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She's dead now

Can I blame you?
Would that make it true?
What evil might it [un]do?

I guess it is my fault
Since it isn't yours
I was always the one
Breaking down doors
I opened her up
For all that pain
I let her down
As she wept in the rain

She's dead now

I am going to blame me
Because as far as I can see
It is the easiest way to be

You were the one that brought her
Into our exclusive ranks
You were the one that welcomed her
Into our vicious pranks
You were the one that taught her
Our private dialect
You were the one that made her
Almost perfect

She's dead now

Because I loved her
And you scorned her
And we abandoned her
Remember her and remember what you've done
Ending a life before it has even really begun
But you're so sweet, so innocent, so young
Your song has yet to be sung
So you're getting off scott free
While you leave her there to bleed
You're getting off completely
While she fades to just a memory
Remember her and remember what you've done
Snuffing out a life before it has even begun


I have no real comment to make on this, except rereading it still makes me want to cry, and I will never be the one to fess up and tell anyone why.
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Hinfallend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful piece. I especially love this part:

"You were the one that brought her
Into our exclusive ranks
You were the one that welcomed her
Into our vicious pranks
You were the one that taught her
Our private dialect
You were the one that made her
Almost perfect"

Idk why, just do

D: Tell me why is affects you so much?! Nu crying for the Muzi!
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
I like that bit too. Actually, I just like this piece. xD

Crying is fun though D:
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Hinfallend Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's a really awesome piece.

'tis not! Don't lie to me!
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011
Thank yous :3

:( Its too! okay :(
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xEtherealAurorax Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
I love your poems. No seriously, I do.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
Thanks again. It is always great to hear such things. :3
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Didaskaleinophobia Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
This is sad. ;-; But also very nice. VERY nice.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2011
It is probably my favorite thing in my gallery, simply because of the meaning. xD
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Nachtetraum Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
The raw emotion in this alone is astonishing. In a way it wants to make me cry but at the same time it makes me interested to wonder what else could have/did happen.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
A lot of tears have been shed because of this poem and what it is about.

Thank you for the :+fav: on it. ^^
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Nachtetraum Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's very well written. I suppose the meaning and reasoning behind it all makes it all the more emotional
Not a problem love~
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2011
Not sure, but I know that I have no "Jessica Edward" so his name has been changed. Three ehugs please. ^^ xDD
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psychobuni Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
wow,amazing poem.you captured the emotion making me feel almost as if we were one,sharing the same feelings<3
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
That is the greatest praise a writer can be given. Thank you so much.
Thanks as well for the :+fav:/devcollect. :)
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psychobuni Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
sure thing,it's very disturbingly beautiful!
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Folgrin21 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
BRAVO!!!!
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
:) Thank you and thanks as well for the :+fav:
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ellyemma Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
why is this making me so sad ? T.T
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Because it still makes me sad? :hug: xD IDK. This is a really emotional piece though.
Thanks for the :+fav: on it.
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ellyemma Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
I don't know how you do it but with every piece you post you seem to pull some string
and this one is no exception in fact I really like the way you used your words and I still feel sad and I don't really understand why
so you deserved the fave !
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
That means so much to me, especially coming from someone that has suffered through my writing for a long time. Thank you so much. :)
Sorry for sharing the sadness. I'm sort of working through some past things. ^^U
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ellyemma Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
I don't suffer through your writing ! It's a good thing you work through things and if it gets you to write awesome poetry then I can only be happy !
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Agwada Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't have to 'fess up to anyone else.
Just 'fess up to yourself. :)

Soz, hope that helps... :S
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
I think if I hadn't confessed to myself I'd be happier for it. xD ^^U

:hug: Thanks though and thanks for the :+fav::)
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Agwada Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:) No problem! ^^ Just don't kick yourself, eh? Who knows -- later on down the road, there could be amazing people you'll meet that you would never have met if whatever happened had never happened. :)
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