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Compressed audio codec;
Album on repeat.

Pentatonic
Scales breathe
Second languages

And resuscitate
Lyrics from the listener.

Compress, breathe,
Resuscitate, compress
Breathe, resuscitate.

He's
Deaf on
Arrival.
An entry for :iconakarra:'s short poem contest: [link]

2012 Nic Swaner
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CJWilde Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Student Writer
Congratulations on placing third in the contest! This piece is beautiful and definitely deserved it. Your use of language here is both striking and intriguing, and the way you have used metaphors to pit musical and medical jargon really did make me think. Compress, breathe / Resuscitate, compress / Breathe, resuscitate was resonant, flowing beautifully from the tongue. The ending had that sharp 'shock' effect which every good poem should strive for; but you, of course, are already a wonderful and accomplished writer (and one of my favourites on the site). You have been featured in my latest journal and I hope it helps. :aww:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner May 12, 2012
Very droll!
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. =)
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice rhythm with this, Nic. I especially like this:

Pentatonic
Scales breathe
Second languages

And resuscitate
Lyrics from the listener.


That second part speaks to me, especially.

Congratulations with this, Nic. Well deserved! :heart:
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:iconnichrysalis:
Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm quite attached to that part myself.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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hyperfluxy Featured By Owner May 8, 2012   Writer
this is so resonant. very well spoken.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! =)
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akarra Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Student Writer
Really well done. You know what you're doing with writing.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the kind words. =)
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! I love that it's so short but so powerful. The first line is striking and it really drew me in.
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is? I was not aware it was. Thanks for the words!
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes it is! :) No problem :meow:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I placed in the contest! :iconlawooplz:
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations! :squee: That's awesome! :iconhyperplz:
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconlaplz:
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MummyWriter Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Now that... is awesome. Looks like it has sunglasses to.
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Honor2Serve Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Oh I like this! Good luck!
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner May 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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