The New Narnia- Chapter 6: Meanwhile On EarthRealm
Diaper Reality part 2(Commission for Foxingtoniii)
Diaper Reality part 1(Commission for Foxingtoniii)
Learning to Play Nice - Part 2
You really are a master at the slow mental regression trope: easing your character into new think while bits of old think drift back in and start mixing together. I don’t think even the infamous long_rifle is quite as skilled.
This one has some major Better Late Than Never vibes but is a lot more streamlined. I would say it is the stronger piece since it is more concise than your longer story.
The epilogue is really rewarding and sells the ending. With a lot of these kinds of stories you have the whatever that happens and that’s the end of it. You get no real sense of what the character’s new life will be like. You’ve been pretty good at including epilogues, but I’d say this is your best one yet. It holds the promise of more things to come and leaves the future to the reader’s imagination.
Well written personalias and as always thanks for the story.