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Fragile Chaos (FluttershyxDiscord) by Royal-Snowflake Fragile Chaos (FluttershyxDiscord) by Royal-Snowflake
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Breeding chart!:royal-snowflake.deviantart.com…
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Papertop Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oooh, fascinating fusion of a kindhearted Protagonist and a mischievous antagonist!
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2018
Thank you :heart:
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SilverMuttt Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hello! Coming over here from :iconprojectcomment: 
I will be conducting this critique within these sections!

Concept And Creativity-
Anatomy-
Shading-
Line art-
and
What you’re doing right-
Let us begin! 
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Concept and Creativity-
Thankfully I know just enough about the MLP fandom to hopefully give some insight. The discordXfluttershy ship is not that unique. I’d like to see some discordXchrysalis sometime. What you’ve done with her design is extremely boring in comparison to what others have done with this ship. You just went the cliche rout and mismatched her limbs, and added a fang. Not much to the design there.
The composition of this piece is pretty boring as well. Nothing catches my eye, nothing pops, there’s nothing that unique about it that I can tell. Even for “My little pony art” the colors are muted to somehow make it even MORE unremarkable.
Anatomy-
I know that the MLP equines don’t have accurate horse anatomy, but they have their own interesting way about it. Somehow, even though their limbs are quite simple (they are surprisingly hard to draw as I’ve tried) yours definitely could have been more accurately made and dynamic. I’m starting to realize that this doesn’t even look like discord’s and fluttershy’s child it just looks like they where put in a blender and fused together. What looks as if it was an attempt to be like fluttershy’s hair ended up looking like a towel flung over her head. Another sad thing is the fact that her eyes are so small. Eyes are the source of much expression and the MLP animators definitely knew that, so that’s why the eyes where enlarged so much. Definitely try and utilize that.
now, I also can’t tell what her legs are. Obviously we have two pony limbs and maybe a cow or leopard leg, along with a possible deer leg. Another thing to work on is making the species of those look more apparent.
Shading-
I can see some dark and light blotches here and there, it’s an attempt at least but just makes the overall picture look very dirty. Definitely work on thinking about the light source first as well as putting shadows in obvious places like below her chin and under her hair.
Line art-
I think this is the best part about the picture. Too bad you have to focus hard to find any lines in artwork though. Even though the lines are plain and boring they’re clear and very strait. Only a little shakiness then and there, but overall...great job! The biggest problem I’m having with it though is the fact that her mouth line is yellow and the fang is black. That contrast looks pretty terrible and maybe you should study the show to see how they utilize their line colors appealingly. The lines on her neck also looks pretty amateurish.
What you’re doing right!
Your lines are definitely the strongest part of the piece so you can be proud of that! Her expression is also quite clear, and I’m sorry for ignoring her cutie mark for all this time, but that looks pretty neat as well. The colors on that are quite warm and apealing.

i hope you enjoyed my critique. Even though I bet it seemed pretty harsh at times but you can only go up from here, and you’re not starting too low ;) bye then :wave:
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018
Thank you for the help! The reason I made this was because it was requested from my breeding chart in the description. If you would like I could make you a discord x chrysalis. As for the shading I think the blotchiness comes from switching the file from a .sai to a .jpeg so dA would upload it. I'll definitely work on smoothing it out more :) I agree with you in saying that drawing them is surprisingly harder than it looks :XD: As for the color of the line art, would you suggest I use an even darker color or doing black outlines? I'll also definitely start making the eyes a lot bigger in the drawings I make, because I agree that it is where expressions really shows. Do you recommend a way to make the neck lines look a little more professional? Do you have any tips on how to improve her hair as well?

If any of this sounds sarcastic or nasty in any way, I'm not meaning to be. I really like to hear how I can improve as an artist :)

Thank you so much for the feedback! It truly is appreciated! And it's nice to hear some criticism every now and then ;)

I think you gave a very good critique that is very through and honest, while harsh at sometimes I agree with you that I do have room to improve. (A lot in fact :XD:)  I do love hearing on where I've fallen flat in terms of the quality of the art. You are always welcome to my page to help in any way, if you are interested that is :XD: 

Thank you again :love: :heart:
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SilverMuttt Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The technique I use for smooth lines is I don’t use airbrushes, I use “pens” where their thickness varies, at least that’s the case with thicker lines :) and then I sketch the piece out first not caring about how the lines look and THEN I make a new layer and draw on top of THAT and use very fast strokes to get that nice smooth look. (Lost of steps sorry about that :XD:)
if you want thin lines definitely go for a pen that doesn’t change in thickness, but since it’s mlp I think you’d want those nice thick lines.
The hair itself will benefit from smoother lines and more dimension :)

im really glad it helped you by the way! :D
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018
Thank you so much! :heart:
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SilverMuttt Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Of course! :) plus there’s always YouTube tutorials.
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018
Thank you again :love:
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WiffleSnuf Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Student Digital Artist
Wow, that looks incredible! Keep up the good work~! I think it's astounding how you took Fluttershy and fused it with discord in such a smooth way~!
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018
Thank you! :heart:
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WiffleSnuf Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Student Digital Artist
No Prob!
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Greenjelly-12 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ooooo! That’s really cool! 😃
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Royal-Snowflake Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018
I'm glad you like it! :heart:
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Greenjelly-12 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
<3
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