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Scattered Shots: Lara Minhelm 05
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Published: October 6, 2017
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Put on a uniform. Show em who's the boss.

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I over thought the writing and under thought the art on this page ( it was drawn during my extended down time this year and I didn't feel like redrawing it - sorry), but I hope it keeps the story chugging along. It was good practising my space and planets stuff again too.
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MaulMachine's avatar
Yeeessss I need buddy cop Mordians.
VoiceofRob's avatar
And yet the Sargent still saw fit to celebrate the occasion 
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Pretty transparent.
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Speaking of which. New stuff hath been added
Got a little heavy in a hurry 
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Very very entertaining.
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Kind of you to say. Let me know if you have any critique. Some of my other readers say they have a difficult time telling who's speaking during dialogue that I write.
New stuff hath been posted. 
We're at the final lap. Also I put something temporary at the end, it will be erased before I write in the final chapter. 
Mr-Culexus's avatar
I find your dialogue easy to read tbh. I look forward to reading the next bit of!
VoiceofRob's avatar
Any particulars on the feedback? 
Likes dislikes? 
Specific parts that could be added or different?
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I'd need to give it another going over. Honestly, any character 'inaccuracies' are part of the appeal of fan fics. Different people interpret different characters their own way. I don't want to mess with that.
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Fish-with-a-KnifeHobbyist Traditional Artist
Tsundere Sargent (say that ten times fast)
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It doesn't do too badly with my particular speech impediment.
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PsykerScumHobbyist Digital Artist
I'm not your buddy, guy
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I'm not your guy, friend!
VoiceofRob's avatar
I'm not your friend, pal!
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Hey, art ain't shabby, and the story's doing more than chugging. As usual, love the expressions, especially the ones in the second-to-last panel.
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That is deffo the best panel.
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I know I'd use Min's face as a reaction pic.
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And then the sergeant dies in the first battle.

Such is war.
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I can't quite describe that face in the second to last panel, but I somehow know exactly what feeling it's portraying and I love it.
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Being very much caught off guard
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i love this;

"CALL ME THAT AGAIN"
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Only slightly louder but with weight. Lara would learn that tone.
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Can't wait to see their misadventures! Also love the lines in the last panel!
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