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So, you've probably noticed that I didn't put Atrocity note pages in my two previous Animated Atrocities review. Actually it seems that a surprising number of people didn't (or kept quiet about them). I'm actually pretty happy about that because I don't know, they kind of made my videos feel a little more low-budget, like I couldn't be bothered to put actual footage in the synopsis area. But let's not abandon them completely. Recently I stopped taking requests because it got way too out of hand. How about let's play fair. My Atrocity notebook template is now a "request submission." However, if you fill it out wrong I'm just going to disregard it altogether. And a lot of people have sort of filled it out improperly or judged things too harshly. So this is going to a normal guide to how to fill one out (oh and disregard the 1001. I'll make a better one for that).


  • Alright, episode title, show, episode number, writers, and directors can usually be found on imdb.com. If the animation in question is something that no one has ever heard of and you can't find the creators on it, just write "writers/editors/staff unknown."
But now to the part you're all interested in. How to not over-bash an episode in any of the categories.

Cringe-Inducing Audio: Music, sound effects, sound mixing, or voice acting that forces the listener some distress.
1 in C-IV: The music in the episode is bland, generic, or uninspired.
3 in C-IV: The lyrics to such songs are rather stupid, like a song about socks. In the voice acting territory, a main character has a particularly obnoxious voice or style of speaking.
4 in C-IV: Characters attempt to sing, but aren't good at it.
5 in C-IV: Sound effects such as nails on chalkboard, and absurdly loud explosions are used.
7 in C-IV: A main character has a grating voice.
9 in C-IV: EVERY character has a grating voice.
10 in C-IV: You shift between not being able to hear anything and covering your ears.

Cringe-Inducing Visuals: Visuals that in some way force the viewer to look away from the screen. It may be badly abused gross out, a character in phyiscal or emotional pain, or seizure-inducing lights
1 in C-IV: This animation has a character in slight discomfort that is somewhat unpleasing to watch [Courage's appearance in Ball of Revenge]
3 in C-IV: There is a constant source of light gross out, or one particular moment that attempts to gross you out [Spongebob's face in Spongebob, You're Fired!]
4 in C-IV: There is a constant source of gross out that may tick off the squeemish, or there is one moment that goes above and beyond [Squidward's toenail in House Fancy]
7 in C-IV: The episode goes above and beyond to gross out the viewer by throwing in pus, blood, or fecal matter [The Splinter]
9 in C-IV: The episode is constantly at Squidward's toenail from House Fancy for the entirety of the episode.
10 in C-IV: The episode has seizure inducing lights that put hundreds of kids in the hospital [Electric Soldier Porygon]

Lackluster Writing: Writing that fails the basic concepts of storytelling, lacks cohesiveness or polish, and wreaks of laziness.
1 in LW: A story is told extremely by-the-book with little divergence from the beaten path.
2 in LW: A story is given slight amounts of filler/unnecessary moments (+1 modifier for 11 minute episodes; +2 for 7 minute episodes)
3 in LW: The story has dents here and there, but you can still follow what's going on during a first viewing.
5 in LW: Logic is thrown to the wind to have whatever the writer want to happen, happen.
6 in LW: The plot only seems to move when the writer pulls something out of their ass (Johnny's Royal Flush)
7 in LW: The story was mostly or entirely ripped off from somewhere. Or the writers use a concept that abandons all logic.
8 in LW: The story was mostly or entirely ripped off from a story within the same franchise.
9 in LW: The story has no sense of coherence. You could type random characters on your keyboard and come up with a better story.
10 in LW: Nothing of substance was even ATTEMPTED.

Annoyance: This is the most subjective category so hints cannot be given. This is generally used to give extra points where the other categories do not apply. Just remember that once you say that something is the most annoying thing out there, nothing can really take that title away. Always estimate conservatively.

Disturbing Content: This does not apply to shows that are trying to be disturbing, such as The Gregory Horror Show. This category is for when things like the writers put suicidal themes in episodes for children. Remember that what disturbs you may not disturb everyone.
1 in DC: Those characters are staring into my soul.... but in all seriously, some uncanny character movements
3 in DC: It's hinted that a character has gone through some particularly severe torment. (Keep in mind that this may be black comedy).
4 in DC: All of the characters live in the uncanny valley.
6 in DC: There is extremely unsettling imagery that goes beyond just mere gross-out.
7 in DC: There is a vicious monster tormenting a character [The A Pal for Gary monster]
9 in DC: It's expressly stated that a child thinks one of his parents raping the other is normal sex [1 Night in Gottlieb]
10 in DC: I have personally never come across something that I believed is worth 10/10 in Disturbing Content. God have mercy on the poor soul who truly finds this, beyond horrifying imagery, beyond terrifying concepts. A 7 out of 10 would give someone nightmares, a 10 out of 10 would truly psychologically scar them. Do not use this rating lightly.

Unnecessary Cruelty: A character who does not truly receive it is at the receiving end of misery. Judge the animation as a whole and not just the instant.
1 in UC: Someone stole this character's sweet roll.
2 in UC: This character suffers some bruises for no reason.
3 in UC: The character suffers a minor loss of personal belongings (ex: the episode ends with him missing his wallet)
5 in UC: These characters have their talents, hobbies, or lifestyle mocked by someone they know/trust 'Putting Your Hoof Down]
8 in UC: This character is told that his neighbors, friends, and even family would be better off if he was never born [It's a Wishful Life]
9 in UC: This character is literally tortured for comedy. [A Pal for Gary]
10 in UC: This character is psychologically tormented to the point where he is contemplating suicide. [One Coarse Meal]

Rancid Morals: Not everyone who tries to teach a lesson has good intentions. Sometimes it's a failed parody, sometime's it's the writer not thinking everything through, but sometimes it's purely malicious. Remember that the episode has to specifically be trying to teach this. If it was by accident, it goes under "unfortunate implications." (and/or lackluster writing)

1 in RM: "Get along with people or evil ice monsters will kill all of you"
2 in RM: "Yes violence is sometimes the answer. I'll leave you to figure it out for yourself."
3 in RM: "You're absolutely perfect in who you are. You don't have any flaws whatsoever." 
4 in RM: "Being gay is not a choice. I learned this by choosing to get injected with a vaccine that turned me gay." [Family Gay]
5 in RM: "Hitting people is wrong, unless that person is hitting you in order to teach you a lesson." [Arthur's Big Hit]
6 in RM: "It's okay to be a useless freeloader, as long as you're chasing your dreams!" [The Groovenians]
7 in RM: "Crying DOES solve all of your problems after all!" [Stuck in the Wringer] (a moral so terrible it's hard to take seriously, thank god.)
8 in RM: "You see those people that look different than us? Yeah, they're lesser beings than us."
9 in RM: "You should really consider suicide sometimes, you're just taking up space if you don't"
10 in RM: "You should stay in an abusive relationship for the abuser's benefit" [Seahorse Seashell Party]

Low production values: Sometimes animation is used to get a cheap buck out of those who will buy anything animated out of their kids. That being said, keep in mind that not everything is going to be Disney. Try to keep a -1 or -2 modifier to indie projects that really don't have a budget. It all depends on how much you think they're trying.

1 in LPD: Some assets are reused from an earlier episode. It's only noticeable if you know where to look.
3 in LPD: Some assets are reused from an earlier episode. It's easy to see.
5 in LPD: There are large segments of the episode that are not animated. Previous clips are replayed in order to save quick buck.
9 in LPD: This animation would not pass on Newgrounds.
10 in LPD: It's just a still frame with someone talking, entirely.

Unfortunate Implications: It's like Rancid morals, except done by accident. Because of that fact, unfortunate implications tend to be worse and more common than rancid morals. Use that guide with a -3 modifier.

Character derailment: This in fusion with Low production values makes it truly difficult to have high scoring animation because low production values are almost exclusive to one-shot things, and character derailment is exclusive to ongoing shows. Character derailment is when a character does something that well, tarnishes their character whether it be out of character or not. The numbers on this vary from series-to-series way too much to give any sort of useful guide.


When you're done, add up all of the numbers out of 100. If you've done everything right, you should actually have a number that's surprisingly small. Please remember that Animated Atrocities are the ONLY requests I take, and I'll only consider them if someone fills this form out.
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Sukoshi13 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2018
Thanks for the advice. This is very helpful
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InfraredToa Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2017
Enter, when the atrocity points are 29/100, Is it that bad?
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CD20Scratch Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2017  Student Artist
cool
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sheilathegreat Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2017
What would be the rating for a moral that's "Your bully will murder you."/"If you are being bullied, the bully might be in the right and you shouldn't tell anyone, because the bully might get in trouble and no one likes getting in trouble." or a moral that doesn't match the story?
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Javilobos Featured By Owner May 25, 2017  Student Digital Artist
Do An Animated Atrocity of ''Horsey Twinkle Toes'' of Peppa Pig 
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ChillyIncorporated Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2016
I did my first one here, based on my first review.

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Wildgirl2000 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
How do you make an animated atrocities note page?
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ChillyIncorporated Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2017
I use Pixlr Editor to make these.
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Wildgirl2000 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Oh.
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Jak3And3rson3 Featured By Owner Edited Jul 5, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
The 1 pt. example for Rancid Morals is a poorly executed moral because Odin killed all of the ice giants long ago.
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TheManiac109 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2016
How do I fill these things out? 
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That comment I made about the shows with the rancid morals has been taken down because the beginning of the latest Animated Atrocities you said you don't like taking requests and frankly I didn't know you did. You USED to. 

If I bugged you so badly then I apologize. Of Course I'll still be making my own Animated Atrocities and sending them to your blank version not as a really as a request but it's the best way I can think of for other people to find my work.
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MightyMewtron Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
if it's a continuing fan project, like friendship is witchcraft, that bends the characters' personalities from the canon, does it count for character derailment? since in the context of the fanwork it's acceptable, but it's derailed compared to the source.
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SBells27Channel Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2015
I don't get the unfortunate implacations thing..
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TheBigBunearyfan901 Featured By Owner Edited Jun 16, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, Mr. Enter, these note pages are really helpful to me
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1992andbeyond Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2015
Maybe you should redo the rancid morals' examples. The crying moral is not worse than the freeloader moral; and that's not really the moral to The Groovenians it's an implication.
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ensatina650 Featured By Owner May 25, 2015
I filled out 2 forms with episodes i think would be great for you to review.
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1992andbeyond Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2015
How much would the moral 'You should be afraid of puppets' score? I know of an animated short that tries to teach that.
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Edited Oct 10, 2017
I'd say about 1-3. It's a bad moral, but I don't think it's quite as bad as the one from Family Gay.
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UsagiCandy123 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2015
 Oh, you'd be wrong about some people not taking that awful "Stuck in the Wringer" moral, seriously....(whisper) you'd be wrong.(shudder)
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Jerseylicious88 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2015
I didn't take the moral seriously. Only somebody that doesn't understand sarcasm would take that moral seriously. Although sadly quite a lot of kids don't understand sarcasm.
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UsagiCandy123 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2015
 I read a terribly written fanfiction by a teenager(possibly adult) that actually took that moral seriously and thinks it's a "great" moral. I could understand if a kid takes it seriously. But when a teenager/adult,(who should be old enough to know better) actually thinks it's a "terrific lesson" and is trying to teach other teens/adults that "moral".......that's just baffling and really unsettling. Holy Friggin' Crap 
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1992andbeyond Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2015
The Ballad Of Nessie handled that moral better.
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meta527ii Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2015
Okay, I follow these rules, but there a LOT arguments I have because there are SO many stupid things you say in this.
1. ONLY 1 FOR BLAND, GENERIC AND UNINSPIRED MUSIC?!!? WHY?!!? I would have given it something between a 5 and an 8.
2. HOW would someone missing their wallet only get 3 points? How could someone losing their money and not being able to pay for their house until they live on the streets and die only count for 3 atrocity points?
3. WHY THE HECK IS IT THAT if an episode's moral is good but exaggerates the consequences, we can only give it a one, but how come YOU can give a HIGHER score for rancid morals in your scorecard of SpongeBob's last stand when it does the exact same thing? If you're not going to follow your own rules, why should I?
4. What's the point of having both Rancid morals or unfortunate implications if they both mean the same thing with the only difference being intentional or not? Why not just have them be the same category?
5. Why is it that some of your scorecards have points for both Rancid morals AND unfortunate implications? I mean that would go against what you're saying about how rancid morals and unfortunate implications in the EXACT SAME SCORECARD which was already STUPID in the first place?
6. Why the heck does saying you're absolutely perfect in every single way only get 3 rancid moral points but crying to solve your problems gets 7?!!?
7. Wouldn't saying you should commit suicide get a full 10 out of 10?
8. If unfortunate implications have to have minus 3, that would mean that the maximum for unfortunate implications. So why do some of your scorecards have a full 10 out of 10 for it?
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2017
1. It may be bland, generic, or uninspired, but it's not necessarily painful to listen to. If it lasts too long, it can be a little painful, in which I give it a 2 on Cringe-Inducing Audio.

2. Missing their wallet doesn't necessarily mean losing all of their money from the bank. If they are unable to pay for their house, resulting in an eviction, forcing them to live in the street, making the ordeal fatal, then I would give it about 8-10 on unnecessary cruelty.

3. A one on Rancid Morals indicates that the moral is stupid, but not necessarily harmful. The moral from SpongeBob's Last Stand, however, is worse than a blatant fantasy moral.

4 & 5. I would just simply merge them together and add a new category. I could put Lack of Entertainment, but it may be a bit similar to Lackluster Writing.

6. The former moral is relatively harmless. However, the latter moral from Stuck in the Wringer is an abysmal moral that is hard to take seriously.

7. Maybe... I'm not sure why he doesn't really find it as bad as the moral from Seahorse Seashell Party.

8. Probably because of how dangerous these implications are.
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meta527ii Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2017
Well Stuck I'm the Wringer's moral wasn't even SUPPOSED to be taken seriously. Even if it was, how would crying be worse than having a superiority complex?
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2017
Maybe because the latter moral brings more harm than the former.
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meta527ii Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2017
...HOW? The worst it does is make people cry for no reason!
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Edited Oct 12, 2017
Maybe because the former moral is practically harmless, or at least doesn't bring as much harm.
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meta527ii Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2017
Causes people to go around thinking they can do whatever they want and act like d*****bags to people. Yeah, that's not nearly bad as crying.
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2017
Okay, I can see that the former moral isn't harmless.
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2017
Maybe because Timmy's or Sparky's voice isn't that grating.
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2017
Either he forgot to add the points or the episode isn't that painful to listen to.
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AntiHer0X Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2016

1. Probably because some music may be bland, generic and uninspired, but not necessarily painful to listen to — unless maybe it lasts a little too long. 


2. Maybe if such consequences where shown or implied in the animation itself, it would rate higher in UC.


3. Because something like “or evil ice monsters will kill all of you" is blatantly fantasy.


4 & 5. Because sometimes an animation ends up teaching a rancid moral and, in the process, could also end up teaching something else by accident. 


6. Even if someone genuinely believes the former moral, I’m not sure they would necessarily bring any harm on themselves… or at least as much harm as the latter moral.


7. Okay, that I’ll give you, although chances are something else has happened in the animation that would bump RM to 10 anyway.


8. Probably because of how bad/dangerous some of the implications are.

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AnimationCreated Featured By Owner Edited Jan 27, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
How many points would the implication be "If you lie, you should hurt the people that believed you!"
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SamHalls2015 Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2017
I'd say between 5 and 9.
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FyreTheBeast Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
The plot only seems to move when the writer pulls something out of their ass


....

Wait, are we talking about "Testing 123, 123" from MLP?

The episode that is filler yet is one of the most "beloved episodes"?

God

Shoot me
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meta527ii Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015
I love how he talks about how a good moral with exaggerated consequences gets only a 1 in terms of rancid morals, but he gives a higher score for rancid morals in his Spongebob's last stand scorecard ("save the environment or Mr. Krabs will have to sell the formula")
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PayNoPat Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2014
Hospital
Show: Peppa Pig
Writers are unknown
Directors/editors are unknown

CIA: 0
CIV: 0
LW: 2 (filler in a 5 minute episode)
Annoyance: 0
DC: 0
UC: 2 (Exactly what the conditions for two points in this cagetory are: A character suffers injuries and bruises for no reason)
RM: 8  'Injure yourself on purpose because you'll be treated specially'
LPV: 0
UI: 0
CD: 1 (One character seems to enjoy being injured)

Other Notes: Every show has a dud, and this is Peppa Pig's. Peppa falling over was cruel and unessacary filler IN A FIVE MINUTE EPISODE, and the moral is atrocious. 
 'Injure yourself on purpose because you'll be treated specially'. Seriously, that is a heinous moral. Other than that, there's the very minor offense of Pedro being OOC by seeming to enjoy being injured. Worst Peppa Pig episode ever. 

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Twist289 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015
I hate every episode of that show....
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crcoffin88redo Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2014
That seems more like an unfortunate implication.
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PayNoPat Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2014
Watch the episode. I think it pretty clearly states that moral.
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