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For this to be, might I say,
To wait for you for a better day,  
For you I ask will it be ok,
To whom I ask will the violin play?

A turn of the watch and forever thou stay,
Please keep in mind and please never stray,
It is thus the reason and we all should pray
A thousand times over and our flesh turns to clay.

This is the gray,
and we are the prey,
This is the fray,
and an endless delay.

For the days that we shall spend so far far away,
To all those drones upon which we must always pay,
For the lives we have destroyed in this fiendish cliche,
To the end of the line with you and starve the buffet,

Give me the reason I need to obey,
Relive me the treason I cede to betray,
Bring me the season, I bleed to dismay,
Sing me the reason I heed to portray,

And what of the feelings I wish to display?
Quote simply confusing "Hip hip hooray."
Hmm, I've never submitted any of my poetry to deviant art before. I thought this one was kind of cool though, so I went with my heart and posted it. I know not a lot of people on deviant art care for poetry, but I don't really care much for those people. I write lyrics for my bands, and I even started to make my own songs, so I have a deep respect for words. In any case, this work was an experiment, so it's not necessary that anyone read too deeply into the words. I was just trying to get a feel for the rhymes.
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beleave Featured By Owner May 28, 2014
you did well with the r6yhmes, flows very well.
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EternalAddict Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2007
I like the line about the violin,
To whom I ask will the violin play?
and the line about the buffet
To the end of the line with you and starve the buffet.

Granted, I like the whole thing, but those two stood out to me :D
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Quarl Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2007  Professional General Artist
ar, thanks. I'm glad you liked it :lol:
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meeden Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2007
expressive piece - "will the volin play"? wonderful question put in there. nicely written :silentkitty:
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Quarl Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2007  Professional General Artist
Arr, thanks for the comment :)
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