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Bionicle- Nova Orbis- Mystery- Chapter 8

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It feels like things are progressing better now that we don't have as many groups to follow. And as I'm sure you can guess by now, it's only a matter of time before Ahkmou and Silva meet up with the others in Su-Koro. What will they learn there, and where will their journey take them, next?

If I've made any spelling errors, feel free to point them out. I do proof-read these, but because they're so long, I sometimes need to do it more than once to be sure.

Sorry there weren't that many illustrations in this one, but, well, not a lot of things happened this time around. Just some really important things. Anyway... I'll try to have the next chapter online by Monday, if possible. Yeah, I'm really gonna be cranking these out, now.



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Sl33pdeprivedHobbyist Artisan Crafter
So this is a two part question
First- is su koro surounded by the sand storm or engulfed in it?

Second- what kind of environment su and gravity matoran live in im kinda stuck on that part
NickOnPlanetRipple's avatar
Surrounded, most of the time. Sometimes, the storms rage overhead, too.

The Su-Matoran live at the very edge of the island, east. The Ba-Matoran live in a futuristic city off the Norhtern coast.
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I figured as much but why are they in a desert it seems to methat there almost hated
NickOnPlanetRipple's avatar
Several of the villages are built inside these ancient wrecks. This is one of the last that wasn't taken, and it protects them well from the outside.
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Btw your world is amazing and did u know that ackmu? I dont know how to spell his name off hand, he was going to be a shadow toa in the 08 storyline kinda wish they had
NickOnPlanetRipple's avatar
Oh, I knew that. I'm even going to reference it at some point (if I haven't, already. Kinda fuzzy).
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Sl33pdeprivedHobbyist Artisan Crafter
I think I read it somewhere in ur story already anyway I just wanted to let you know something I think I left out on sleepdeprivedluna im open to all criticism and im thinking of moving the story to deviantart
scrapmetaru's avatar
i don't remember where, but i think at one point you mispelled again as "a gain".
Orionide5's avatar
First, a couple little typos: in the first section, Calor calls Imber "soul sister." Isn't that for Ce-Matoran? The end of the second section runs off the page. And shouldn't the third section be labeled Su-Wahi? More feedback will come when I finish reading this. 
NickOnPlanetRipple's avatar
Oh dang, I dunno how I screwed up so many things.. all right, I've fixed them all, except the soul sister remark. Sorry, but I just don't know what else he should call her. Not something like fish sister... anyway, thanks.
Orionide5's avatar
Finished it, nice chapter! And cool how the stories are converging. Just one other thing, I think it's spelled "dinghy."
Mace3739's avatar
I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
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dcaldwell101Hobbyist Artist
Awesome chapter
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