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Skippy99 posted a critique on Home alone

I'm having a bit of a hard time with this image. As part of a set where she is moving from one room to another, it is probably fine. I'm guessing that the reason you like it is the light reflecting off of the model's perfect and upright semi-profile and because it shows something of her personality that might not be present in other images. She is looking down and smiling, conveying a certain level of modesty toward the viewer, or perhaps a look-away smile that conveys intimacy. To take another guess, I'd say you were walking with her from the window wall on the other side of the dining room where you shot earlier to another area of the house when you noticed the light at this spot and asked her to drop her gown so you could shoot it. This image is her slightly bashful response. If that isn't the story, it should be. The image does a great job of showing off how beautiful she is in that light. 

This is one of those images where the first thing you look at is the beautiful model. But after looking at her for a minute, you realize there is a train wreck going on here, too. The dining room table is cluttered with, what, her make-up? Some of your equipment? I think I see a coffee cup. The sideboard to the left is also distracting but at least it is in focus. THIS would have been the place to put the flowers. And lastly, the way she is dragging her gown is a little puzzling. In other shots it was a valuable tool to scatter light or provide contrast. Here, it looks like it is tied to her hands. 

Three things I can think of here. First, it is really easy to get so excited about a shot, the lighting, the model or what she is doing, that you forget what else is going on within the frame. You honestly did a very good job with what you had here, but the location was not the best choice. 

Second, if you don't already do this, think about scripting a little. If you only have a model or a location for a couple of hours, scope out and set-up every location you are going to shoot from. Plan out every room and then plan the walk from each room to the next. Make the entire day a story and place props to support that story. This shot would be completely different if there was food and mimosas on the table along with roses and even something as dumb as box from a jewelry store on the sideboard. This turns an otherwise cluttered image into an image with a story. The story is that you had breakfast together and gave her a gift for some special occasion. She is now giving you a gift in return. 

Ok, all that aside, this image still has a completely legitimate place in one of your books. Call it what it is: A behind the scenes shot. Many pros get a lot of mileage out of impromptu shots like this by categorizing them as behind the scenes. You can too. And by calling it that, all critique about background, etc., will just vanish because this isn't part of the shoot, it is documenting a shoot that many people would like to know more about, see more of and be a part of. 

Take care and keep up the excellent work!
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I imagine the sunlight coming in is through a hazy, partly-cloudy mid-morning, but strong, for all the light that there is, considering the shadows from the chair legs are not more solid. I'm not sure this is being fair to you, but with all that dining-room in the background it seems `cluttered`
But its perfect for her. Oh, how my fingers could drift up and around the curve of hip, gliding across the small of the back before ascending up... up...and over at the acromion. Letting her tresses pass through my fingers as, with just my pinky, gently claw them back and away from how the neck sits now, with it leaning just a little forward.
My first 2 fingers slip down those warm red strands to perhaps land on the infraspinous fossa, dance and frolic across all manner of her rhomboid...
Only to be replaced by my lips... they tip-toe over the trapezius, turn, and I let them ghost up to kiss along the delicate shell of a now exposed ear....
Your creature as presented here is indeed a living flame.
Of which I desperately find her to be most radiant and inviting.
If you haven't quite guessed yet, Yes! I liked this picture very much, indeed.
Thank you!!!
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viewer1940 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2018
This is one of those photos that's good ... and has, some elements that are a distraction. The light models the lovely body of the model, showing her curves and figure extremely well. The dining table in the background is, as you say, a train wreck. The counter to the model's left isn't a problem. In an after the fact process, I might use photoshop to further blur the background and soften any bright points (like the coffee cup? at the edge of the table) to make them less distracting. I'd even consider dropping the contrast of the background just a little, too ... anything to reduce the distraction.

FWIW, with my first camera, I shot a photo of several friends in their high school graduation gowns in front of a fireplace. It was only later that a "sunburst clock" (shiny gold) was noticed as perfectly aligned with the head of one of the group, giving the impression of a halo... (I learned a lesson that day...) But it is a common error to focus too much on the model, and fail to notice the stuff in the background. Nearly every photography text book mentions such errors. (And yet, they still occur...)

The "too bad" aspect of this photo is that the model is so beautifully exposed and a better background would have made an ideal photo. But don't feel bad ... on the whole your work is very good to excellent. So the occasional miss is merely a disappointment, not a disaster. 

The Skippy99 critique is very good and complete, so I'll not repeat any of his points.
mkps111669 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2018
ianni67 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2017
Another great picture. But this time, instead of just clapping my hands, I wonder why did Pavel cut the lower legs and feet of the model? I would rather see the whole pose. Perhaps bare feet, on her tiptoes.
BlackFlame-FR Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2017
Beautifully shot! I love it. Thank you for sharing!
Kal-el4 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2017
LETMESEEBEUTY Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2017
Classic cool and gorgeous
jasongross2911 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2017
mmmmmmmma ma
Clairedye Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2017   Photographer
Perfect :flirty:
Davinchi-Savant Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
you have a naked angel on your patio... keep shooting.
goddessbuilder Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2017
Mary Jane Parker proudly steps over the beaten , unconscious body of Super girl ....disrobing over the world can see the body that DEFEATED  Super girl.....her nipples still ROCK HARD from the power struggle with the Kryptonian ...." I warned her...that she was no match for me!.....she CLEARLY didn't listen .....I've waited SO LONG for this use my mega HOT spidey infused body and advanced me MORE than enough raw POWER to CRUSH HER......she couldm't BELIEVE how STRONG I've become!!"
DragonSMP Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
She looks cold, she can have my shirt if she wants.
ravenstark Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2017
such a beautiful model a simple pose and setting just love it
enonorez Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
fred1009 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2017
Nice lighting. The background suggests that her secret fantasy is to be naked in the family dining room.   
silentwhale42 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2017
I like your comment.
LtWire Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2017
Very nice shot!
Serendipity1st Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017
Looking good:clap: 
Bnuldun Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Incoming Rewdius' novel length of a comment. 😏
AlfRomeo Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Student Photographer
Bonjour, je trouve dommage la coupure des pieds et du retombé de tissu qui aurait fait un beau drapé, donc jolie photo, beau, très beau modèle au magnifique corps, mais pour moi, cadrage inadapté.
JoergJohannMueller Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely. Wonderful work!
Davinchi-Savant Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
wow... gorgeous shot. Salute.
Goomuin Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
Amazing photo! :dummy:
MasterColonel Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Artist
Is this why every woman does at home, be naked all the time.
gooeyness Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017
wowee she is a goddess
NdrN Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017
Very beautiful!
SterlingFineArt Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Photographer
MichaelCPhotography Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017   Photographer
Kitsuchan59 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017
Very nice photograph.  Ands sexy as well.  ^_*
gdpr-14917625 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Digital Artist
Great furniture! Looks more like a restaurant than a home, though... :D
Beautiful model, also. ;)
Chaosfive-55 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
The very image of youth and beauty!!!
picofthenight Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017
Beautiful picture of a delightful young lady!
Alembic-Lynxx Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Photographer
As always beautiful as ever stunning quality of Photography lighting tone balance of all elements and beautiful model
HachimakiX23 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2017  Professional Artist
Heart U Heart 
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