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Piranha - Chapter Fourteen, Part 5c
PIRANHA
Chapter 14 – The Black Hole, Part 5c:

    Clattering through the dark, segmented metal corridor linking the two ships, Piranha could sense, from the other side of the metal partition separating his small passageway from the huge one to which it was attached, a low vibration, the sheer weight of so many hundreds of trudging feet – slaves still being transferred to the Black Hole.
    That wasn’t helping to settle the anxious flutter in his chest.  He wouldn’t calm down until he was back on the Insurrection.
    It wasn’t just the irrational but urgent sense that he had to race home – “home,” gods! – before the ships undocked.
    (But yes.  After experiencing the Black Hole, the Insurrection, abruptly, was home.) 
     
    He shivered.  His feet, s
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Piranha - Chapter Fourteen, Part 5b
The penultimate part of this section and chapter. That will be the end of Chapter 14, “The Black Hole,” – though these chapters are long enough that they might as well be called “books.” 
Since by this point it’s likely not that obvious, I should state that this is part of a fanfiction ultimately based around the character Rayman, belonging to Ubisoft and invented by Michel Ancel.  Not the current incarnation of the character, but the guy from the first game, “Rayman,” and to a greater extent the game “Rayman 2: The Great Escape.”  (Except that you can imagine him with something closer to actual hair.)  That character came across as quite a bit more serious than the current 2D versions of the game. Then on top of that I wanted to make him more "realistic." I'm just mentioning this as an explanation to anyone wondering how on earth I got from that crazy grinning sprite in the current games to
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Piranha - Chapter Fourteen, Part 5a
PIRANHA
Chapter 14:  The Black Hole, Part 5a

Piranha opened his eyes.  Then closed them again.
After a moment, he opened them once more.  Nausea swirled the dingy, ashy greyness around him.
After another wait, he sat up.  Gingerly.  Maneuvered himself to the edge of the bed.  Remained there motionless.
It was day.  The lights were on.  Much too on.
He was going to have to move.  He prepared himself.
It didn’t matter.  He hadn’t —  
NO —
He did not bury his face in his hands.  After a moment, he stood up.  Step by weighted step he moved into the bathroom.
Out of the shower, dredging his face in a towel, he stopped moving.  Then, grimly, started up again.
Never mind.
Never mind.
Never mind.
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A slurry of fragmentary images:  tankards of rum, empty and full, vertical and horizontal, littering the tables, floor, everywhere.  Long sinuous lines of absurdly dancing
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 4c
Finally managed to get my head functional enough to cobble together another chapter.  With many, many, many thanks to Mewitti, who helped me revive and keep going - and who also contributed that magnificent cover.  (I feel like it sums up the chapter so well you probably don’t need to wade through all my words, unless you enjoy that kind of masochism.)
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PIRANHA
Chapter 14:  The Black Hole, Part 4c:

The preparations on the stage were rapid, surprisingly organized, and alarming.  Dozens of small repair robots and muscular slaves had swarmed out like an army of ants at a fallen sandwich, and with much screeching of power tools were rapidly disassembling what Piranha had thought was a solid metal wall at the back of the stage.  This revealed a vast open space like an outdoor game playing field.  The terrain sloped gently upward, away from the audience, so that its full length was easily visible.  It seemed to have a rough, dirt
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 4b
PIRANHA
Chapter 14:  The Black Hole, Part 4b:

While living cargo was being offloaded in the front part of the bottom level, in the rear an immense auditorium had been put together, where most of the Insurrection’s population had gathered for the show.  The metal wall separating the two events was so thick and solid that even with less noise going on in the auditorium, no one would ever have heard a sound from the vast room on the other side.  There was no direct way to get from one to the other, and in order to reach the back part of the intake level, Piranha had had to climb back up the stairs to take an elevator from two levels above.  That elevator, along with several others, opened on a crude lobby, deserted now except for a few irritable robot guards.  They were stationed before some large double doors punctuating an alarmingly wide wall.  Given the quantity of noise emanating from behind that wall, Piranha might well be the last pirate o
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 4a
PIRANHA
Chapter 14:  The Black Hole, Part 4a:

As Piranha prepared to leave for the "celebration," Vee hovered around him eagerly, taking hold of his shirt, vest, coat as Piranha took them off, brushing them, laying them out on the bed, even snatching the hat off his head.  Startled, Piranha jumped back.  Vee came after him and, pulling out a tiny, curved knife, grabbed for his head.
Piranha seized him by the wrist, forcing the knife out of his hand.  "What the hell is going on with you?"
"Sir!  I was just going to trim your hair!"  As he clutched at Piranha's fierce clench on his wrist, Vee blushed – realizing belatedly that to Piranha it must have looked like he had come at him with a weapon.  "That's not a knife!  It's just a hair-cutter!"
"Trim my hair?  What in metal tubing for?"
"To get you ready!  For the performance!  Doesn't the girl hel
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 3
PIRANHA
Chapter Fourteen:  The Black Hole, Part 3:

Dugong?  Schoolboy?  Did that arrogant oil pan have the slightest clue what he was dealing with?  Who he was dealing with?  Thousands of years a pirate, eh?  How about being the guardian of a planet for —  
Piranha stormed into the stairwell, surging so hard against the heavy metal door that it slammed thunderously against the wall, reverberating up and down the dark metal stairwell like an avalanche.  Then it swung back, closing out the light and sound of the ship, sealing him into a dim, hermitic stillness.
Finally, he could take a deep breath.  Alone.
But he wasn’t.  On the landing above, a slight, skinny young slave leaped to his feet in panic, something falling from his hand.  
Piranha halted at the foot of the stairs, looking up at him.  The slave gaped back at him, motionless.
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 2
PIRANHA
Chapter Fourteen:  The Black Hole, Part Two

It was not a good-tempered Piranha that entered the Boss’s chambers promptly at 19:15.  There was nothing prepossessing about those obsidian eyes, glowing darkly in the shadow of that large black hat like patches of half-congealed lava.  There was nothing too engaging about the way he impatiently thrust the door aside, and the hat itself had a pugnacious tilt.
Anaconda, reclining grandly upon a chaise-lounge at the far end of the dark, ornately tapestried little room, smiled sardonically at the sight of him.
“Here he is at last!  My prize possession!” he exclaimed as Piranha stalked stiffly across the carpet.
A huge, flabby human, standing beside Anaconda’s couch, turned his head a little to see what had come in.  Quite instinctively, Piranha winced, as though smacked in the face by a powerful smell.  His eyes travelled incredulously up the expanse
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Piranha - Chapter 14, Part 1
PIRANHA
Chapter Fourteen:  The Black Hole, Part One

“It was brilliant, First Mate, brilliant!  You had the whole roomful of them oiled and running as smoothly as one single machine!  What a leader!  I’ve never seen anything like you!”
Hacker, his enormous white metal body folded practically in half to bring his face as close as possible to Piranha’s, scuttled alongside the first mate as he walked rapidly down the crowded corridor.  Piranha threw him a sour glance, but did not alter his stride.
Hacker’s striped pirate headscarf was set at a rakish angle, his gold-loop earrings (attached directly to his head, as he had no visible ears) jangled against his hollow skull.  Like most of the robots, his face was not very mobile; but his doubled-over posture (so sycophantic it amounted to sarcasm), his high-pitched synthetic voice even squeakier than usual, and the rapid rolling of his round, bal
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Piranha - Chapter 13: Tulik, Part 4: Coda
PIRANHA
Chapter Thirteen:  Tulik
Coda:   End of a Long Day

Author's Note:
Okay, enough!  I’m posting this before I start in on it again!
Sorry I gave you a premature warning on this section.  I thought it was done!  For weeks now, I kept sitting down to revise the past few bits – “It’s just about finished.  Okay, I’ll finish it tonight.” “Okay, I’ll finish it tonight.”  “Okay, this time I’ll finish it tonight!”  Unfortunately, the “couple of lines” I needed to fix turned into several pages that just got more and more unruly.  Tonight I decided that no matter what I ended up with, it was going to be finished!  So that’s it.
It doesn’t quite do what I want it to.  Just can’t seem to balance it right.  Ah well.  Life is short and art is w
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Piranha Chapter 13: Tulik, Part 3b
PIRANHA
Chapter 13:  Tulik
Part Three:  Stifled Ambitions
(continued)
This is the second bit of Chapter 13-Part 3.  I just split the chapter up to make reading easier.  Hope you enjoy.
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Piranha gave Tulik a wry look.  “You had to bring Anaconda the bad news?”
“That,” Tulik said, “was another revelation.  
“He had revealed samples of his temper before, of course.  Never pleasant, naturally.  But never till now had I seen his soul entirely naked, without any shred of self-control.  
“Until now I had managed to deceive myself that there might be some slight hope for a tolerable future.  That there might be some chance of cooperating with Anaconda to build a new City, in however crippled a form.  But now I could not avoid seeing the whole truth of what he was.  And knowing with certainty that there was no hope for
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Piranha Chapter 13: Tulik, Part 3a
PIRANHA
Chapter 13:  Tulik
Part Three:  Stifled Ambitions

From now on, unless DA changes its formats again, I’ll incorporate the author’s notes into the story itself.  An introduction at the end of 12,000 words is a bit useless.  I'll repeat the title at the beginning though so it shows up in the Lit icon.  
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Well, you’re almost through it – this is the last chapter of endless babble.  By popular demand (i.e., one person), I’m confusing things further by breaking up this chapter into two DA entries, but that’s purely to make it easier to read.  It’s all Part 3.  
After this, no more historical disquisitions!  There is a Chapter 13 Part 4, but it’s different (and very short).  Then we will be done with Chapter 13, and nobody could be happier about that than I am.  I’m hoping the rest of the story will go faster. 
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Clearleaf-Forest Featured By Owner Edited Aug 2, 2018  Student General Artist
I just wanted to pass by and say (even though I think I mentioned it before...?) That your fantastic fic Piranha has motivated me to start my own fic. Your incredible way of conveying atmosphere, emotion and immersion really brings your worlds to life! Every chapter I read, I can only just sit in awe for ages before I can carry on.  So I want to thank you so much for just inspiring me to do one. And for your lovely comments that encourage me too. 
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2018   Writer
I tried to answer this earlier but my answer got lost...

I'm very glad if I helped encourage you in any way.  Your art is so beautiful and full of emotion, and suggests so much depth of character, I'm sure your writing will be fascinating as well.

And thank you - it helps me keep going, too, when I hear that you get something out of my writing. 
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Clearleaf-Forest Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2018  Student General Artist
You are very welcome, and many thanks indeed. Likewise to your wonderful literature.
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tea Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Do you have power? or are you stuffing the leftover ice chips in your bra? Will stay cool anyway ya can.  
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2018   Writer
Ice chips in the bra sounds like a fantastic idea except that I'd be drenched in five minutes and hot again three minutes after that ... why, is there a power failure somewhere?  Hope you're staying cool where you are!
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tea Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
parts of LA had lost power. They had put out a heat warning. So put those chips in a baggie, unless the dripping is keeping you extra cool. 
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2018   Writer
Ah, I see!  I don't live in LA anymore ... moved to Arizona (where the heat's about the same, but more rain). 
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ClaireAimee Featured By Owner May 8, 2018  Student Traditional Artist
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OC-Alert Featured By Owner Edited Apr 4, 2018  Student General Artist
Good lord save Rayman hug him punch Anaconda into a sun.Ok Hand Emoji

By the way I did read your stuff on rayfics some time ago, not quite so my bag but I liked Death By Fish, Piranha in a nutshell aint it just?
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Edited Apr 4, 2018   Writer
Heheh, I guess it is, kind of a forerunner.  There were so many grisly deaths available in Rayman 2, but that one obviously made the most impression on me.
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FairyLy Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2018  Hobbyist Artist
Do you have a tumblr blog? I'd like to follow you.
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2018   Writer
Thank you, but no I don't.  I used to post stuff on LiveJournal once in a while (under the name sfwriter) and on Dreamwidth.org under the same name, but these days that stuff is mostly political blowing off steam.  I have some Rayman stuff on LiveJournal at rayfics.livejournal.com/ that I haven't posted anywhere else.  

Do you have a tumblr? 
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FairyLy Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2018  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you for the link, it will be interesting.
A bigger part of DA migrated to tumblr so I thought you too. I find you an interesting person so would like to read your stuff, not only about Rayman.
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Rayfan Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2018   Writer
Why, thank you!  I haven't been writing much on the internet for a while now.  Politics in this country is too insane for me to talk about, and I haven't thought people would be interested in my blatherings.  But there are some old things there, good and bad.

I also find you very interesting - I love your sly and clever art - so if there is anywhere else I can see any of it I would be interested to know.  I suppose if you write anything it would be in a language I can't read. :(
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OC-Alert Featured By Owner Edited Mar 15, 2018  Student General Artist
Also this happened
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