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I woke up without you today
But this emptiness—
That's not new.

I woke up without you today
But these tears—
They've dried and rusted

I woke up without you today
And these faded memories—
They're all I've got

But today, I woke up
And my hand was clenched in a fist—
And that was new.

Today, I woke up

And I hated the people who took you away
"It's enough to know how much you miss them. And how much you hate the person who took them away,"
-Leonard Shelby, Momento


I've written about this quote in my journal. It's obviously made an impression on me. It just hits home, I guess. My feelings are changing, but I'm not sure if this is for the better.

I just... Yup.
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Ryroherewego Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Hobbyist Interface Designer
So simple but every word feels so heartfelt...it's...yeah *speechless* *adds to favourites*
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2011
Thank you very much :huggle:
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shikafreekv Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2011
haha I'm spamming you with Faves :D But there's no helping it, it's what I do when someones work really gets my attention :D I just really liked this piece and wanted to say so :D
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2011
And I appreciate every fave =D
Thank you :huggle:
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shikafreekv Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
:D

I'll be returning to spam you again, so watch out :XD:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2011
Oh, I'm ready ;)
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HalloweenCakeSlice Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010
you have such a gift for conveying emotion.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010
Thanks :blushes:
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tilwen Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2010
some people will say that hate is a bad thing, that it doesn't make it any better, but as far as i'm concerned it's just another stage of the process. it's natural, and inevitable. why shouldn't you hate them? what happened was unjust.
but just one thing, don't let the hatred push out the fond memories of her. try to make room for both, if you can. never let hatred spoil the memory.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2010
Yeah... I do try my best to quash the hate. I don't hate her, but I hate some things associated with her, and that really makes some memories bittersweet :shrug:
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tilwen Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2010
we can't love everything about everyone, it's hard because we want to love everything about them, i feel guilty about hating bits of them, because you feel like it isn't really love if you can't love all of them. but then you have to see sense and realise that it's natural and completely fine.
... i rant too much :P
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2010
No! I totally agree ^^
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sonandheir Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Great piece.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010
Thanks ^^
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DasGnomo Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
Omg that's so beautiful.... ;M;
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2010
Thank you :aww:
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! I am the founder of :iconpoetry-sanctuary: and I just wanted to let you know you've been Featured! :) You're work is currently being featured on the group's blog entry. Congrats! In addition, part of the Feature is this critique...

I faved this work of yours a little while ago. I loved it! It was short and simple, even. But it had so much emotion in it, it built up this sort of anticipation and feeling. To be quite honest, it left me feeling quite emotional after reading it. It left me with this warm-fuzzy feeling and this empty feeling as well. I can't explain it but something about this poem stuck out to me and it stuck to me. I enjoyed reading it so much and the message was beautifully implemented. No rhymes or fancy patterns would make this poem better, it's emotion and vivid portrayal of the senses does that job just fine. Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more! :)
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010
Omigosh... :blushes:

Thank you for this critique. I really appreciate your featuring this work. All of my poems mean a great deal to me and to see one of them picked out and analyzed (correctly, I might add) really means a lot to me. It's good to see that you're responding to the poem the way I hope all my readers do.

Thanks again for the encouragement :hug:
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LovelessEnd Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
:D

It's no problem at all. It's the mission of the group! And it should be what every member of deviantART should be doing -- appreciate art. I'm glad this feature and critique means a lot to you :) To tell you the truth, I put a whole lot of thought into what I write for these critiques, and seeing the members appreciate the time and effort I've spent brings me a lotta joy in turn. So I appreciate your appreciating of my appreciation of your poem =P

It's no problem at all! Keep it up! I can't wait to see more!
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dontcareanymore17 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
This is a wonderful piece. So many emotions.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2010
Thank you :thanks:
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littlebick Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
This is beautiful, angry, and perfect. I teared up :huggle:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2010
Thank you :tighthug:
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flash2351 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
I love the way you wrote this poem, the structure of the poem really brought out the pain and sadness that you are expressing. Its such a beautiful and sad piece.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
Thank you :hug:
That means a lot.
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flash2351 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
welcome =D
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Stargirl87 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
Powerful emotion, I really felt it.Good job!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
Thank you :hug:
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JessicaKGowdy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010  Student Digital Artist
short but soo deep...Love the structure.
I would like to feature this in my Group for Literature Lovers [link]
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
Thanks so much :hug:
Go right ahead. I'd be honored.
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JessicaKGowdy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010  Student Digital Artist
:D..post it up and i shall put it into the feature folder!
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
Done ^^
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JessicaKGowdy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010  Student Digital Artist
:D
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TellMeWhereItHurts Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
I am sorry for your pain. I so know how it feels when someone has taken away from you a loved person. I wake up with anger in my soul every day :(
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
Thanks for that. I'm all kind of jumbled right now, but for the past few days, it's been anger that supersedes everything else. Just don't know if I'm comfortable with that.

At any rate, I'm glad you can identify with the piece :huggle:
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TellMeWhereItHurts Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
Anger is only another human emotion...we all feel it at some points in our lives. So don't feel bad about it.

Take care! :hug:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
:tighthug:
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missyemily94 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
You're a beautiful writer; even when you're in pain. :heart: I'm so sorry.
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
You always say such nice things. Thanks :hug:
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missyemily94 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2010
You always deserve such wonderful praise! You're welcome.
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Octavariumguy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
*2 thumbs up*
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
Thank you! :aww:
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Octavariumguy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
Np! =)
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aBlondMoment Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010   Writer
:hug:
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o-ohhai Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2010
:huggle:
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