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:icond2kprime:
Nice work overall. Just a few things that kind of break the laws of physics though.

I'll start on the biggest problems. The breasts. I think you got the boob-sway correct in terms of 'inertia[ for the girls (especially the blue-haired girl cause that is perfect,) however it seems like with both the blue-haired girl and red-haired girl their boobs are taped together or glued together. If they were wearing tops then it would be correct. However breasts when uncoupled don't stay together. Gravity causes each breast to slighty slide to one side or the other do to the curvature of the rib cage. Even large ones.

Also, I see that you are having a problem with warping again. The red-haired girl I notice that her right nipple expands and contracts as her right breast moves. It almost looks like it is smearing. Her left thigh also is expanding slightly. Her head is slightly expanding and contracting, and her hair LOOKS like it is on a separate layer. I know that it has to be on a separate layer in order to create that illusion of hair movement, but part of that illusion is to make it look like it is NOT on a separate layer. I see this problem with the blue-haired girl as well as when her hair swings to the left, it looks like it's not even attached to her. The black-haired girl's hair is okay. The movement is plausible there.

The right arm of the red-haired girl is not only expanding and contracting, but slightly bending in an unnatural way in terms of her right forearm. Her pose and movement almost look creepy.

The only other major problem is the left foot of the blue-haired girl. It looks like you forgot to redraw her left foot after you cut the original piece up to create separate layers. It's a easily-fixed error.


Overall it's a cool piece but not without it's problems. Some can be easily fixed, others may take some brainstorming. I'm not sure how you could fix the breasts EASILY. Putting tops on them would do that, but it would defeat the purpose of this composition. You would have to go back and do some major editing in whatever program you use to separate the breasts and get them on different layers.

Obviously if the recipient of the comp is happy with the way that it is then you can leave it alone and keep things in mind for the next comp. However if they haven't received it yet I would put the extra work in to correct those errors. Especially considering the price of several hundred dollars. In fact I would just fix it anyway even if the customer already has it and send ti to them later free of charge.

I hope this critique helps you to refine your awesome work.
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LETMESEEBEUTY Featured By Owner May 11, 2018
Gorgeous fun
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner May 12, 2018  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconletmeseebeuty:
LETMESEEBEUTY Featured By Owner May 18, 2018
You are very welcome
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:iconadrien101:
Adrien101 Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  Student Digital Artist
wow
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:iconzacharyknox222:
zacharyknox222 Featured By Owner May 7, 2018  Hobbyist Artist
i love it!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner May 10, 2018  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconzacharyknox222:
zacharyknox222 Featured By Owner May 7, 2018  Hobbyist Artist
i iike it!
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zacharyknox222 Featured By Owner May 7, 2018  Hobbyist Artist
i like it!
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Sargonarhes Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2017
OMG you animated it! <3 <3 <3
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:iconmcoberpro:
McOberPro Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh yeah
Sexy damce time <3
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
haha
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:iconpawfeather:
PawFeather Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2016
I really like your work.  The work of game studio Vanillaware instantly pops into my head. Well done.
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
I like this studio! Thank you!
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:iconpawfeather:
PawFeather Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2016
Sure thing. :D
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:iconmarcotonio-desu:
Marcotonio-desu Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2016
Hahaha, eu fico procurando pelas novas técnicas, gostei do "stereo" aplicado nos peitos da do meio. x)
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Haha, to aprendendo umas paradas novas, só não sei quando eu vou usa-las, mas em breve hehe
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S0nofKrypton Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2016
Great job, Michel!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconmr-pink-rose:
Mr-Pink-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2016
They look gorgeous and sexy in those outfits, and the dance animation is very smooth!!!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:iconmirakor:
mirakor Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2016
Sexy dance!! :love:
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!
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mpz28 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016
very nice Haha Love Bravo #2 
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!!
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tubi4 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016
AWESOME!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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tubi4 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2016
Welcome :la:
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Yamikou Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOW brilliant
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconyamikou:
Yamikou Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you are welcome :3
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A3Kitsune Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016
Nice.                                                                                                                                                                                       Happy Dumpling 
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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SansThePunnyPerson Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Is The Black haired ones foot supposed to do that stretchy thingy?
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
her left or right foot?
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:iconsansthepunnyperson:
SansThePunnyPerson Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
the one behind the other
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:iconzappa10:
zappa10 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thank you!
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:icond2kprime:
D2KPrime Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Professional General Artist
Much better now.  Great job.
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!
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GOLDEN-EYED-TIGA Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Damnnn
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
=D
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:iconcrishi:
Crishi Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
looks cool :) what program do u use to make all your animated paintings?
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
After Effects
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:iconbun-of-a-glitch:
Bun-Of-A-Glitch Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
the brown haired one's left foot looks a little odd
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Just fixed it, thank you =D
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Bun-Of-A-Glitch Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
np ^ - ^ b
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Eevaporeon Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016
Love it!!!
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:iconmichelvictor:
MichelVictor Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
Thanks!
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ZombieSandwich Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2016  Professional Digital Artist
The boobs of the pink haired one though.... o.O
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