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Beyond reality of a dangerous mind
Beyond insanity of greed and power
I never wonder what i will find
the undestined future of humankind
The jittering terror lurks in the desert
with the stow of behemothic hazard
As the greater evil tries to find
the needle in a haystack
only to find grains of useless
the ways of good versus evil
are already great evil versus greater evil
as we eat the rotten meat of dismay
and the shadows of death
take us away
theres no saint, theres no prophets to save us
only death could save us from this insane
war-mongering planet
thanks to the greater brute
we mankind serve no jucier peace fruit
There is no good in this world only evil... take us and eat us all.. no balance no fairness.. armegeddon is coming and all of which man kind has obtained will be lost. Here are the treatment of all governments and world power.. sunken with greed and power..
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sto67 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
"only to find grains of useless"
you left it hanging there
some words just dont flow
behemothic is not a word, although i understand where you were going
behemothic just doesnt sound right, too many syllables, its a line in itself!!
mmmm this poem doesnt tie together
needs ..... a bit more to join it all together you know?
also separate it into stanzas, because its a bit of a blob here
just some hints
lataz :D (Big Grin)
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scoota269 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2003  Hobbyist Photographer
is this the way the world is going, i certainly hope not! but its comforting to see that im not the only one who has opened there eyes to the truth. there are still many who are not willing to believe and many who will still not believe even when they see with their own eyes.
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discombobulate Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2003
Jawdrop This is the most dark ever piece u've written dear!~
I'm so impressed! The words u descibe i can cleary pictured it in my mind!! Great one!
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simplyann Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2003
What a dark future you've painted for humankind! The mood of this piece is deeply set with the ideas expressed in these lines :

"As the greater evil tries to find
the needle in a haystack
only to find grains of useless
the ways of good versus evil
are already great evil versus greater evil"

It's a depressing outlook, but well described.
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