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Will You Remember Me?

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Will you remember me

Will you remember me?
When I'm gone?
Will you ever think of me?
When you are all alone?

Will you remember me?
On a dark rainy night?
Will you remember our laughs?
That we use to have.
Our silly fights?

Will you remember me?
In the early morning when the frost is glistening in the sunlight.
Will you ever think of me?
When I'm gone?

Will you remember me?
As me.
Not as someone that I can't be.
Will you?

Will you remember me?
When I'm no longer there.
Will you ever miss me?
Or do you really care?
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CCrystal14Hobbyist Writer
So sad :C I can understand feeling that way... mostly. Err anywayz the only thing I have to comment on is
'Will you remember me?
As me.
Not as someone that I can't be.
Will you?'
The flow seems to be cut off by the third line. The last line doesn't fit because its so short.

Also 'Our silly fights' doesn't seem to fit, either. I suppose it would, but I'm somewhat of a grammar fanatic |D;; It flows though, either way. =)

Great poem =) The last stanza is my favourite, I think it made a good impact.
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munches2008Student Photographer
Thank you
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Sue-ZanHobbyist Traditional Artist
I would.:D
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munches2008Student Photographer
I know you would. :D
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Sue-ZanHobbyist Traditional Artist
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