We often hear that wine brings out the truth, but I daresay it does the opposite. It tells us the lies we wish to hear. It reinforces our delusions, our pretences, these the duty of the mother to preach. Even the mothers of barbarians, oh yes, how they whisper in their mud hovels when I come by.
“Hush, child. We cannot be found here, child,” they say. (They lie.) “… We are safe here.”
MY MOTHER HAD NO SUCH WORDS FOR ME!
Oh, but the wine had. I catch the faintest whiff, these words I never hear, I steal breaths of them when I am drowning. They, a strain of melody; a song I am somehow not entitled to enjoy. A song sung by a thousand throats when young lord Jaegor used to weep.
But my, what made you so worthy, my lord? What made you worthy?
~ Lovarion dir Falr
the emperor of the world.
Characters ||-| Ruso || Lovarion || Jaegor | Balieus | Echeris |-|| World
The tattoo on his leg says "lord and master". The ones on his arm are Household honour designs.
You told me that you see yourself more as a designer than as an artist and I thought about it and I just didn't buy it. And this is proof. This is fine art! I bet I could hang a print of this in a museum and people wouldn't notice.
There's a lot going on here. So many lines in the right places! Such textures! But I'll skip that part because I would only bore you with simply listing all the details I see. Instead, I'd like to focus on the shading and lighting, because it is amazing and it sells the whole thing!
- The brooch is just delicious! It's not just because it's red, but having such a strong colour in an otherwise lower-saturated image helps. It looks like glass (or a polished gem, because all of the nice-looking "gems" in my life were made of glass) and it has all the important properties! It gets darker with the curve of the material and with the direction of the light. And the reflection is the icing on the cake.
- Shiny metal things. Given that the brooch reflects so well, I wonder if the goblets and the bracelet shouldn't reflect more, because it looks like it could be expensive, this way it looks a bit low-grade or possibly old and not well cared for. Maybe you were going for that.
- Window light. It might seem like a small and simple addition to some, but
- they are wrong, perspective is hard and you nailed it and then there's even the shadow on the leg!
- there is an offset in saturation near the character's head and it somehow manages to make both the background near the head and the character on the bottom more interesting
Other things I'd like to mention:
- The tattoos. I like them. Especially the one on the upper arm. Is that a symbol for fire?
Unrelated to the tattoos, I still like the writing system, it looks more ordered here than on a previous piece
- Damn, the details are amazing the more I look at it.
- I already mentioned the textures, but you went an extra step for the skin. Veins. Friggin' veins! And then there's the scar and it gives me the feeling that you have it saved somewhere in a better resolution and you can zoom in even further (this doesn't contrast with the surrounding detail).
I didn't notice those were wings until I remembered they belonged to the character... which is good. Bat wings are stretched which is why they look so different to what I see here, but if they weren't, and if they were thicker, this might just be an accurate representation.
The only issue I have with this image is the top and top-left border of the cloth, on the shoulder and on the back: It's too edgy. Those folds are sharp and my eye tells me that they should be rounded.
By the way, as far as I can tell, A+ on anatomy. Also, usually, most of your male characters look feminine instead of young, but this is definitely young instead of feminine (although I understand that it's more complex than that with the additional gender and all that).
OK, and the wine spill isn't as smooth as the rest of the image, but I almost didn't mention it. But I have the feeling that you have trouble painting realistic liquids in general. Not that I could help you with that in any way.
No, but the real reason I wanted to write a Critque on this one was the frame. I know you used it before, but it looks great here. I'm not sure what it is about it, it just reminds me of a window or a a mirror with the different saturations and the refraction-like effect. It tells me that the image I see could be optimised for my screen (of course, it's more that my screen should be optimised for images), and yet I didn't see it until I saw the frame, so it's good the way it is.
Wine, I stare in it and see the truth.
I ask myself when will I stop.
They say that the taste is good.
But I will, I can, this will be my last drop.
Wine, I drink it and feel so light.
I start to yell, more, give me more.
They say that it gives you might.
But eventually I fall to the floor.
Wine, I spilled it all over the place.
I look at the ground to see.
They say that it makes a happy face.
But is this reflection really me?
I close my eyes, cup still in hand.
Tomorrow I will wake up in shame.
Being barely able to stand.
Telling myself, the wine is to blame.
Sorry, couldn't help myself. Had to write something to go along with this piece.
You know, funnily enough, the next words in the scene (which aren't in the description cos I didn't want it to get too long) was exactly "More, give me more." I was wondering how you'd somehow telepathically known that.
Argh, anyways, again thank youuuu! Do you mind if I feature your poem in some way? Like in a journal or a status post?
I usually don't ever get comments from non-watchers at all!
I went through your gallery to find something that I liked, that's how I found your piece.
Ah right! I kinda thought you found it through the forum lol, which was why I edited that part of the comment away.
About my only note as far as the writing goes is the phrase "those the duty of the mother to preach;" it caught me for a moment, took an extra second of parsing. You might consider "those that are the duty of the mother to preach"? Or, possibly, "the mother's dutiful plattitudes"? I'm not entirely sure if they actually flow better, though, and they might lose the feeling you were going for.
As for the art, it's interesting to see Lovarion's opulence in such disarray. It feels like some sort of disintegration, the rotting wood beneath the gold-foil throne. The scene feels like something that would terrify a servant or even one of Lovarion's friends (family members? I'm thinking Vrahl or Tuarali but I don't know what to label them), at least on some level. Even if they weren't surprised--even if it were a regular occurrence. Because it would be a slap in the face that something is wrong, wrong--wrong in a slow, dragging, fragile way that's entirely different than an impulsive lord simply overindulging. It calls to mind similar sensations from other fiction: bathroom scenes, broken mirrors and blood on tiles.
Depressing shit aside, seriously, this is an awesome picture. It feels so complete. I love the soft pencil lines and shading, the lighting; it makes everything feel delicate and personal. I can practically feel the cloth/fur beneath him and the warmth of the sun against bare legs, the loosely draped fabric. You did a great job of coloring his scar; it seems more attached to his face than some other pictures you've done, more natural, but is still noticeably there. I was going to suggest that you give the spilled wine some harsher and brighter highlights to make it look more like liquid, but I think you'd have to be careful to still make them soft enough to blend with the feel of the rest of the piece. Plus, since I'm not entirely sure what surface he's on, I guess it might be absorbed into a bed or something? The design of the wall makes me fell like he's sitting on the floor, though.
(It's poetic? Aww thank you!)
I ended up rephrasing the whole sentence and … keeping that part. Just can't find anything else that gives the same feeling But thanks for pointing it out. Now it's gone to "these the duty of the mother to preach", which somehow sounds more awkward, so I might change it back. Adding a "that are" is the easiest option but it feels a bit too long when I do ..
Hey, "the rotting wood behind the gold-foil throne" is pretty poetic too. I dunno what to call them either. Tuarali is Lovarion's family, but Vrahl is … well, hard to define. xD Good point, I hadn't actually thought about it that in-depth, but seeing him like this would probably terrify Tuarali. She's only ever seen him after he's passed out. Vrahl makes an effort to keep everyone away from Lov when he's in his ranting mood, partly for their own safety.
Bathroom scenes is a good comparison! Thanks, I'll angle it more towards that feeling, now.
(Haha when I make it shinier it starts looking like anime I should go learn how to draw reflections.)
He's sitting on the floor. I probably should have added some reflections to make it look marbly, but I'd spent too long on this already, so …
oooh you coloured this awesome picture!
whoa that's a lot of spilt wine... is he crying over... spilt wine >u>
>u>;;; ... yeahhh sorry <_< (Icouldn'thelpmyself=u= )
Also, have I ever told you I wanted to stroke his wings? ._.
cos I do
don't think I'm weird or anything...
By the way, you coloured everything really well ;u;
You couldn't help yourself what o.o
No he's not
You haven't actually Do you now? He gets that a lot. Even Jaegor likes to play with his wings.
Thank you c: It was about time Lov got a realistic picture.
...Are you drunk?
now who, how and why?
He looks so vulnerable and so drunk on madness. He's so obsessed and so...emotional! Eh, he is quite bitter about Mye not having been so kind towards him. As I remember, I think, you mentioned quite a while back that Mye was quite strict.
I like the random piles of clothing and the spilled wine around him. It really makes it clear that Lov is in an emotional state. He wants to lose himself in the intoxicating wine, but yet, the pain is still there...
Maybe you can make the shadows not as dark in this picture. I kind of find it hard to see the wings vs the clothes he's wearing and the pile of clothes in the foreground. Also thought the spilled wine was cloth for some reason. Maybe you can make it shinier so it looks more like liquid?
She wasn't strict, she was just crazy. xD A little more messed up than Lov himself. Amongst other things, she felt trapped and confused and started hating Althoren, and she took it out on Lov because he had a similar point of view as his dad.
Thanks xD It's just to fill up space tbh.
Good point though - my friend asked "why does he drink so much?" once, and I had to think about that one. He drinks but it doesn't really help him feel better. It just makes him philosophise and rant. But somehow he thinks it'll help, and he clings to that belief because he needs to know something can make him feel better. Even if it doesn't.
It depends on your screen I guess. Some people have lighter screens than me, and can see things in my pictures I can't, and others have darker. The clothes are quite light on my screen, but I have made them a bit lighter now. More than that and they look weird on my screen ~ I'm hoping they still look ok on even lighter screens. Thanks for the tip
Gooodd, no wonder Lov turned out so unstable. He definitely has mommy issues.
Haha, good one. I do that a lot of the time too. Ah, I see. That's a familiar feeling for many people, I think.
Yeah, I saw this on my phone and it looked lighter than it did on my laptop. I checked now and yes, it's easier to see now that you've made things lighter.
What, wine addiction? Or a pretend-cure? I certainly hope it's not a common feeling … at least find something healthier like sport addiction.
I think this is definitely one of my favourite pictures of Lovarion you've done - I feel like he'd kill me for saying this but he looks really vulnerable, and that's a really good contrast to how he usually seems all sassy and powerful.
The shading on his limbs is especially good, it makes the muscles and bones visible but it doesn't make him look like a bodybuilder or morbidly skinny either. And while I'm on the subject of shading, I LOVE the lighting effect cast by the window - it makes the scene feel really... I dunno, like you've put a lot of thought into it. It feels almost as if someone's just opened the windows and found him like this and he's gonna be like "nuuu not the sunlight it burnnnss" XD
The details are all really effective too, like the spilled wine and the random bits of cloth scattered around, like he's been gradually shedding his fancy costume throughout the night - it really gives the context that he's had a rough night XD
ALSO last thing the dialogue - it just flows so nicely and the SHOUTY BIT was really effective. Lovarion just sounds so bitter and fed up and I just... aahhh poor Lov I want to hug him
Eeep, you noticed! Thanks
The window was a bit of improv, cos something just looked incomplete, but I'm glad it worked. xD
Why yes, yes he has. And then Vrahl has to clean up and look after him and endure being ranted at in another language.
Thanks! His voice is so lovely
Yeah I'm kind of really picky and selective about favourites for some reason XD I like having a relatively small-sized folder of top-quality art to browse through, or art that has a special significance. I don't really get it when people just fave every other thing that they only slightly like. But this one is definitely fave material for me
I think you described that aspect of character-design really well ^^ I'm the same with my characters, it's like, I know they're really in-depth characters with complex personalities, but I'm always worried that I'm not getting that across very well XD
Sucks to be Vrahl XD
I use different folders for that. xD Main faves are like a "like" on facebook, just so you know I like it. Then there's faves of faves, which I use when something strikes me enough to remember that I have a faves of faves folder. Then a few folders for collecting art because of a certain design aspect, or a certain way it impacted me, etc.
Or even worse, if you're giving the wrong impression. But hey, that's the point of feedback I s'pose.
He needs more credit. I do plan to have a lot of him in the comics.