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Fetch me a Fertle

Go fetch me a Fertle, my beamish boy
That scuttle upon the moonlit sands
The neap tide calls them out tonight
To swim the seas to far off lands

Go fetch me a Fertle, darling child
‘Tis a strange, alluring little creature
Whose pearly shell upon its back
Is considered its most charming feature

But tread you carefully as you go
They’re quick to startle, fast to flee
And should they hear your heavy step
Will scurry fast towards the sea

Take with you a lidded box
Lined with feathers deep inside
And if you chance to capture one
Place it in and let it hide

And as you bring it back to me
Sing a gentle lullaby
To calm its swiftly beating heart
For Fertles are so quick to cry

And once their Fertle tears do fall
They carry on until a time
When all you’ll have inside your box
Is nothing but a pool of brine

So sing a song to make it stay
And settle to captivity
Don’t let the Fertle melt away
Oh, bring a Fertle back to me
Ok! Let me explain ....This comes about after a discussion between :iconscampicub: and :iconpawtukitpat: regarding phobias.

Feet phobia + turtle phobia = a Fertle phobia.

Anyway, I thought it would be good to set :iconpawtukitpat: a challenge by asking him to animate a poem. It’s a work in progress and isn’t finished yet … I can’t wait ‘till it is! In the meantime, here is the poem.

Note:- Don’t worry, I intend to check with Mr Carroll regarding my flagrant use of his word ‘Beamish’ at a later date….but I’m pretty sure he won’t mind. :floating:
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Fetch me a Fertle by *Otterwen is a charming piece of childrens poetry that shows fantastic creativity and imagination. A great example of when two fears collide! ( Suggested by BeccaJS and Featured by StJoan )
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AteMozzarella Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2009  Student General Artist
Oh wow 8D
I feel like I want to recite this in class or something like that <3

And it makes me think deeply about a lot of fantastic things I like in children's poems :3
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You have such a lovely writing style! I'd love to see more work from you in the future. :D
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sallytheragdolly Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2008
It's like Lewis Carroll meets Emily Dickison (?)! I like it! :clap:
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orange-sheep Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2008   Writer
perfect :]
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2008
Why! Thank you!
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delusional-dreams Featured By Owner May 21, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
that's really sweet ^-^
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Ashira-chan-jay Featured By Owner May 3, 2008
I am freaking speechless.

:worship:

<3 loved it. LOVED IT. it's unique and gentle. it's awesome.

[oh and it's its, not "it's" on line 19. ^^;]

i still loved it btw. keep up the good work :)
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hackthefoible Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2008
Clever and sweet. You have a lovely style.
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batousaijin Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
JABBERWOCKEEEEEE! :excited:
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2008
Oh indeeedeeee! :worship:
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rockpunk92 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
Haha the first time i saw furtle the first thing i thought was...WTF??!! Hehe very lewis carrol ish! Niceee
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rei-midorikawa Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it's a lot like the jaberwokk by the guy who wrote through the looking glass
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sumarlegur Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely piece, very smooth, very interesting. My only 'complaint' is at S5 L3 (to calm it’s swiftly beating heart), where the correct form is its.

Otherwise, I like this.
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
Ooh you're right!!! My English teacher will be turning in her grave! ... hahaha, yes it was that long ago since I had an Engish lesson (perhaps that can be my excuse) *slaps myself for not paying more attention in class*

I'm not going to edit the poem .... I perversely feel like leaving it with this flaw.

But thank you for pointing it out and the other comments. :hugs:
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
hahaha :hug: Blaghhh!
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Emerune Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
Such a charmingly beautiful poem. The different layers of meaning are interesting to think about. I can definitely see myself reciting this to a future child. ^^
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FatKat Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
Such a Jabberwacky-esque tone...
I adore it!
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CruelDreams Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
You are amazing...If I asked nicely, would you look at a poem I wrote called 'Together Apart' and tell me what you think? Please?
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needamir Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Writer
Another one who reads the works of Louis Carroll yes??

I like the parallelism that this poem draws with Jabberwocky.

great stuff
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Clockwerk-chan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
I love the references to Jabberwocky.
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ravenclawxwhitewolf Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Writer
What a cute little poem - I'm left wondering just what a Fertle might look like! :aww:
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
Ha! ... that's the beauty of the spoken word - you must take part in the story/poem yourself and do the creating in your head. It's an art-form that needs audience participation!
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ravenclawxwhitewolf Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Writer
:D You're absolutely right on that one, Otterwen. I'd still like to get around to drawing a Fertle though. I'd be terrified if I saw one on the beach, methinks.
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Soul-Daemon Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
very nice, tho i thought a couple of the rhymes missed the mark, enjoyable none the less.
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lady-shirakawa Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
for some reason it reminds me of the jabberwocky
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blackroseem Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Photographer
That was adorable! :heart:
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BeccaJS Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Writer
Congratulations on your DD! When I found this piece it really made me smile, and I had to show it to a GD!
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
I am deeply honoured Beccalicious - thank you so much.

:hug:
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BeccaJS Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008   Writer
trust me, after spending an entire month going through spoken word and reporting everything that wasn't spoken word, it was nice to find something in the right category!
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AniMal-e Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2008
well deserved dd really. I have no literature in my favs becazuse I don´ttake thee time here on da but this ones really moved me .. creative gentle and kind
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kawaifox11 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2008
I love it when slinkers made those videos of ur poems! u and ur chilld are very talented
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naruto4321 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008
so this is slinkers mum u 2 make a good team with ur awse poems am his awse drawin ur rly good 2gether ^-^
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Katamari-Dan Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2008
I really like your poems.
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minesweeperaddict Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2008
Your rythem (I give up on the spelling) is so much fun!

After reading your explanation I'm more confused. ;D (I thought it was some sort of creature, but it appears that the truth is more humorus.)
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JuvenyleChylde Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2008
This is really wonderful!
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Pawtukitpat Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2008
Hehe can't wait to make something of it too.


Though if he does mind... It would be cool to have a ghost like that haunting you.
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MadMarchHare Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2008  Professional Filmographer
Gorgeous poem. You get cookies for "beamish boy". :D
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Schreibertooth Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I like it! it's a very cute poem, and very prettily written^^
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ayasha21 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008
How cute!
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debbiediva Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2008
thats lovely, i wish my poems made as much sense.
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waiting4wings Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008  Student Traditional Artist
Whoa, this is really great - in a disturbing kind of way...I like the rhyme scheme!
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saturninesweetness Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh that's adorable!!


I love your rhyme and the poem's cute.
:aww:


:+fav:
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ScampiCub Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hehehe. I love your poems so much. You really ought to get them down in a book somewhere, before I do it for you. ;)
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Otterwen Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008
Would that be a threat my dear ScampiCub!!! :lmao:
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Tenn-Tenn Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008
beamish means smiling. :) i think it's actually a word carroll DIDN'T frankenstein.

and you did very very VERY well with carroll's style.

bravo.
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TANGERINE-clocks Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008
Oh this is so lovely. <3 I love your poetry, it has a kind of charming ring to it. This has a kind of happy mood to it, I love it.
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Naminia Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008
Yaay! You posted another poem! I :heart: your poems!
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mariochick123 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2008
i really like this one it makes me want to go to the beach.Mabye I'll find a fertle lol
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