I did not know that I could love like this.
The duality the reader's experiencing--as (name) and as Leader--is truly (and I say this with absolute conviction) fascinating. They're mostly opposing forces, but they work together in an odd way to shape the reader overall. And the boys do too.
Along with the reader's duality are the boys that you've meticulously weaved into the plot; they're each vastly different from each other, but they all tie back into the same source that grounds them when needed: the reader. Your writing exemplifies their traits and characterizes them fittingly for this au. I also like how they're fiercely loyal to the reader in their own ways, furthering the bonds that they share with the reader.
Your writing is lovely, being some of the finest I've ever had the pleasure of reading.
I was connected with this piece. I could see it. I could hear the gray voices.
Pairing a color like gray with a voice and using it to describe the voice leaves a heavy impression in my mind. You didn't need to use fifty different words to describe a voice. You said it was gray. I heard the gray instantly. There are other examples of when you do this in your writing. It's breathtakingly beautiful, and I'm going to have to use this strategy, too, because it's one of the many components that fills each letter of text with a small puff of air.
The commentary on God is something I've yet to see done so mesmerizingly. There are a plethora of people that debate about the existence of God, and in this piece there were subtle snips of dialogue that play with that concept. It's not forced, nor is it completely removed. A perfect amount, if I do say so myself. This adds characterization to your work as well, because humans debate about God. So did these characters. You're bringing the characters off of the paper and letting them move.
Detail. Detail, detail, detail. How do you do it? There's enough to where I don't have to force myself to see it, and it's not overwhelming to the point where I have to take a moment and think. Fluidity is one of your many strong suits. When I read one of your works, I live in amazement.
I want to learn from you. Believe me when I say this: I love your work. I love its ability to teach me how far I can love your newest piece. I love how it can keep me on my toes the entire time. I love how I want to learn from you.
Get some sleep, because you deserve it. If you ever want to rant about ap bio or trade writing tips, know that I'm always here! ;D