made a critique video about three of my OC's, and I suggest checking it out if you want to ^^youtu.be/j9HiUfs-lDA
And I've made the edits, well all except one, which is Dimitri's palette. I just need to make a small adjustment to that :0
-Explain why Medi never chose to spoke (She was very shy, so she was worried she would mess up her words and be embarrassed because of it)
-Explain why Medi and her brother were exiled.
(Old enemies of her parents wanted their children to grow up and learn of the dangers of the world, so they exiled their children to different worlds. They didn't want their children to be oblivious to the hell of the world and to be dependent on their parents.)
Explain why Medi won't kill anyone, but she'll give the person either physical and/or mental scars:
(Medi won't kill anyone because she believes killing an opponent is dishonurable. She would rather have them them repent for their sins instead of straight up killing them.She would believe that it would make her no better than them. She will, however give the person either physical and/or mental scars if they push her beyond her limit. Medi is an angry person, she gets angry at the slightest of things. If people really piss her off, and I mean really piss her off, she will be content with giving the person physical and/or mental scars to make it clear that she isn't a person to be messed with.)
Explain why Medi goes with the Order:
(Jesse offers Medi a place on the Order after exhibiting her melee fighting skills. She tells Jesse she'll think about the offer, but she'll live in Beacontown if it was okay with him/her. She stays the night in the Order Temple, because she dueled Jesse right before sunset, and she didn't have much time to build shelter before nightfall. The next morning is when she got the anonymous tip that her brother is well and alive in the White Pumpkin's world. The Order sees the tip after Medi shows them, and they decide to go together because they conclude it's not safe for Medi to go alone because of past experience with the White Pumpkin.)
Add more to her personality, likes and dislikes, etc.
Personality: Medi is more a less one of those people whose defining emotion is anger. She gets angry easily, and when she's angry she speaks in a more sarcastic tone and she raises her voice more often. This led to Medi being feared by some people. But anger isn't her entire personality. Once Medi isn't angry, she's very much a chill person, speaking in a calm tone, and in general being more likable then when she's angry.
Likes: Since a young age, Medi's always been fascinated with music boxes. Just the soothing melody always fascinated her. She still has this fascination to this day.
Dislikes: There are certain people in the world Medi hates. For example, she hates people who are too cocky for their own good. She also hates mobs like creepers, as they constantly explode, often managing to harm her and blow up everything around it.
Strengths: Medi is a good melee fighter, as demonstrated many times. She's quick on her feet so she can dodge attacks pretty quickly as well. To knock her down, attack her from behind.
Weaknesses: Since being exiled from her world and away from her family, it had a harsh effect on Medi's mental state, especially her emotions. She isn't bipolar, par se, but she has a difficult time trying to control her emotions, especially if she is angry. This gives her opponents an edge as her weakness could be leveraged and used to their advantage.
Fears: Medi has one of those irrational fears that some people consider her stupid for. Her irrational fear is antique porcelain dolls. She claims porcelain dolls to be creepy because of 'the glass eyes that follow you around as you move' and ' the fact they look like possessed children'.
Hobbies: Medi, as stated before, is a melee fighter, so she's constantly trying to refine any small flaws in her combat skills. She is also trying to better herself at range combat, since she isn't very good with a bow and arrow in her hands. When she isn't training, she tries to teach herself how to program. She claims to find programming more bearable than making live circuits with redstone dust and repeaters.
-Change colour palette a little (either hoodie or shorts)
-Explain why she wears the mask
(Ever since being diagnosed with Bipolar disorder, Dimitri isolated herself, and as a result, she covered her mouth with her mask because of her personal insecurities. Her mom's death contributed to this as well.)
-Establish the relationship between Dimitri and her mother and how her death impacted Dimitri
(Dimitri, like her father, was very close to her mother and would do a lot of things with her when she was young and when she wasn't training to become a Shadow Hunter. Her mother was the first to notice Dimitri's symptoms of Bipolar once she was diagnosed with it. As a result, once Dimitri tried to harm herself due to her depressive episode, she drove Dimitri down to the hospital and got her wounds patched, because Dimitri managed to stab herself. There they found out Dimitri was diagnosed with Bipolar disorder and they gave her antipsychotics and mood stabilizers to help. A few years passed and Dimitri noticed her mother had exhibited memory problems, sleep problems, seizures, migraines, and most symptoms for a brain tumour. Dimitri and her dad drove up the hospital and asked if Dimitri's mother was diagnosed with anything. The doctor came back with bad news. Her mother had been diagnosed with brain cancer, and she would only have a year at most to live. Dimitri and her dad were distraught, knowing their time with their mother/wife was limited. They both spent as much time with their mother as possible. When her mother started getting worse, and she got deathly sick, she was rushed to hospital. She died a day later. Dimitri was absolutely devastated after the death of her mother, and so she distanced herself from her family, crying for days on end in her room. She started wearing the mask constantly, as the mask was a gift from her mother. She wore it so a remnant of her dead mother remained with her. After the funeral, Dimitri and her dad moved to Edgewood.)
-What was about the dad saying her first official Shadow Hunting task was in Edgewood?
(Her father meant it was her first official Shadow Hunting task in EDGEWOOD. So he's saying that the task was her first official Shadow Hunting task in a new town.)
-Explain why her bully ordered Yakuza to torture Alexa
(Her bully wanted Alexa gone because she was getting jealous about Alexa rising in popularity around the school, and she wanted to be the top of the school like it was before Alexa came. She bullied her, but it didn't really effect Alexa. So she paid the Yakuza to dispose of her.
-Explain why Alexa's personality changes on a full moon.
(The reason why Alexa's personality changes on a full moon is because of her nerves. As a werewolf, she can sense when a full moon is up. Her nerves react to this by slowly shifting the way she acts during a full moon.)
Change her full moon design
I'm just going to describe her full moon design. On a full moon, once calm, she has her normal, human look, but with black ears and a black tail. Once slightly angry, her full moon form changes. She retains her human look for the most part, and she still has the black ears and tail. She gains black elbow length claws and yellow slit eye pupils. Once she's at the peak of her anger (which is easy with her full moon personality), she transforms into an actual wolf, and she stays like that until she calms down, or she is knocked unconscious. In the full wolf form, she is incredibly hostile and dangerous. Once she transforms back into a human from the full wolf form, at first she doesn't recall ever hurting anyone whilst in the wolf form. Then she finds out after seeing video footage of her rampage caught by security cameras. She's tried to control that form ever since.