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This finger is twitching
for years my love is nothing
empty like an unloaded gun
i look through that mirror
with anger and pain
my heart so vulgar
silent and vain
who will i kill tonight
myself or the one who breaks my heart
these bullets dive into ur tender meat
eating you alive
die my darling die
your blood so red
as i just shot your head
and insanity steps in
ived become muddled
I have killed you my love
this gun.. isnt a weapon
its the jelousy in me
that kills me too
i hate you so much
it disfunction me
forever
Violence steps in..


i hate you..

u broke my heart

i love you

coz i cant get over it

im... crazy
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MadCatter Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2004  Hobbyist Photographer
Awesome poem :| I like dark poems... they make me happy *sounds demented and gets a lot of weird looks* But I like weird looks to :D

Keep up the good work, and dont think too hard about your relationship ;) Things will get better.
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DawnFire84 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2003  Professional Photographer
it's a good poem, a bit dark and disturbing, but a good poem nonetheless, nicely written. Good job! :)
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p0rn0cr33p Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2003
apadah, dun be a sadass lah. Wait I slap you ard. That's actually freaky. But anyways, anything that pleases you!
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wolfsbane83 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2003
Dude, how long are you going to keep this up? Forget her, she's not worth a shred of your attention. You don't need her to complete you. She is just a memory, one you should just discard into the garbage bin.

BTW, nicely written Poem. At least you're directing your anger and feeling into art instead of actual acts of violence :nod:

Peace be with you, bro.
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mortichro Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2003
haha im kinda like over her.. im just bored actually so yeah this is what i produced lol
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wolfsbane83 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2003
:nod:
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Pawz89 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2003
It's beautiful, I love the wording, and the subject.
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