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Queen of spades
number 1 grades
your the powerful
and most intelligent
of them all

Queen of hearts
your love stung
like darts
your beauty
lies behind ur skin

Queen of clubs
your luck and your grace
the smile on your face
the fortune you hold
the heart not as cold

Queen of diamonds
the contour of the 4 points
of all the 5 joints
of the shape of the gliterring rock
that you kept in your eyes
The 4 queens.. each ofthe shapes have different charactheristics just like how u play poker. Their sets of greatness. When i look at the queen's card its like.. each of them have a different meaning. So here it is.. from me :D (Big Grin)
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blackrimmedeyes Featured By Owner May 28, 2003
I like the rhyme. This has hidden meaning, which i dunnoe what. Pfftt.
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ekg Featured By Owner May 25, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
this sounds like the first verse of a freestyle rap song...not a bad thing...but i think you should build upon this...add more stanzas...you kinda leave the "story" hanging...sometimes it works to do that...but not here...add more...
i do like though what you do have....only if i rapped it in my head.

thanks for sharing.

ViNce
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