First of all; great thanks to the people who took their time testreading this! Put your hands together for cecegrace, Eleynah and IIGooglesII!!!
     

Sorry it took so long to write this thing. I wasn't in the mood to write this chapter, since it involves Khorrek trying to be observant, with only his own thoughts as company. It's actually 'chapter 1 - part 2' - hence the similar titles. And where is the cover art of this thing? Not here... I'm afraid it doesn't exist yet.

I'm just going to copy this from the previous chapter, in case you've forgotten: pronunciation. The 'ie' in Lienne must be pronounced 'the Dutch way', the same way as in 'Tolkien'. It is pronounced Leen-nuh (or something like that); not Lee-an-nuh. The other names should make sense all by themselves

Things to think about:

1. This chapter (together with chapter 1) was hard to write down, like I already said. It basically describes what a character sees, without him interacting with the subject. I find it hard to write 'bystander stories' like this, because I can't get rid of the feeling it's boring. Khorrek is luckily the kind of guy that can bring silliness to a story within a heartbeat, but it also makes the chapter longer than necessary… I don’t care that much about chapter lengths, as long as it doesn’t feel long… So what about this chapter, does it feel too long? Or slow?

2. This is just a continuation of question 1; what do you think of the part Khorrek shows his wordsmithing skills with equilibricks/bricksticks/broomsticks? Slow? Useless? Fine?
I thought that just telling what Sel and Moor are doing was boring (since the whole chapter is filled with it), so I added a bunch of Khorrek-thoughts. His equilibroomsticks mumbling is actually a personal joke; the word he is looking for is ‘equilibristics’, and one three reasons my story is called this way – I thought it was fun to name a book after a kind of juggling I’m going to call it ‘equilibroomsticks’ from now on though XD

3. The question that will always pop up here: I’m not a native English speaker, so if you see any grammatical errors, can you please point them out?

4. Well, this is more of an apology; sorry for Khorrek running after 2 of the 3 main female characters. The only reason Lienne gets spared is because she is too young. Is Khorrek acting too ‘slutty’ or can he get away with it?

5. What do you want to see as cover art for this chapter? I think I will go for Lienne showing her magical music - taken quite literally - but other ideas are welcome!

6. This is more a general question. Word count = 5.118. That's pretty normal for a book chapter I believe, but here on DA it looks like a huge wall of text. What would you do with such long texts? Split them up? leave them like this?

7. For the people who have been stalking me for a while and know what I am talking about: do you miss Orion yet?