of these characters, know nothing of their packs, where they are, or much of anything else yet already we are hearing about them having troubles. I can't really say I can connect with them. However, you may have plans after this to better explain all of that and to let the readers back track and solve those problems. So it's not really something I can judge yet. After all, it's only the first page, as you said!
If I had to make a suggestion, I would take out that first narration balloon altogether. This is a graphic work and therefore we should see and know or at least infer that this character is the Alpha or some sort of leading figure and that the obvious group of wolves is his pack. Telling the readers straight out is not necessary. If you want the readers to know his name, have one of the follower wolves say something like "But Alpha Calenor..." that would makes things work nicely. Overuse of narration can cause a story to feel more like a book than a graphic work. However that's all complete suggestion.
I don't have any crits on art itself as it all looks rather well (plus I fail at wolf anatomy so I'm really no help in that department xD). Only thing I can point out is to simply be careful of your character placement in relation to your balloons as I see that multi-colored wolf there in the last panel as been beheaded by the she-wolf's dialogue.
Anyway, very good start! Quite impressive.
Anyway, I really am loving the background work. It pulls out the colors and environments to make a very rich atmosphere. The enhanced details are truly amazing. The panels are placed nicely so the flow goes smoothly. Text and balloons are placed adequately so reading is easy. Overall quite an excellent job! C:
I'm at odds whether or not to say I feel it jumped in too quick. We don't know any of these characters, know nothing of their packs, where they are, or much of anything else yet already we are hearing about them having troubles. I can't really say I can connect with them. However, you may have plans after this to better explain all of that and to let the readers back track and solve those problems. So it's not really something I can judge yet. After all, it's only the first page, as you said!
If I had to make a suggestion, I would take out that first narration balloon altogether. This is a graphic work and therefore we should see and know or at least infer that this character is the Alpha or some sort of leading figure and that the obvious group of wolves is his pack. Telling the readers straight out is not necessary. If you want the readers to know his name, have one of the follower wolves say something like "But Alpha Calenor..." that would makes things work nicely. Overuse of narration can cause a story to feel more like a book than a graphic work. However that's all complete suggestion.
I don't have any crits on art itself as it all looks rather well (plus I fail at wolf anatomy so I'm really no help in that department xD). Only thing I can point out is to simply be careful of your character placement in relation to your balloons as I see that multi-colored wolf there in the last panel as been beheaded by the she-wolf's dialogue.
Anyway, very good start! Quite impressive.