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Deep ghost-groves of freckled aspen
burn white beneath the winter sun,
whisper hoary adulation,
canticles for the Holy One.
And in the trees, the spirits dance
betwixt the motes of starry snow
illuminated by the lance
of lightning flash and candle glow.
All lights within this place combine,
reflect in splendour, white on white,
and mingle in a trance sublime
that breathes in peace through winter night.

The lofty heads of stately pine
rear up and brush the lowered sky
as if they could, by straightened spine,
so please the God who built them high.
Their incense needles, fragrant, fall
in silence to the chapel floor
and still above, they shade the hall
where ghosts who come by night adore.
Black on black, and brown by green,
create a hush bereft of light
where one may linger safe, unseen,
and sleep in peace through winter night.
Winter Park, Colorado, 2011.

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Ripplingwaves Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2014
Wow this is as poetic and as beautiful as Hardy's poems! Amazing Clap 
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2014  Professional Writer
;; Thank you so much!
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:wave: Hi! Your piece has been featured as inspiration in #Lit-Visual-Alliance's Winter Alliance Contest article! Please :+fav: the article to bring more attention to the features and the contest. Thanks! :)
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Just wanted to let you know this fabulous piece has been featured!: [link]

Keep up the beautiful work!
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart: Thank you so much!
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You are most welcome! :D
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Student General Artist
This is mesmerising, such fluency as well.
:D
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you! ^^
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Welcome :D
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
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Keep writing and keep creating.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Professional Writer
8D Thank you so much!
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MagicClare Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Theme/Concept: Excellent, handled with originality.
Structure: Good.
Language: Excellent. Contemporary with a touch of the antique, above-average word choices. Consistent. Good voice.
Grammar/punc.: Very good. Some tweaks needed.
Imagery: Outstanding.
Rhyme: Good, sometimes forced.
Meter: Very good. You are using iambic tetrameter consistently in Stanza 2, but Stanza 1 is flawed; you might want to consider editing for consistency there.
~ Really liked this overall. A superior piece for dA, which I do not have the pleasure of seeing often. Keep writing, friend! :rose:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for taking the time to critique!
Grammar tweaks? Oh, no! Could you point those out?
Stanza 1 started as free verse, and I've tried playing with it, but haven't been able to modify it to my satisfaction, so for the time being, it's staying as is. I keep losing content when I try to edit. xP
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MagicClare Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're most welcome. I only comment when I see excellence! :nod:

~ Grammar/Punc.: Just minimal tweaks.

Stanza 1:
• Line 8, a query: Do you mean "lightening" (hence the lance)?
Stanza 2:
• Line 5, comma after "fragrant" eases reading and emphasizes. (Yeah, that one's picky)
• Line 6, either comma or semi-colon after "floor" in this multi-clause construction.

Ahhh, begun as free verse! Understandable. I know what you mean about editing! xP :D

~ Clare :rose:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Professional Writer
^^ You're too sweet!

Line 8- No, it's lightning. It might need a hyphen, I suppose. It's meant as a modifier.
Commas noted. :) Thank you!
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MagicClare Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^ *blush* Thanks!

Line 8- Okay, you have "lighting." Lightning = noun; lightening = vt.; either can be used as modifiers.

Most welcome! :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Aaaah, yes. That's better. xD Thanks!
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MagicClare Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Again, most welcome! Ready for the "Ministry of Silly Walks" yet? :XD:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Professional Writer
Always!
Wait, what are we talking about?
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Hello! Your piece has been featured here. Kindly :+fav: the article, if you wish, to bring attention to the artwork and the contest. Thanks! :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2012  Professional Writer
Woo, contest! Let me get out my butt-kicking shoes. ;D Article faved.
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Professional Writer
Butt-kicking shoes. Excellent. :salute:
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haijinik Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Student Writer
well paced, worded and thought out.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you kindly. (I would hope it was well thought out. I sat for more than an hour trying to finagle the rhyme in the last stanza. xD That was when I still had free time.)
And thank you for the fave! <3
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haijinik Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Student Writer
inderdaad!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012   Writer
i. love. this.

so much.

this is marvelous.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2012  Professional Writer
<3 Thanks so much!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Professional Writer
:wow: This is so beyond amazing. The rhythm is just exquisite and I can picture it so perfectly in my head. Beautiful, truly...
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Professional Writer
:heart: You're so sweet! Thanks. >w<
And thanks for pulling me into your group! It looks like a spiffy thing. 8D
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You're welcome!

Thanks for letting me drag you in! :D
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Parsat Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012   Writer
You have amazing style and a powerful way with words...you don't bend to accommodate the form, the form bends for you.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012  Professional Writer
<3 Thanks!
But trust me, the form was a bear. xD
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Parsat Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012   Writer
I salute you, bear wrestler! :D
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Student Writer
Who are you and where has your poetry been all my life?
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Professional Writer
O_o Call me MR. I suppose it spends most of its time on my hard drive...
I'll take that as a compliment. :heart:
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li1121 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Student Writer
Poetry such as yours goes wanting in a world such as this.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Professional Writer
Then I shall have to let it out more often. :)
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This is absolutely beautiful, such strong yet gentle imagery. Wonderful work. :)
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Professional Writer
<3 Thank you! ^^
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You're very welcome. :)
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Awesome:D
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Professional Writer
<3 Thank you!
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Welcome:D
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Your work is featured in :iconpoets-and-warriors:
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2011  Professional Writer
Wow, thanks! <3
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You're welcome!
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Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011  Professional Writer
Wow, thank you!
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freuddwyn Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this :D the words rhyme really well. I feel like I'm reading a shakespeare.
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QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you! That's high praise. >w<
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