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TEST DRIVE 1/2 by Psshaw TEST DRIVE 1/2 by Psshaw
For one of my school assignments, I chose to do a trial run of a couple pages of DFS to get a feel for where I’m at, comic-making wise. And I’m not exactly doing backflips over it, but I do know where to go from here. I promised myself I wouldn’t point all these awful flaws (apropos of absolutely nothing, perspective is really hard when you’ve been bullshitting it your whole career). So hey, let’s play critique bingo! Maybe you see something I don’t.

This is the actual script so far. These would be… pages 8-11 of the first chapter, approx. It’s the first time we meet Glenn, and a pretty calm scene considering the two incredibly violent ones it’s stuck between. AND WOWEE BEE, LOOK AT THAT EXPOSITION.
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DeadlyFever Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2016
man ages later and i still love this comic~
KeatonsGhost Featured By Owner May 20, 2013
I can't seem to offer critique because this page is PERFECTION. The heavy shadows prolonging Glenn's reveal are so so beautiful and I can never get enough of Alan's expressions. I love that smug mug o' his. Your lines and colors and composition are all so marvelous and now I'm freaking out a little over how excited I am to see this project take off into real comic pages.

eeeeeeee thanks for sharing! Even these test pages are a feast for the eyes. Cannot wait to get into the actual meat of the story.

...There may have been a pun in there.
ravengurl11 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, something that doesn't make me regret coming back to deviantart to clear out my inbox.
Allan's ":T" face must be a blessing to wake up to.
WickedGrin Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
"about to make a grocery run". Oh, let's see.. a gallon of milk, some eggs, deodorant.. mouth wash, breath mints..

HAAAAHH. I feel bad for the next,unsuspecting victim.
Psshaw Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Gloves, duct tape, some strong bleach...
Nay-sama Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student General Artist
I absolutely love your style! This is sick!!
defauts Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013   General Artist
Man, I gotta say I am always psyched to see you put out a couple comic pages, I really dig your sense of pacing and style of writing, it feels super lively and natural. Also, Glenn, I can always appreciate some more Glenn. (I feel like it's probably predictable that my favorite is Glenn EH HEHHH um. . .)
Psshaw Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
LIVELY AND NATURAL oh boy god dammit you're gonna make me pee myself. In a good way.

And I did sorta smile knowingly reading "I like Glenn" from you. ...Then a second time, at the end. You're cute.
oonacorn Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
Oh my god I saw this in my messages and was like "OH MY GOD IT'S HAPPENING" and I have a huge goofy smile on my face right now I love these guys.
Psshaw Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
HAHA I thought I might make some people misfire. NOPE, NOT TODAY.

Thaaank you!
octopusPaint Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013
OOOOOHHHhh fuck I got excited to see this in my messages
Nothing is exactly glaring; the composition and layout is real nice. The only thing I'd have to ask iiiisss: where is Alan coming from in the very first panel? You'd think he'd be headed from the front where he'd been driving. Unless I missed something.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing this grocery run c:<
Psshaw Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Wow, that does look weird! Unless you're me, and thusly know that he's just come in from doing something pretty awful.
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