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Saving Satanists Chapter 5

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So I went to school and I talked to Claudia in art class!!! "Hi Claudia!!" I said, and I smile at her, like real genie smile!

"Hi Chris" she says. I looks at her eyes through her glasses and there red!! Either she high on drugs, or she's sad, or she's sick!!

"Are you ok Claudia?" I asks. Cause I want to make sure she's okay!!!

"Yeah I'm fine go away" she says.

"Claudia, are you're sure?"

"Actual no. My boyfriend got departed."

"Like you mean kicked out off America??" I said. I gaped.

"Yep" she say. "They found drugs in his locket. And he got a bad grade in meth so they deported him!! And he's in jail in Sweden now!" She started crying.

"I'm sorry!" I say. "That must be awful!"

"Yeah, it really is" she said, tears were streaming down her cheeks. And she ran out of the art room. "nO CLAUDIA WAIT!" I scream as she run out the art room, and I ran after her.

"Go away!! Leave me alone!!" She said. Weeping.

"But Claudia please! Jesus loves you more than any boyfriend ever could! Please??"

"No. I HATE AT JESUS because he is a dum dum." She said. And tears went down her cheeks. And she went in the bathroom. I came after her.

"Please Claudia!" I said. "Just list to me."

"No my soul belong to Satan." She said. "And I'm going to go meet him."

"NO! Don't suicide yourself! Jesus can help you!" I said.

"No." she said and she slice her wrists with the paper towel dispenser!!!

"NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!" I said. I instantly called at 911. I saw there was blood come out her arm. I felt I was going to faint. But I prayed to Jesus. I said. "Dear Jesus, please help Satanen not die, and please give me strength to help her. I praise you and thank you for all you done for me. Amen." And I didn't faint!

I grab a paper towel out the paper towel dispense to stop the bleed until an ambulance showed up. "Claudia stay with me please" I said.

"Jesus is a dum dum! Go away you pervert." She said and she ran out the bathroom.

"No please you don't understand!" I said. And then the ambulance showed up. "Come on let's get you in the ambulance". And I took her to the ambulance, and the hospital, I went with her. She lost conscience. "Please Claudia stay with me! Your soul can't go at hell!" I said. I prayed to God again, to ask him for strength and guidance.

We got at the hospital emergent room and the doctors put her in a hospital bed and wheeled her off into Stiches. So they could stitch up her arm and make it better again. "Please God let Claudia live" I said.

I was in the waiting room and I thought maybe I should make sure my mom knows where I am so I text her "hi mom im in the er, cause my friend got hurt" and she aid "my goodness im so sorry ill be right there" and then she came in the hospital.

On a positive side I didn't have to go to physical scents where everyone was high in drugs. Cause I tried to tell the principle about everyone doing drugs and he said as a announce "A drug dog will come to school tomorrow and any individual with a drugs on them will be in a particular sorts of trouble." But they only caught the fat satanist who only had a tiny bit of drugs and the Mexican guy, who's name was Martin, with an accent mark on the i but I don't know how to do that in my diary on computer and his name was Martin and I heard he went to jail, but he got out because of his parents give him money to get out of jail. They didn't catch Mr Bryan or Jen or Kitty though because they stuck all there drugs in the fat satanists locker, because they laughed at him for believe in God and Satan.

"Hi Mom I'm so scared!" I said. "I'm afraid my friend Claudia is going to die!"

"Why don't we pray for her, again," she said and we prayed again. And then all a sudden a nurse came in the room!

"Hey are you friend of Claudia Olson??" She said. I said "yeah." She said "She's doing much better now, and she's got Stiches and she should be okay soon! She wants to talk to you though!" "I said okay" and then I came in her room!

"Hey Claudia," I said. "How you doing?"

"I'm doing better. I need to talk to you. I had a vision when I was lost conscience."

"Oh? What did you see?"

"I was dangling over a pit of fire with spikes, and it was just me, and then something kept stabbing me really hard but no one was there! But then I saw a glowing man, and he talked to me and said it will be okay and he helped me get out and then I woke up! What does that mean, Chris?"

"That means that Jesus is trying to save you, and get you out of what Satan did to you. You just have to except Him into your heart." I said.

"How do I do that?" she said.

"First you admit you're a sinner then believe Jesus is your Lord and Savior and then confess that he is Lord!"

"Okay, she said. "Dear God, I'm sorry that i sinned against you, and betray at you, and did so many evil things, I believe you are my Lord and Savior, and please come in my heart! Amen!"

"You did it!" I said.

"I feel so much happy now!" She said. And then I thought her a hymn, and we sang it.
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1st you bash against gays , now you force claudia to become a christian , wow , you're a worse storywriter than i thought
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They found drugs in his LOCKET and he got a bad grade in METH so they deported him and he's in Sweden's jail???

I am pretty sure that an investigation would be done if someone had drugs in their locker that someone who had it in their said wasn't theirs, and I am pretty sure he would point the finger at Mr. Bryan and his weed-smoking students who are all high in school and smell of weed and would probably take them all to jail or juvie for underage sex and drug use, since those things are against the law in any state in America, and would probably be able to figure out that they put the drugs in the locker of the 'fat satanist'.

Also, why would anyone anywhere in America deport someone simply for a bad grade in math? No one would do that to any foreign exchange student in ever.

I think perhaps you have some sort of vengeful and jealous streak against totally-not-Satanen's totally-not-boyfriend, given the fact that you constantly portray him as fat, lazy, not having a job, using stupid gamer stereotypes from Fox News, using stereotypes of men not playing with dolls that makes you sound like some sort of jock or annoying manly man dad in a bad sitcom, and clearly wrote this to act out a fantasy against him so you could claim an effigy of Satanen in your bizarre fanfiction full of bad fanfiction level writing.
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I DONT HATE DEPRESSIVE MADNESS HE JUST NEEDS GET A JOB AND STOP BE A PERVERT AND. STIP WEAR TRENCH COATS IS ALL. AND THERE WAS METH IN THE FAT SATANISTS LOCKER THATS WHY THEY DEPARTED HIM.
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What he does or doesn't do and what he does and doesn't believe doesn't give you the right to stereotype, judge, slander, and insult him, which if you read your book, you would know that your God would be tell you not to do to others because it's wrong, especially when it comes off very highly that your reasons for doing so is because he is Satanen's boyfriend, who is a lady you have made not only multiple journals about, made multiple pictures of converting her about, and made a bizarre fanfic of converting her to a self-insert, but have harassed endlessly with the cringeworthy preaching.
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...Sounds suspicious and heavily like some sort of weird self-insert fantasy.

Imaging yourself and your ideals as great and important is one thing, but in terms of making a story, it is actually ultimately counterproductive and rather off-putting when one puts their ideals out their like this, which is part of the reason my own stuff makes me cringe too many times at how inexcusably bad it was when I did that kind of thing and I started to cancel them in favor of rebooting them more for fun and in telling a good story with believable characters.

Making a villain an SJW, or a fundamentalist, or a Satanist can be done well, but saying they are bad because of such views is not a good idea and if you are going to show people of that view being bad people, they have to still be written as believable characters. The thing about evil in real life is that people who do evil often do evil because they feel they have no choice because circumstances forced them to take such measures just to survive, or they are people who are reacting to what is or what they perceive to be an injustice that they take way too far in trying to address, or are people who have good motives and intentions yet compromised their principals in trying to carry to them out and became monsters because of it without realizing it, or are struggling with trauma or some form of madness that they are fighting yet can't control that ends up hurting people or things like that. Being evil merely because an ideal is perceived as evil or doing evil because evil are both not good ways to pull off compelling villains and come off as cartoonish strawmen.
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No, It's not a self insert fantasy cause it's Chris, not me!
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Dude...it's obvious to everyone who knows of the kind of things you do and have done on the internet that it's a self-insert fantasy.

You obviously know it is, you obviously know that the 'characters' in it are how you see yourself and other people and are carrying out your fantasy of what you want while going up against cardboard cutouts of people you believe are unrealistically evil, not to mention you've gone full bad fan-fiction of having your obvious self insert fiction get rid of the boyfriend of someone you wanted for yourself, and you obvious know that, which means you are not only lying, but used the veil of Christianity to basically tell a story about you getting your way by the power of plot convenience to ship your obvious self insert with a character that represents a lady that you are lusting for.

 
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But Claudia is Claudia, not any real satanist who become Christian! And how is get my face shoved in a water fountain a plot convince?
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Lol, your understanding of how belief systems work is amazing.

Also, prayer is mind control troupe. Not saying it is in real life since it's ridiculous to say that nor do I believe that any sort of God would act in such a way towards people since it's counterproductive, but...when in stories, when it is used to somehow magically convert someone into a religion, it most certainly is.

Also...you got rid of characters that were in the way of your character's goal, particularly Claudia's boyfriend, simply for the purpose of 'saving her soul' and converting her to you-I mean "Christian Preecher"
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Nuh uh there was an conflict, my character isnt a "Mary Sue" or whatever you call at it.
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Sorry, you character is a Gary Stu.

Which sadly is common in even professional Christian fiction in any form of media, which is apparent to me for a number of reasons, particularly how they treat everyone that isn't a Christian as an unreasonable savage monster like the worst of the worst of fedora tippers mixed with Prince of Darkness instead of a human being because of their beliefs to propel a heavy handed message, or when a conversion story uses prayer as mind control, claims everything goes bad if you don't believe in Christ while claiming everything goes right for believing in Christ, or when miracles from God make God into the plot convenience fairy over things that I am sure a real deity doesn't care about because they have better things that they could be doing and would probably advise people to work hard at what they're doing and do their best while doing it or tell people to take medication or tell people to seek councilling or therapy or go to a hospital or tell them straight up that first world problems don't concern him and that they are being selfish for expecting him to care about them.
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Aww :(
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Did the fat satanist resemble this?www.travisfaulk.com/wp-content…
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Kinda but no beard, and bag and even fatter.
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Oh jeez, I'm surprised he hasn't died of heart failure already if he's so huge....:lol:
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But he was departed.
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:wow: Wow ... What? Wait ... It all went so fast. :O :confused:
How? Claudia/Satanen would never, EVER ...  Especially not so quickly, not so easily, and not like this .... do ... that. She must still be in shock from the blood loss, or dazy from medicine or something.
I'm not sure whether you're put in jail in Sweden for having some drugs in your locker on the other side of the world. Most cetainly not for bad grades, lol. And I wouldn't believe she'd be so hopeless as to do a suicide attempt over that. She'd much rather take some serious action instead. Why not travel after him with a firm determination, burn the f*cking jailhouse down to save her love, and praise the flames that set him free? Oh, I know. 'Cause it's satanic. :blush:

Also some of your typos seem so well put that I'm suspecting they might actually be hidden puns ... :D
Like "They found drugs in his locket. And he got a bad grade in meth ...". That would be a great pun if it wasn't a typo, or is it? Who knows! It still is very amusing either way. Just like 'Physical Scents'. I instantly imagine a sweaty body-odour in that classroom somehow, every time I read that, lol. And then there's "suicide yourself". Who ever else are you gonna suicide? :la: 
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My typos are typos, im NOT A TROLL.
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Ok. I'm not saying that you are. ;) I didn't mean to hurt your feelings. But it is just funny, the way some typos come out brilliantly like they do. Like the meth one; in earlier chapters you did write 'math', but funny coincidence has it that you just typod in this one sentence about drugs, where it fits in like a pun... :P Whatever's the case, troll or not, I do enjoy these writings very much. :giggle:
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Oh, okay so you saying my typos make my writing better? :D
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I think, however unintentionally,  it does give that extra touch to your writing, which makes it all the more a joy to read. So yes, I do think your typos complement your work in a way. :D
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Oh thank you? Should I not use at spellcheck then?
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No, I do think it's better to just use spellcheck anyway. :nod: Especially since you say those typos are not deliberately planted, then it surely couldn't be your intention to have me enjoy them the way I do?... Too many typos could become a threat to the story also, as they make it way harder to follow. So, just keep on using the spellcheck. :aww:
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Oh okay :D
I'm glad they bring enjoying at you, but I will still use spellcheck to catch the real bad ones, the ones that aren't words.
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