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Watched a couple of movies tonight and I sketched a bit while watching the movies (a habit of mine). Sketch unrelated to the movie subject, just let my dragon love shine through. The first is your usual fire breathing dragon bellowing some battle roar and spitting flames as usual. The second just some triceratops variant for a dragon I named Squared Jaw Bull dragon. I know, not very imaginative but what can you do?
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Or it could be a beauty thing that kind of dragon is doing with his jaw bone, by rubbing it by the stones into shape to attract females . But no, when I designed it I made that square jaw in mind with some jaw bumping. Thats why I made the thick neck, with the big muscles.
Pretty good but its a little impersonal. Its like you tell it from outside the story instead of being involved in it. It gives the sensation of a documentary, something you look at and describe instead of being in the middle of it. You start with your character, jump into the elder story then jump back to the character which is perfect in novels to break the monotony but its distracting in short stories. Try starting with the back story and then bring your character into it. Like: "The ruins were old, smelling of burned stone and generations of mold and dead mushrooms. Upon the broken archways, vines crawled in green bridges between the stones, between the ancient pavement, trees grew twisted roots and brood their saplings. Winds covered with dirt a long time ago the remaining murals and carvings and rained washed away the faces of the statues ages ago. There were long abandoned nests above the broken ceilings, in the green crowns of the trees and deep borrows under what remained of the once tall walls..." Then you go with the elders and after that you introduce you character. Maybe try this structure in the next chapter.
WOW! Thank You my friend. I will see what I can do with this. I do see what you are saying. But I have had a problem of follow through and finishing so that is why I made it only 1000 words and tried to convey what was happening in the inspiration, the pic in the link in the comment. Definitely added your comments to the notes I have gotten so far on that story. Thank You again
I'm glad if I helped I spent years going to literary circles and I have a novel I never seem to finish so I do have a bit of experience with words You just need to get closer to your subject, don't be so subjective, get closer, describe things like you would feel them. Even if you put them in the third person