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from the comfort of your color house
you star to me, i feel it
all the way to streetlights flitting
on the front panes of my own

so i take it in my teeth
to taste the light while i am dreaming
from your breaths i build my own breaths
from your glow i make a home

(what about it being hungry open-
coated in the moonlight when i
love you when you tell me you will
listen if you ask me for a poem so
we promise with the tickets pressed
like silver in our hands.)
this one is also for class and its due in 14 hours and i just finished it i have one more poem i have to write bt now and then but im so tired and im falling asleep so i'll just habe to deal w it tomorrow during work i guess. also note 2 self i have to post the other poem from the last workshop but that was so unfinished i might as well wait until i do the final draft of it? anyways i love [redacted] with my whole entire heart its real crying hours
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pansydiv Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2018  Professional Writer
i love this so much!!
fun fact: it's Diwali, festival of light, and i know im reading this poem very late & much after it was posted but it is surprisingly fitting??? feels like magic <3
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PatchworkLynx Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2018   Writer
:heart: that final stanza... no, this whole thing XD
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2018
from the comfort of your color house
you star to me,
This is one hell of an opening for an amazing poem!
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2018   Writer
I love that second strophe.
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slenderblade Featured By Owner Edited Oct 29, 2018
i felt every breath of this in my mouth and it was cold and crisp to me but suddenly warm

and I'm whisked away in your paintings as always
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