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As a whole it is very well put together, I like the image. It displays a lot of emotion, the dragon looks well proportioned and posed. The stone floor looks good, enough detail to be intresting but not too much as to take the eye off the dragon.

Things that I think could make the image even better;
(I hope this is useful)

More texture or shading on the dragon as to my eyes it seems a little flat.

Some sort of reflection or shine on the blood to make it seem more like liquid.

The dragon casting shadows on it self would add a lot to the depth of the image.

The Stepped Temple structure at the back could do with being a little more 3d to give the background more depth. (unless its just a wall patten not a temple then its fine) Because of it the stares wail looking like they are going back in to the image clash slight with the stepped temple. If the pillars are meant to be round not square their bases need to be rounded not just a straight line and a little more shading to bring out the shape would help.

Because of the lack of shadows / texture on the dragon and the lack of depth of the stepped temple the wings do not stand out enough from the stepped temple.

All and all a very good piece of art.

This has a lot of potential, it is well written and jumps right in to the middle of things (the best way to do things in my mind). You nicely set up the relations between the characters, the fact something might be chasing them, that one of them was attacked and the voice in the main character's head. All this leading to promises of the plot to come in the rest of the book. It is always good when a story shows it has a direction it want to go in even if it does not tell the reader where that direction will end up.

The initial descriptions of the location and the other dragon would carry more weight if they has some emotional overtones. With a few words you could tell the reader a lot about how the main character feels about both the surroundings and the dragon wakes up to. I know it is explain more later but the readers expectation are formed in the first few lines of meeting a character or seeing a new location so it is important.

Everyone is defined by their thoughts and emotions, as the view is fixed from the main character's perceptions having all the descriptions flavoured by his thoughts will make it a more griping read, and will allow the reader to come to know the character quickly.

Even a little hint of why they are running, how they feel about being watched. Even a stray though, to say what at least in the character's minds is going on. It does no not need to give much away. People do not normal run unless they have a reason.

At the moment with out a break in the text or some note that time has passed it does not seem like they ran very far.

The story is fine with out them but I think more descriptions from senses other than vision would add to it becoming more real, if the dragons in your setting have senses shaper than human, like hearing or their sense of smell it is important to drop little hints to this all the time so if they notice something that a humans should not be able to notice it does not seem too out of the blue that the suddenly got this new ability when they did not have it before.

I think indenting new paragraphs would make it easier on the eyes to read but that is a small formatting note.

The end is very good as it leaves it self open but encourages the reader to think what could happen next. I hope these comments prove useful to you and keep up the good work (I my self can not wait to read the next bit) <img src="e.deviantart.com/emoticons/p/p…" width="15" height="16" alt="" title="+fav" />

As all ways the forms of your dragons look good, great even, you have a real talent for drawing dragons. The addition of the scales make the surface texture of the dragon look more interesting, helping the dragon stand out from the water. I like the work on the wings the scales on the fingers and the shading on the membrane makes it seem to have a physical volume in the image.

I think the image could be enhanced if there was shadows, there highlights on the dragon that really fits with the scales but there seems to be very little in the way of shadows.

A shadow under the dragon (Assuming that the light is coming from above) with the light level in the water fading becoming darker as you move towards the bottom of the image, would I believe enhance both the look and the mood of the piece. The dragon also does not seem to be casting any shadows on it self, this would enhance the depth of the image.

To my eye the back wring could use a little work to make it appear to be curving the other way (as it is on the other side) The should be just a case of a little more shading in the right places.

You should be happy with what you have done with this image. <img src="e.deviantart.com/emoticons/p/p…" width="15" height="16" alt="" title="+fav" /> Keep up the good work <img src="e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)" />