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I think of you, when it rains.


Don’t you remember
The fickle breezes
Spattering droplets in our faces,
How a great gust carried off your Donald Duck umbrella
And we chased it,
Across the square, across the park,
Where it finally caught
In the rosebushes.
One of the ribs was broken
But I laughed
And laughed because it made Donald’s tail droop,
Until you were laughing too.
I don’t know how we didn’t even
Notice that my hands were bleeding from the thorns
Until we were halfway home.
You asked me if it hurt—
Of course it did,
But it didn’t matter—
Besides, I just can’t cry with raindrops running down my face,
Running down my arms,
Running free.


Or, what about
The spangling rain of winter,
Sharp—but harmless, like pins-and-needles—on our skin
But death to the letters
In the postbox
Where their words would bleed their life away,
Stabbed with rain.
So for safety,
You tucked the letters under your shirt
Then pulled off your jacket,
Held it
Over our heads—
Your arm around my shoulder,
Mine around your waist—
And we fled to the front porch,
Stumbling through sodden grass,
Skidding through slick water.
And you wanted to know, “Are you cold?”
Me? No, never—not with your arms wrapped around me,
Wrapped in your jacket,
Wrapped in storm.


But, in the somersault of autumn,
Rain, falling rain—
Soft and warm in the afternoon—
And sky wrapped in skin of breathing clouds
Kept us safe.
My feet on your feet,
Penguin walking,
Wet-grass barefoot dancing,
And spinning,
My hands in your hands,
Fingers holding us together at the centre of a reeling green world
Until we sat dizzy down
Laughing,
Panting to the rhythm of the falling wet heartbeat around us,
My seaweed hair clinging to my neck,
Caught in the corner of a smile.
You said
I was your mermaid, pearl-pale and glimmering
Because I loved wet hair days,
Loved water,
Loved rain.


It’s raining now,
Without you.
I watch it from the window
Inside, because I—
I never could cry with raindrops running down my face
Or onto the spattered letter in my hand.
The window-glass is cold,
And slippery with salty prints
From fingers
That held yours.
I know the postman comes by your place at 3 o’clock
He’ll have this letter in his waterproof bag—but
He’ll leave it
In your postbox
To bleed to death in the stinging rain.
Unless—you save it
Dash out across the glistened lawn, take it
Tuck it under your jacket—
Will you—will you hold this letter close against you,
Hold my words,
Hold me

Just—just hold me close again,
With the sky’s wet heartbeat falling all around us—


I miss you when it rains.



~Riorlynë
Something inspired by another grey day and also for DailyPoet's current prompt, "rain".standing in the rain 

I don't usually write free verse, so I'd be happy to know what you guys think of this one. :)



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Given 2014-06-25
When It Rains by Riorlyne is simple enough that you don't get lost in fancy words or concepts, yet it touches on emotions so powerfully. ( Suggested by revois and Featured by inknalcohol )
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TheSisters2 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2015   Traditional Artist
Free verse is awesome, if the writer is good. You're good, so it was awesome! :happybounce: Also, just so you know, you made a generally bubbly person cry. :cries: But it was a good cry-one of those that a person has inside their eyes instead of down their face, where the tears can bubble up and toss around all the words and feelings that have just crossed their mind. That was the emotion I just felt as I read, 'I miss you when it rains'. ^^; Good job! :D :huggle: :heart:-Kay
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Sketchman147 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2015   Traditional Artist
So beautiful yet it seems sad at the end.
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2015   Writer
Thank you! That's what I was aiming for. :nod:
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Sketchman147 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2015   Traditional Artist
You're welcome. :)
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buttons-and-bicycles Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Student Writer
Such a beautiful story wrapped up and linked by rain. Well deserved :)
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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wordeea Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014
that is beautiful and that last stanza is heartbreaking. well deserved DD
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014   Writer
Thanks so much! :hug:
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gallindz Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014
I love this. Its very raw and honest! I like that in a poem. :heart:
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014   Writer
Why, thank you! :heart: That makes me glad.
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gallindz Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014
:heart: Im glad you are glad:D
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The-Craftsmans-Pen Featured By Owner Edited Jun 26, 2014  Student Writer
Fan.Tas.Tic!!! I LOVE IT! :heart: :heart: #1 
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
:thumbsup: Thank you! I'm glad you do. :aww:
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crzygirl815 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful. One of the best poems I've read in a long time. XD
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
:aww: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it. :heart:
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IMAFTF Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014
Waaaa~ This is so beautiful!
I've fallen in love~Llama Emoji-02 (Blush) [V1] Love in the Air 
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
^_^ That makes me glad. Thank you! :heart:
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IMAFTF Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014
You're welcome~ T//A//T
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GreenElephantGirl Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
Gorgeous.
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014   Writer
Thank you!
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GreenElephantGirl Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014
You are most welcome :)
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014   Writer
IMing: Flattered Thank you so much, again! :heart:
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ArtCrusade Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:la: you are so much welcome! 
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GenZelda Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Funny how its raining right and I read this...very well done,..
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014   Writer
standing in the rain Thanks!
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GenZelda Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome~! ^^
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
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pearwood Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Full of longing and hope.  Beautiful.
Blessings,
Steve
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
~Orli
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MelodyofaMemory Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I was listening to a song called "Lullaby for a Stormy Night" when I was reading this, and this touched me so much. I love the way you combine words in odd ways to make unique descriptions. Truly beautiful.
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much for your lovely comments! :heart: I'm glad you enjoyed it. That's why I love writing. :aww:
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MelodyofaMemory Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome~ Always write, it's one of the best things a person can do Heart 
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Namicat101 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014
I didn't think that it was physically possible, but it is now raining in my heart.
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
standing in the rain Thank you!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful. Excellent use of structure, very well done on the DD :hug:
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014   Writer
:hug: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. :aww:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Student Writer
And thank you for the tasty llama!
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014   Writer
It's a pleasure!
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indigoatmosphere Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Sooo sweet yet sad. You've really captured the emotion of memory, and the progression of the pair's relationship. Congrats on the well-deserved DD! :hug:
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
:happycry: Thank you so much! :hug:
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014   General Artist
You really made me feel the weather with this piece, I got those 'watching the rain through a window' shivers. Well written!
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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
IMing: Flattered Thank you so much!
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
this is beautiful.

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Riorlyne Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014   Writer
:heart: Thank you.
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student Writer
This is truly amazing Clap 
Congratulations on the well deserved DD Heart 
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