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  • Sep 30
  • Argentina
  • Deviant for 5 years
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My Bio
I drift through life, time slips between my fingers like a stream of water.

I also sometimes make warthunder skins

live.warthunder.com/user/pachu…

Favourite Visual Artist
Pierre-Auguste Renoir
Favourite TV Shows
Marvel's daredelvil, BSG, Spice and wolf, RWBY
Favourite Bands / Musical Artists
the silent comedy
Favourite Writers
Jules Verne
Favourite Games
mount & blade, freespace 2
Favourite Gaming Platform
PC
Tools of the Trade
markers, pencils, paper, KRITA and intuos draw

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I liked the emblem it was my favorite thing becouse it complemented the outfit so well , it was unfair of me not to put more enphasis on that,and the owner of the gunblade I belive is called squall (never played any FF games tho).
you shoud definetly have showed the weapon transformation that woud have helped redeem the weapon a bit. Im glad you found the comentary helpful, and I hope it helps you to grow as an artist.
Kyran Rhodes:Reference Sheet[comm]
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

you requested a critique, here you go.
Im going to start by saying that on tecnique you're fine.I do traditional art and this is a digital picture and therefore it is hard for me to judge how hard it actually is to produce, but I know that if i were to attemp this char, results would be similar, then again I consider myself bad at drawing.
moving onto the design itself: the first thing I noticed is the general scrubbyness this character has, not that I have anything versus chars like that but a student with such beard(not just a stubble) feels odd, add to that the grey long hair and the scar and you have a character who is supposed to be learning yet shows signs of having vast experience.
next up, sorry but I have to, Ive seen that arm and gun-sword elsewere... seriously tho the arm feels unecesary, all it does is add another sign of experience to char who is supposed to have little of it, and the gunblade... just feels very unimaginative, even if you did alter the design a bit.
the artist presents us with two vastly different outfits for the character , but first I will take a moment to complement the footwear, it's a versitile pair of shoes (although he should be wearing formal shoes with the uniform, I'l let that slip). the first outfit transmits an elegant character, it is a long sleeved coat with shirt, tie and pants, all in black and blue while the second is a very informal shirtless , sleveless outfit with a scarf. this is a bit of a dilemma since they're both good in their own right but they are so diferent in the things they transmit that there is no way it's the same person wearing both.
the emblem looks fairly complicated but it makes for a nice detail on the back.
overall this character has some questionable desitions applied, like that weapon, along with some really interesting ones, such as the long hair on a male character, I think he'd do a better teacher than he does a student.
Kyran Rhodes:Reference Sheet[comm]

you're not giving yourself enough credit, I made a tiny image with little detail and you extrapolated into this great piece!

UWS Tactical Carrier and the Carmine Turmfalke
When you strike steel it bends, but if you supercool it and hit it with the same force it shatters. If you hit concrete, however, it does not bend, that ia because it is already brittle. Freezing iron weakens it because it takes away the flexibility. concrete does not weaken it because it is not a flexible material to begin with.

It's weird. A lot if the characters have casual attitudes on what's supposed to be this giant crisis (some huntsmen and pilots are guilty of this, though the atmosphere settles in nicely before the big fight of SHPR-C vs helen), but also the writing uses a ton of technical combat terms like "grouping" or "shaped charge". While I personally enjoy those I fear they may alienate some readers. 

Particularily, it is the use of technical terms that makes the strange physics feel out of place.

An odd feature, not of the chapter but of both CHROMA and RWBY in general is that we hardly ever see good O'l huntsmen, like, regular guys actually doing the huntsman job.

Cerecia when she used that dust 'spell' : "lightning bolt, lightning bolt, lightning bolt!"
Mathematically speaking, any balistic trajectory with a firing angle greater than 45 will result in reduced range, but that is a minor detail, considering that the weapon being fired is a dust-powered bow and arrow hellfire missile.

It was fun. My only gripe is that during the beggining stages everyone talks the same, using the same tone and expressions.

I wonder if ceresia can 1v1 helen, especially now that she has new weapons. TBH I'd like to see more of what goes on the villain's heads, and I don't mean tactics and strategy, I want to know what their end goals are and how confident they are in their chances. What about all the grunts in the airships? How did they get recluited? What do they want?