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SPIKE - chapter 14 by oomizuao SPIKE - chapter 14 by oomizuao
Wow, I really upset people with chapter 13... o.o s-sorry..
And I understand it was pretty unfair of me to leave you guys with such a cliffhanger. I hope this chapter is a little better that way.. ^^;

so, uhm, omg new record: 4 chapters in a week! yay..!
I need a break... XD or at least time to edit the chapters I already have, and write new chapters 'cos I'm still stuck on chapter 21.. :p




enjoy!








story and characters (C) Elise M. Syvertsen / oomizuao 2010
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JaykeTheArtist Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Up until now, I haven’t cried once. But now, someone call the coastguard please...
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SunnyCatArts2023 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Poor Sam..
I'm not going to lie, I was like bawling the entire time I was reading this
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MagyarEmese Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2017
I am the onlyone who can't zoom in? I can't read it... Can anyone help me please?
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Jax-the-great Featured By Owner Edited Jun 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Just tap the image that works for me
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MCWolfers Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
But, wait...  no one cares about the freshly deceased kid?
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karnski Featured By Owner May 29, 2017
yeah, what the fudge is up with everyone, spike killed marco and nobody has talked about it..
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AsukaTheHedgehog Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017
"-Spike had actually killed a person. Strangely, Sam found that he didn't care much about the death of Marco. Maybe because he just couldn't just bring himself to believe Spike was a murderer. He'd have to see it with his own two eyes, though he wasn't sure he really wanted to."

Spike and Sam are still children, half the time still not quite sure how the world works yet. With Spike being sexually, mentally, physically, and emotionally abused since the age of 4 or 6 years old (by the only family he has - adding more confusion and trauma quickly over time), he will naturally bottle his problems up as that was his only way to save himself from worsened abuse from his uncle Charles. Killing Marco scared Spike shitless, but do you really think that after having someone rape you since you were little, living with that predator and facing the constant abuse everyday and keeping it all inside, that he is just going to just willingly announce to anybody that he killed somebody? His uncle would KILL him, or worse..

And as for Sam, he is still very much a young,happy,confused about life child. Suddenly he realises that he is actually in love with Spike, and doesn't understand his emotions and feelings. Worried about rejection from both Spike, his best friend, and his very loving father. And all the sudden he finds out from his best friend that they killed someone, and now that he knows about your feelings, Spike never wants to see him again, ever. Sam lived in a very healthy and happy environment for a child (as best as his father could do), so suddenly all these things are happening and as soon as he has them figured all out he gets rejected fairly hurtfully (but on Spike's side of the story, his reaction makes sense, seeing as his uncle threatened him if he ever fell for anybody but him. And of course having these things done to Spike against his own will almost everyday will make him have a distorted view on homosexuality), it all crumbles apart in front of Sam in seconds. All these things probably weigh on Sam a lot, and as what seems to be Sam developing depression, Sam probably won't feel the need to talk about something that he doesn't want to even think about let alone tell someone.

So since they haven't told anybody yet (as of this chapter), it makes sense nobody has addressed it yet.
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karnski Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2017
i agree with what you write, you have good points, thanks
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Canine--Artist Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A+ parenting Saunders When the Deviation/Art/Upload is Just Right (icon) 
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JenniFeary Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww Sam! D,: I want them to just make up! Even if they never become more than friends. I hate that they had this falling out.
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That1guy463 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2016  Student Writer
 SAM AND SPIKE JUST KISS PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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glostarr Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2016
i wounder what terrance has to say about this?
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glostarr Featured By Owner Edited Jun 5, 2016
saunders is the best dad in the world!Clap 
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Blake-Love-Yager Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2015
OMG I THINK I'M ACTUALLY GETTING BROKEN HEARTED SYNDROME FROM THIS
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happymonkey101 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
ik right im crying right now!
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Blake-Love-Yager Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2015
it's perfect though
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jkKOBUS Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2015
Spike didn't need to kill Marco. Wtf?!
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Proningtiger Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2014  Hobbyist
I love the book. It has great emotion and many conflicting story lines. I hope to buy a copy of you book some day.
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Aguris Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I will start by saying that I am truly in love with your work. Your book as well as your art have touched me so greatly. 

 One thing I would like to mention is in this chapter, before you include it in your finished work, I would like to suggest you change "humans" to "people". It is a miner change and it doesn't change the meaning of Saunders speech, but I feel the change would open the story up a bit more. What I mean to say is that quite a few of your fans are highly appreciative of the Anthropomorphic Animal side of your work. I know you have expressed how the characters are human in the story but anthros in the comic, but making the change would just expand the imagination of the story for them a bit more.
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ShadAmy06 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Saunders has marijuana in his basement. Cool. I WANNA GO TO HIS HOUSE AND SMOKE SOME!!
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jkKOBUS Featured By Owner Edited Jul 4, 2015
That isn't gonna get you anywhere you loser.
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AnimaDragonLibra Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2013
Never be sorry for your art, if it be writing or if it be drawing, never be sorry. You did exactly what a good writer does, you dug into the hearts of your readers, you brought out their emotions. This is why you must publish, you are meant to be a writer, this book or the next, you can catch emotions like so few can. As I read your book, I felt strong senses of love, I felt hate, I got mad, I felt kozy, you tangled my emotions as if I were in the book. I've not read a book in years that made me feel like this one does. No... You've absolutely nothing to be sorry about, you are a perfect writer. When you words can strike the emotions of your readers deeply, you... Are a magician with words. 

There are lengths I would go to make this book happen. 
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oomizuao Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
I've sent you a little note just now, thanking you for the comments you've left me, because, as I said in that note, your comments meant a whole lot to me. Every kind word I get from my watchers/visitors really do mean a lot to me, but your comments moved me. And I wanna thank you, because your comments inspired me to wanna sit down and write the rest of the book, like, right now! So, thank you for that, thank you for your kind words, and thank you for writing those comments - I'm very thankful that you took the time to share your opinion, because it meant so much to me. :hug:
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AnimaDragonLibra Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2013
I am honored you appreciate my words so dearly, I am likewise thankful to you.  When I read your book I took some lessons from it. I gained a stronger open minded kindness inspired by your character Saunders. The character Spike has been an inspiration to assume less and care more, plus Spike teaches you how to listen. Sam... He teaches you to appreciate even the smallest glimmer of light in the darkest of situations. Sam also teaches the power of a strong and mutually loyal friendship, he teaches about genuine love and the lengths he will go for someone he dearly cares about. If I had to choose just one point to take from the story so far (and there are so many good ones), I would choose how one should never give up on someone they care about just because that someone gave up on them selves.

I am currently implementing portions of the goodness within your words into my own life, I am finding it to be much brighter already! I believe everyone has something good to teach, you have taught me some good values and for that Elise... I am thankful to you as well. Because of this story, I feel ready to increase efforts into locating and helping young people in situations such as Spikes and then help save them because I have the ability to. Though you write this story but it's based on a true reality, Charles exists in so many places on the world. I don't know, something just kind of clicked in my mind after reading; like a warm realization that there is so much more I can do to help. The difference is, now it seems more clear on just how I can. I want to answer those cries for help.  

May peace and increased happiness fill your life and whom ever you share your years with. You are sincerely welcome Elise!    

What you do matters. Thanks for the hug. ^_^ 

P.S. Your reply meant a great deal to me, you read so many good comments yet you replied to mine, that means a lot Elise. 


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NoobReader Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
"Did you smoke my marijuana?" I love Saunders :D
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AlexxandreaLynette Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
I read all the chapters of this awhile ago, and I CAN NOT wait until this is an actual book!!! Aghhh!! 😭
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That1guy463 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2016  Student Writer
SAME
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Simplios-Staxios Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

.... THIS IS BREAKING MY HEART, BUT I LOVE IT.

DARN.

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LuneDeNoir Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
I just want to hug Sam right now. I feel like he needs a hug.
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D21U Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Also...what's so disgusting about that Marco's death thing? It's not like you've seen it. I've wrote worse.
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Bluekyopuppy Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No matter how many times I read this chapter I cry I just want the hug them both!!!
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D21U Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
T.H.I.S N.E.E.D.S T.O B.E. A. M.O.V.I.E.
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AutisticIcelandic98 Featured By Owner May 1, 2013
Amen to that!!!
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Kitsune1987 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student General Artist
Couldn't agree more!!
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14142000 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
Im scared to read the next chapter.
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carolpimsu Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
I cried. A lot actually. So much tears. Agony :iconoh-god-why-plz: It's your fault u.u But still, "Spike" - even making me cry all the water in my body - Is a book that i'll never regret of reading :iconlesnobplz:
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GolenFlyingFox Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I CRYED WHEN I READ IT POOR SAM
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Angel-Moonlight Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You made me cry :'(
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PredQueen Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
All these emotions :iconfeelsplz:
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pyroxyz Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Hmmm. People keep saying that they are disgusted or queasy by what Marco was said to look like, but I have seen far worse stuff. He'd have had to have been rent from limb to limb in order for me to even start feeling queasy. That is all.
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OwlsAndCupcakes Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
when i read the part about spike killing marco and wat marcos head looked like i felt sick. then my mom handed me lunch and im like ....... im gonna wait a little while before i eat this....
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DalasKD Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student General Artist
I just can't get over how great of a writer you are. Truly great!
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CocoAudrey Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I understand how sam feels. Sometimes you just feel like all the pain would stop if you killed yourself. Im not really suicidal. but i think I am. Im not sure. ._.
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Kiten-Kitsune Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012  Student Filmographer
"That bridge isn't safe" FORESHADOWING?
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richardtorres21 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student General Artist
ts A GREAT novel about child abuse and about this 16 year old kids pretty shitty life but it opens ur eyes up to why people look and dress a certain way etc. it makes u under stand people alot more
u should give it a shot
[link]
start at chapter 0
and beware there is alot of bad stuff like BAD stuff that happens so just read fast through it

i will

get to chapter 2 and u will love it
and dont stop reading it its sooo good

dude i got to chapter 5 that is really good
Today

its soo fucking good isnt it!

it really is
Today

i just got to chap 14! and i feel soo bad for whats happening its soo good but its awfull!
Today

SOO FUCKING GOOD

dont spoil it
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richardtorres21 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student General Artist
ts A GREAT novel about child abuse and about this 16 year old kids pretty shitty life but it opens ur eyes up to why people look and dress a certain way etc. it makes u under stand people alot more
u should give it a shot
[link]
start at chapter 0
and beware there is alot of bad stuff like BAD stuff that happens so just read fast through it

i will

get to chapter 2 and u will love it
and dont stop reading it its sooo good

dude i got to chapter 5 that is really good
Today

its soo fucking good isnt it!

it really is
Today

i just got to chap 14! and i feel soo bad for whats happening its soo good but its awfull!
Today

SOO FUCKING GOOD

dont spoil it
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prorrie Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Student Artist
The fuck? :I
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richardtorres21 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Student General Artist
a convo between me and my freind on fb over it haha should of edited our names in it so it would make sence haha sorry mate
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xPrincessxCharmingx Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
God this story breaks my heart into tiny little bits! :(



but it is sooooo good I can't stop reading it. Damn you...
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Nazus-98 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I feel the same,about this story!
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