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Where to start?? So, this picture is `h` tall and `w`wide. From the very bottom there is a 'dark moulding' maybe 3 or 4"'s high, then t...

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Author:  Minion_Of_Solitude
Disclaimer:  "Star Trek" is someone else's property.{Bastards!}  "Home Improvement" (and "Tool Time") belongs to a third party.{Rabid Targhs!!}  And if I mention any other entities we'll have blown well past a Block-Party and into full-on Mob!!!!  oops.  `nuff said.
Maturity content:  maybe some foul language.
Pairing:  Implied F/F
Please, kindly let me know what you think, even if you don't quite do it kindly.
Well, one other item.  This is my First Story Submission.  But something like my 17th idea.  It came to me after reading "Fear and Loathing in a Turbolift" by Ralst.  At least twice.
And last but not least, I checked the earliest `date` for this concept.
drum roll..... something like November....2007??!!?  Oh, I'm a sad puppy.
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I reviewed for what I thought was a damned fine picture, got caught up in my head, but Knew I HAD to somehow share the rest of what was in my head.  So, here we are...
Your Azula seems poised and regal, yet calm, accepting of the Time and Care her friend has bequeathed her...
...When hands go still and a simply stated ".. all done" comes from behind her, does she now stand and takes three steps forward, pauses, then turns and takes two steps back and turns her head just so, a bit right.. then left.. then centers.  And with a serene mien, she bows.  Not just a tilt of a forehead or bend of neck, but something about where the breastbone rests, and everything above curves forward and down....
A petal drifts a bit between them, and Azula stands upright.  A smile washed over the face before her, and she returned it with one of her own.  Hers began with her eyes and this suffused her whole face.  She giggled at the girl in pink, only to arrest herself in shock,
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Author:  Minion_Of_Solitude
Disclaimer:  "Star Trek" is someone else's property.{Bastards!}  "Home Improvement" (and "Tool Time") belongs to a third party.{Rabid Targhs!!}  And if I mention any other entities we'll have blown well past a Block-Party and into full-on Mob!!!!  oops.  `nuff said.
Maturity content:  maybe some foul language.
Pairing:  Implied F/F
Please, kindly let me know what you think, even if you don't quite do it kindly.
Well, one other item.  This is my First Story Submission.  But something like my 17th idea.  It came to me after reading "Fear and Loathing in a Turbolift" by Ralst.  At least twice.
And last but not least, I checked the earliest `date` for this concept.
drum roll..... something like November....2007??!!?  Oh, I'm a sad puppy.

                               P  H  A  S  E  S

Tom, you're still an Idiot, but when you're right, you are right.

Stifling another chuckle, she reached into the burnt housing and disconnected the relays, inducer, and emitter of the replicator that had overloaded and proceeded to retest the power manifold.

The armament used by the local pack of thugs during the last bi-weekly chaos that here in this small corner of the Delta passed for `First Contact` fuses certain trace elements that make up many of the solid components in the ships infrastructure.  All three attacking ships were easily handled, but those weapons left their signature.  The last nine days had been one long cycle of `rip it out, TEST it, reinstall`.  Life support, replicators, even something as innocuous as an ODN line or a Gel-pack could blow even after being put into standby mode.  

Yep, the Old Girl was sick. . . .

Decks One through Four, parts of Six, all of Eight, parts of Ten, and Eleven on down that primarily connected to Engineering spaces were all on `highest-priority`.  The Engines themselves: Warp and Impulse, had been walked over, on, around, and through.  And everyone helped out, from the top down, right to Naomi.  The other night Neelix tried having a movie-night in the Messhall, on Captain's Assistant Wildmans' recommendation to "help morale".  Considering what the movie was though.

Well, a little comedy does lift storm clouds, dulls the sting about history Having to repeat itself, and makes one wonder about the role of Irony.

She stood and stretched, letting her eyes close and a smile tug at her lips as she thought how that night started with a movie about a pink "submarine" (well, the first twenty odd minutes) and ended with her and a tall blonde trapped in Turbolift 4 for an hour and a half.  Again.  And got caught.
Again.

But it had given her part of The Idea.

With said Idea in mind, and still standing, she pivoted on her feet a true 90 degrees to the left and with measured strides stepped to her destination.

Opening her eyes, the compact and confident woman looked to the left of 8 o-clock, and traversed her sight across the domain surrounding her with a measured, critical care, all 210 degrees of arc.  Nearly everything fit into the image of but a moment before she had had of how she wanted things just so.  Now, physical fact mirrored thought...well...

"-Except for this damned Auxiliary maintenance panel!"  Why won't the power flow from the secondary emitters to the gravity plate balance out.  And she slumped to the floor into the middle of her primary worksite.

With a flick of her hand she picked up an errant PADD by her knee and scrolled back and forth over the phases of her outline.  And the thumb of her other hand toggled a Tri-corder's stored sensor readings, showing that something was off.  Focusing on the instrument she tapped into the Ship's higher networks, tracking back through relays to the principal junction she hoped to use for her project.  And already having evaluated the course of her resourses against her desired outcome last night, again, had with the morning begun adding in the adjustments she needed.

Yeah, right

"Computer, time."

Time is thirteen ten

"I'm close, really really close."  

Leaning back against the wall-plating, elbows propped on knees, she lowered her head with her arms crossed over at the back of her neck.  Okay, start with the picture.

{imagine this memory in a baritone voice}  "Engineering is like art, so what is it you want it to say".

"I have no Damn clue."  She slowly sat upright and extended her legs out in front of her, her eyes closed all the while, and thumped the back of her head against the bulkhead behind her.  "There was the Vulcan D`hol and her 'Expressions of Purity'.  Talk about an empty White canvass.  Some Human liked Yellow, another, who?... somebody had a Blue fixation, or was it a period?--

B`Elanna twitched and her eyes sprang open as she remembered a field trip her mother took her on to see the great works of Mar`Xathn, the great-great-great-grandfather of Kor.  All that blood, at the darkest edges of Greens and Blacks, through to a faded Bronze hue.  Really not something to parade a nine year-old in front of... thanks, mother.

Taking a deep breath, she hugged herself as she once again let her gaze wander around.  Feeling a cramp in her leg she moved it, folding, unfolding, and folding it again as she looked to where it had rested, to see what it had been on.  oh

When she first stretched out her foot had pushed the PADD away, it was now up against a spanner and some conduit line. Unfolding her leg all the way again she tried to use her heel to drag it back within reach, then tried to hook her boots' toe against it to turn it for a better try-

She froze.

She Looked at the PADD... and the diagram displayed on it... at the angle it now sat in relation to her....

Fixed on it, she let her left hand drift around her side til she felt the Tri-corder and snatched it up.  Leaning over herself she looked at the PADD for another solid minute before looking at the instrument in her hand.  Looking back down she then picked the PADD up.  Holding it upright in front of her she turned it sideways.  Then back the way it was....... and back to its side.

And a thought occurred to her.  

Letting the mood and a newfound Muse lead her she placed the Tri-corder to the side as the PADD consumed her attention.

.... not realizing that a new icon on the Tri-corders' display began to slowly move in the diagram...

                     CUE  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~  SOUNDTRACK  ~~~~~~~~~~~~
Phases
I keep telling myself `One day I'ma gonna finish a story.. yeah, right.  My most recent file entry for "Phases" is from Sep 2017, have a decent chapter 2, but nothing really jumps out for me with 3-6.  Yeah, I was thinking in total 6 or 7 chps, so here's hoping I can figure out how to get to the end, of which, IS in my head and has been for nearly a dozen years, and is a funny punch-line.
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Hello all, my birthday was last Monday, me and my cat are reasonably healthy, and Every day can always be That day to learn something new.  At the moment its showing 3-0 on the TV between the Tigers-White Sox going into the 4th inning.  I've Finally learned how to post something in my gallery (by properly `editing` myself), and who knows, maybe I'll fix a few more things around here.
Art Is music, that can relax you, excite you, motivate you, drive you.
Sculpture, charcoal on canvas, target practice with a 70# recurve, acrylics on a rail car or highway underpass, pounding out 10-12 miles every other day as fast as you can, 10 mm roman miniatures, cooking, Big Ben jigsaw puzzles (or crossword puzzles), bowling, Katas, reading trashy romance novels (or reading medical texts), sensory deprivation, Astronomy, watching or reading porn (well doing porn?) falling from a plane at 16,000ft.....
We seeing a trend?
Its simply getting the left side and the right side of your brain to 'behave'.
I've been trying `free association writing` for almost 5 years now, and sometimes it spills over into other things in my life.  Some of you may have noticed.  And commented.
jack-inqu13 has an entry in His Journal from Oct-2016 that I've now had to always try to keep in mind.  I wasn't the bully as a kid, more the odd duck who did get from others.
So, after all this, this is my question: Do we give Everyone a chance at being better, or accept that perhaps there can (oops, maybe already IS) be some process in our daily lives where the broken ones Should be weeded out.
And, damn, now its 5-5, end of the 7th.  We need another rally goose.
I reviewed for what I thought was a damned fine picture, got caught up in my head, but Knew I HAD to somehow share the rest of what was in my head.  So, here we are...


Your Azula seems poised and regal, yet calm, accepting of the Time and Care her friend has bequeathed her...
...When hands go still and a simply stated ".. all done" comes from behind her, does she now stand and takes three steps forward, pauses, then turns and takes two steps back and turns her head just so, a bit right.. then left.. then centers.  And with a serene mien, she bows.  Not just a tilt of a forehead or bend of neck, but something about where the breastbone rests, and everything above curves forward and down....
A petal drifts a bit between them, and Azula stands upright.  A smile washed over the face before her, and she returned it with one of her own.  Hers began with her eyes and this suffused her whole face.  She giggled at the girl in pink, only to arrest herself in shock, and her eyes now round as wagon wheels.... only to giggle some more....
Ty Lee continued to just kneel where she was a warm smile radiating from her whole being.  She stood by rocking back with hips and knees flexing to just rise to the balls of her feet before settling flatfooted where she was.  Her smile became a smirk as her left hand presented a `shooing` motion to the Crown Princess. The Princess in question lifted an eyebrow of her own, then took a good step back. The Firebenders only thought was this ought to be Good.
Ty Lee flexed her knees just slightly and straightened up as she barely glanced to the edge of the rock and the space Azula had now given her.  She sighed.  Her left foot stepped forward, her right stepped to the edge, and her left went forward and down to the courtyard proper... and the rest of her followed suit to stand.  Then she offered a small curtsy. "Ta da."
A handful of heartbeats later the Princesses now indignant look soured before smoothing to a blank slate.  And like an inch-worm showing itself with a mornings dawn a regal tongue slipped between pressed lips as far as it could go... before blowing a `raspberry` and slipping back inside.
The acrobat locked herself to a rigid position of Attention and presented the very best Fire Nation salute she could, before letting her eyes meet those of her friend.
"Better, silly girl.  Much better."  And the speaker let another giggle echo forth.
With eyes linked both girls now crashed into each other offering their best friend their very best hug.
Air and breeze skittered, the sunshine itself hummed around them....
As they parted hands slipped down arms to entwine their fingers, and Ty Lee looked over her handiwork again.  Azula waited with the pad of one thumb caressing the knuckle underneath it.  Ty Lee nodded.  "Its good."
"Of course it is, Ty.  You did it."
The tumbler merely blushed.  Then separating herself from the other by stepping back she gave a solemn, slow, formal bow deep from the waist to her Crown Princess.
"Rise, my subject."
And she did, a grin on her lips and a sparkle in her eyes.
"And, thank you, for just being you, my friend.  Please, always be true to yourself, Ty.  Please, never change."
"I'll remember that, Azula.  Always."

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Yes, a time Before Ozai corrupted the young Princess.
Andays`Crowning a Firelord`, An extended thought
I just reviewed her work (and chose it as a fav) and realized I was doing it Again...
Some of you do know what I sometimes get carried away with.
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Hello, I got here by that old adage, `see what they liked`. And I must also add my name to those so captivated
At first, I'm seeing what I feel are the influences of Renoir, but only just a bit. You've certainly have a technique all your own. Indigo, to greens and yellows at the foliage, to the brightness of the stucco. How some windows are unlit from within to how others are... showing how these homes not only have life, but some soul. How your moss and Ivy show them to be old, Noble souls, indeed. I'm thinking some time in August, perhaps.
I've browsed over Narbonne and Adge, Istres, Avignon, and Montpellier, and others.
By 'Google' maps, none have the feel that they should. Ah, but as the 19th gave way to the 20th century? A simpler, resplendent, life.
Thank you for this!
First, I love fanfics, IF it is of a pairing(s) that I like, or at least Can see happening
with How the author applies proper thought, between the characters presented in canon, and they can show some real development in that pairing. `Korrasmi` is one such I do get behind!
They came out drunk, they walked themselves into the bad guys clutches, they escape... into deeper trouble. Very original, not.
So, this has 3 main parts, as they waking bound up to them escaping that lair and taking shelter in a cave is basically the middle part.
There were typos throughout, pacing needed to be better, you've muzzled the `heroes` so they (and by extension, your readers) can not develop their connections to each other, or the antagonist. Being 'just' a normal human, yet possessing a keen, structured mind, it is perhaps Asami who could have offered different questions to Drider, and either they be the right course of thought, or it presents Korra an `aha` moment that takes them to a winning strategy. Oh, that's right, you already Gagged them.
The Avatar Is mortal. They're basically nude enough, so, no means or tools or Other manipulations to free themselves.
Edit the Hell out of this.. Look at the end of the 2nd to last sentence: " and began to coat them more in silk" ???
try ", and began to coat them in MORE silk."
Hello all, my birthday was last Monday, me and my cat are reasonably healthy, and Every day can always be That day to learn something new.  At the moment its showing 3-0 on the TV between the Tigers-White Sox going into the 4th inning.  I've Finally learned how to post something in my gallery (by properly `editing` myself), and who knows, maybe I'll fix a few more things around here.
Art Is music, that can relax you, excite you, motivate you, drive you.
Sculpture, charcoal on canvas, target practice with a 70# recurve, acrylics on a rail car or highway underpass, pounding out 10-12 miles every other day as fast as you can, 10 mm roman miniatures, cooking, Big Ben jigsaw puzzles (or crossword puzzles), bowling, Katas, reading trashy romance novels (or reading medical texts), sensory deprivation, Astronomy, watching or reading porn (well doing porn?) falling from a plane at 16,000ft.....
We seeing a trend?
Its simply getting the left side and the right side of your brain to 'behave'.
I've been trying `free association writing` for almost 5 years now, and sometimes it spills over into other things in my life.  Some of you may have noticed.  And commented.
jack-inqu13 has an entry in His Journal from Oct-2016 that I've now had to always try to keep in mind.  I wasn't the bully as a kid, more the odd duck who did get from others.
So, after all this, this is my question: Do we give Everyone a chance at being better, or accept that perhaps there can (oops, maybe already IS) be some process in our daily lives where the broken ones Should be weeded out.
And, damn, now its 5-5, end of the 7th.  We need another rally goose.

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