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I want to feel his hands around my throat
Pressing me down until I finally choke
Prove to me that I don't need the air I breathe
Prove to me that all I really need is you to hold me
I want to feel his hands cutting off my air supply
Preventing me from telling even more lies
Prove to me that I don't need my voice to speak
Prove to me that you don't really even need me
I want to feel his hands strangling me
Protecting me from the toxins we all need
Prove to me that you can help me escape the idiocy
Prove to me that I can live somewhere above reality
I want to feel his hands around my throat
Pressing me down until I finally cease to choke
This could either be a joke or a bit more of my soul than I should reveal to anyone. xD
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mgless Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
I like it a lot.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
x3 Thanks
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grim-knuckles Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2011
took the words right out of my mouth, though, if it were true for me, im pretty sure i wouldnt feel like shit ^^
then again, i try my very best to make best with what i have
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
?? I am a bit confused how your comment relates to this piece. /isbraindead
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grim-knuckles Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
what my comment means, is your piece says what i wish i could say
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
Ah...So you see the more intellectual/emotional aspect of this? :highfive: Most people have taken it literally...and if you did take it literally :highfive: =D xD JK
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grim-knuckles Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011
well if i took it literally, im pretty sure i would make myself sad just from reading it
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color-me-dreamy Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Great poem, direct and very deep!
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
:) Thank you so much
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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011   Writer
Prove to me that I don't need the air I breathe

a potent, revealing demand.
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:iconmuzica-chan:
Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011
Revealing of what, I wonder...
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spoems Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2011   Writer
revealing of some powerful inner compulsions, important features of your self image, and perhaps commentary on your deeply held feelings about relationships and what you really want out of them. what specifically about those things do they reveal? that is probably a private conversation.

but, i do think you have a good muse here from which to really build some quality poetic expression.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2011
I don't know about all of that, but it is certainly possible. At the moment, I don't understand anything about myself. I am trying to write what I feel.

My muse fled with this piece, but I am sure she would appreciate that. :)
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mixedbug Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
I am not to sure what to write but ...I will say that I love it for all that it stands for for me...thank you.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011
I am glad that this piece holds meaning for you, and that you enjoyed it. ^^ Thank you for the :+fav: and lovely comment. :)
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:iconmixedbug:
mixedbug Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Thank you!!
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this is good =D
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:iconmuzica-chan:
Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
Thank you :3
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome =D
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Sentintam Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i don't know if i love this or am i freaked out by it
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
Can't it be a bit of both? :3

Thanks for the :+fav: on this, btw.
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Sentintam Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I guess lol

And you're welcome
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Hinfallend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Suicidal thoughts or just into really kinky shit?
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:iconmuzica-chan:
Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011
Neither :3 Both
I don't know
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Hinfallend Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:XD: Just go with a mixture of both.
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xEtherealAurorax Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
This is fantastic! How long did you take to write this?
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
Six minutes. ^^U I didn't put a lot of effort into this. I'm glad that you like it though. Thanks for the :+fav::)
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xEtherealAurorax Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
But this is awesome for just six minutes. I really love it.
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Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
:) Thanks again.
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DanniDarkness Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
I enjoyed this. Really I did.
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:iconmuzica-chan:
Muzica-chan Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
:) Thank you and thanks for the :+fav:
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DanniDarkness Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2011
You are welcome!
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