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in a tsunami
of sakura
I watched a HBO documentary call 'Tsunami and Cherry' and it chronicled the devastating tsunami that hit Japan last year and, as the cherry blossoms bloomed, how much hope the Japanese people took from this sign of delicate, but beautiful life. It was, to be cliche', inspiring!
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moyanII Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
without the title the haiku would become quite unclear in meaning. (because haiku is traditionally meant to be clear with just the few lines, titleless) some rearrangement and replacing wave with tsunami will probably make the intention more apparent.
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MSJames Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
Indeed you are correct. I did replace wave with tsunami, so hopefully that helped. Although, even through haiku, it was very hard to try to convey what I saw and heard with just a few words. Thanks for the help!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Is this also meant to reference the association of sakura and death at all? o:
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MSJames Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Well, based on the documentary I saw, this is purely meant as a haiku of hope and revitalization than the death aspect of sakura. Of course, sakura has always been used as a symbol of death in haiku and that won't change. But, as I watched the film, you could just see how the blooming of the sakura just seemed to raise the people's spirits, so I wrote this in that vein. Although, the haiku, as written, can be read either way.

Oh, and edited to use the proper name 'sakura' (see how rusty I am!!!)
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oooh. Okay, and I'm a big fan of circle of life so it works for me either way :P

While I'm on the nitpicking front, does 'sakura' mean 'cherry blossom' by itself? (haha, also Pratchett would accuse you of insanity.)
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MSJames Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Sakura is a reference to the blossom, or flower if you will, so yeah, it's just a name for the cherry blossom itself...

Oh and BTW, I am insane, no doubt about that!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So is 'sakura blossoms' redundant then, or should I also try mentally inserting a comma after 'sakura'? ;p

Woo!
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MSJames Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Indeed, you are correct about sakura and the need to drop the 'blossoms' part... edited yet again! (again showing my rustiness!)
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm basically showing off how much you can pick up by hanging with 'otaku' :lol:
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MSJames Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012
And, it shows how much you can lose your touch if you don't write for months on end! lol
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