I over thought the writing and under thought the art on this page ( it was drawn during my extended down time this year and I didn't feel like redrawing it - sorry), but I hope it keeps the story chugging along. It was good practising my space and planets stuff again too.
Kind of you to say. Let me know if you have any critique. Some of my other readers say they have a difficult time telling who's speaking during dialogue that I write. New stuff hath been posted. We're at the final lap. Also I put something temporary at the end, it will be erased before I write in the final chapter.
I'd need to give it another going over. Honestly, any character 'inaccuracies' are part of the appeal of fan fics. Different people interpret different characters their own way. I don't want to mess with that.