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DJ in bed

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4644x6482px 15.8 MB
Make
Canon
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Canon EOS 5D Mark II
Shutter Speed
1/30 second
Aperture
F/2.8
Focal Length
34 mm
ISO Speed
640
Date Taken
Aug 10, 2012, 9:24:35 PM
Sensor Size
30mm
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Thriem's avatar
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In short terms, I'd appreciate that <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="32" height="17" alt=":devart:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="7" title="deviantART"/> would separate such 'artworks' to different sites, since it becomes more and more flooded with such images.
However, this picture 'DJ in Bed' by photoport (link would break my formatting) is appreciated and gives me faith that there will be better times in future... maybe.

Version
Since Critiques are a personal stuff and i am a person as well, I'd like to say, that I am currently on a huge music trip and and so I like it a lot, when music touches our everyday-life - and I like seduce and tease. So I see quite something of myself here.
However, on second thought it does not make any sense, because the headphones won't play any music - but that's just a little flaw. I'd like a scene, like she be in trance with closed eyes and completely lost to music. There I'd nothing to say.
For certain, she is a beauty and I respect all women who are looking good with short hair - like she does.
In summary, the scene appears a bit plain and go for the "eye-catch". But the impact it land, is a nice one.

Originality
Well, as mention in my Vision part, I think it is a little plain, less reason and i think posing is a model's and actor's act and have less in common with artists creativity. Like the painter has to know how to paint, the photographer has to know how to photograph. Would it be a random snapshot, I had gone insane. But to let your model pose is not just that amazing.
In summary, for a photography I miss something there.


Technique
Well, I don't know the original image, so I do not see the photoshop-skills here, but at all, I see your point. The teasing atmosphere is here and leads (me) to many positive feeling - music - tease - self-confidence and self-assessment. And beautiful women are beautiful, simply it is.
In summary, she is lovely and many things done right here. But I can't bring myself to honour the work of a photographer.

Impact
Well, there is the huge strength of this shot. Who does not like the sight of a lovely woman, only waring a top and the perspective won't allow you to see any more as the she wants you to. Her appearance is a strong, forceful one - so the only one who blush will be you.
So, or at least something like that comes to my mind looking at this image.


Summary:I think, some motion would add a nice touch, or a mind-lost gesture (like half-closed eyes in combination of a lip-bite - to lead to an assumption, that she is listening to 'Sex Bomb', or a crazy smile...) - you lost quite some potential there, she does not express that much. But still, one of the upper-half shots on <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/d/d…" width="32" height="17" alt=":devart:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="7" title="deviantART"/>
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First, I must say this is a very striking piece. The composition and the lighting, especially across her back is wonderful. The soft warmth of the colors adds to the feel of the scene and works very well with the soft focus effect. However, having her waist in focus while the strong expression on her face is blurry is confusing. It looks unintentional, and distracts from the face, but does help to move the eye around the rest of the composition. It may be better to soften the areas that are in focus to bring attention back to the face. Also, the retouching work is a little sloppy and especially noticeable around the headphone cord and behind her back where the blur isn't applied all the way to the edges of the in focus area. The scene is simple, but with enough to lead the imagination and the model is posed splendidly with just the right amount of make up for the shot. It all looks natural enough, but maintains a bit of a surreal quality to it. As a bit of a nit-pick, I like the shock of hair across her face, but it would be nice if it wasn't so much. Overall, it's quite stunning, and with some refinement, it could be a beautiful piece.
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I feel like this might have been an opportunity almost achieved. The pose and background are interesting, but the angle the camera it's at makes the pose a bit awkward and unsatisfying. The way the far leg disappears makes her look as if she might tip over any second, and if the camera had been positioned slightly to the left, would give a glimpse to said knee. That angle would also help improve the torso issue, which is mostly the arm against the breast giving the illusion of a lack of ribcage, which to be is a bit jarring. It also would show the far arm, which would also be more satisfying given how it also being pressed against the torso makes it just disappear. A slight different angle might also give it a more welcoming appearance, whereas as it is, the viewer is being given a cold shoulder, so to speak. Given the subject is naked on the bed, I would expect a more welcoming feel is intended, but I cannot be positive that was the intent of the photographer.

The slight blurry nature of the image is actually a positive, as it makes this feel as though it was a spur of the moment shot. I personally quite enjoy "natural" or relaxed photos, as opposed to really elaborate set ups, so it gives it an impromptu feel. Something like what a lover would take of the person they adore.
vanHoen's avatar
I think this comment is informative at first but also really confusing. In the first part you describe how everything is slightly off and you give your well worded opinion on how you yourself would like to see the picture and how exact and precise the picture should be.
Then in the last part you make a 180 degree turn in opinion and say that you prefer the spur of the moment and relaxed and natural and impromptu type of photo's. Thát opinion would make this picture spot-on and contradict your sugestions in the first part.
Could you give an explaination on this? it intrigues me. ;)
kartos's avatar
I was afraid it might come off that way!  Not everything that is candid really is, and I was meaning the candid nature was more on how well the model is working the pose given/made, and the way the camera is handling the lighting and whatnot. I'm sorry I'm really tired right now, but did that clear it up? If not I can explain better later?

(basically i feel like if it had been slightly to the left it was have been perf to me?)
darkappz's avatar
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Maraviloooooosa modelo, muy bella chica. La pose muy sexy en especial las curvas que define su cuerpo, los paravertebrales y los ojos del sacro se ven muy bien, así como la caída de su cola! mas la pose de pierdas y pies juntos. Buena expresión aún mejoraría la luz en su rostro. Buena luz de fondo y tonalidad de la foto en general.

Lo que no me gusta es el desenfoque desde su cabeza, me genera vibración y me molesta!

De todas formas la composición me gusta bastante. Esta muy bien lograda aunque si modifican el desenfoque y la luz a su rostro quedaría de lujo!

Mil besos para la modelo, me encanta su estructura osea y sus curvas desde esta toma!!! muuack! ;D
Hola. .vi tu critica a la anatomía de la chica (DJ in bed), y veo que mencionas 'los paravertebrales y los ojos del Sacro.

La curiosidad me lleva a preguntar, si en lo primero te refieres al complejo muscular Erector Espinal (compuesto por varias entidades), que en la chica sobresale bien, porque se acompaña de depresiones longitudinales en el límite lateral de dicho Erector, así como de la depresión media por la columna, que le ayuda a sobresalir.
En lo segundo, asumo que te refieres a dos depresiones simétricas y equidistantes del área sacra, que en este caso y por el ángulo, en mi opinión, no se observan en la modelo.

Anexo una dirección de una foto de Dmitry Chapala, que muestra lo que creo, que en tu narrativa se refiere a los ojos del Sacro.
www.dmitrychapala.com/upload/i…

Por otro lado, coincido en tu crítica, sobre todo en el tenue desenfoque que tiene, no es muy agradable, porque no permite admirar plenamente la silueta en conjunto, sobre todo de su curvilineo bajo-dorso y área glútea. . .Un saludo. 
darkappz's avatar
Si, exáctamente! creo que los músculos longisimos son los que dan esa visión de una fantástica cordillera que va de su cervical a esos lindos glúteos.

2: Ciertamente los ojos del sacro es un termino más bien poético, y con ello me refiero a los 2 de las 4 puntas de diamante que se forman con el coxis, sacro y la última vertebra lumbar.

Ahora si me preguntas los puntos exáctos, ufff por más que busque no encontré el artículo que leí hace poco tiempo atrás, al parecer lo guarde muy bien jejejeje
...al fín alguien le dio respuesta a mi inquietud, que si bien es solo estética quería saber la información más concreta de donde y porque se provocaba la depresión que yo aludía a las apófisis del sacro y ahora esté profesional me hace ver que es parte de un bello diamente ;)

Seguiré buscando la información y te la haré llegar a penas la encuentre

Y gracias por esa maravillosa foto. Gran maestro Dmitry (no lo conocía) y sus modelos uffff una bendición Love 
darkappz's avatar
Ya lo encontré:

Hoyuelos o Pozos de Venus: Son dos vértices del romboide de Michaelis.

Romboide de Michaelis:
Espacio anatómico comprendido entre:
La apófisis espinosa de la quinta vértebra lumbar
Las espinas ilíacas postero-superiores
Y el punto de unión de los glúteos
Debe su epónimo al obstetra que lo describió en el siglo XIX, el alemán Gustav Adolph Michaelis.

Y aquellas bellas mujeres con suerte de tenerlos, una ma-ra-vi-lla xD
Aquí otros hermosos retratos:

alfred-georg.deviantart.com/ar…

alfred-georg.deviantart.com/ar…

abrito.deviantart.com/art/no-t…

hely29.deviantart.com/art/Ke-I…

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Sniper0092's avatar
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I think the girl is very hot, very unique-looking. I love her hair style, short hair is cool. The lighting is good, the picture is a bit blurry, but makes it look cool to me at least. The way she is positioned is just very spot on, it gives it some emotion.
Some things that can make it better are maybe candles, or if she was in sheets, perhaps roses on them. It would not only give it a romantic look (If that is what you want) it would just make the whole thing look damn cool.
I hope you liked my response, please critique my novel in my signature if you want. Also as an extra, she has a nice ass.

~Sniper0092
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Reiska's avatar
Now that's a body, a sculpture - like beauty. Yummy smiley 
StavrosFromPVegeta's avatar
Do brahmacharya they said, it's be fun they said...
WurnBlade's avatar
Omg she looks like Toph from Avatar the last air bender <3 so cute
HammerinInkminer's avatar
...going to bed would never be an issue with someone like this waiting on it -- very nice.
vozssler's avatar
she has such a ANIME face... that I think the focus should have been there...
Pelenal's avatar
So anime haha  :)
EV-Chad's avatar
I can enjoy mixing with the power of your vagina until my own judgement fights me... is there a covenant between the single?
RobertLeeErdody's avatar
nice erector spinea
The level of perfection little DJ exhibits frightens off most of her competition.....
RattlerJones's avatar
don't give me wrong, this makes me do addicted to that babe and her bottom
kenartkelowna's avatar
Beautifully done!
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