Current Residence: Perth Amboy, NJ Favourite genre of music: Do not really have a favorite Favourite style of art: Animation MP3 player of choice: I-touch or Zune Skin of choice: Hispanic Favourite cartoon character: Too many
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Luis Royo Alex Ross
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A little into Anime, Comics, Animated movies, Card games, Drawing, Video Games
I think you did a great job with the subject matter of your story. You knew what you wanted to say and you did a good job on the delivery. I thought it was great how with the text language you didn't assume that everyone would know what you're talking about and helped them out with the footnotes. I'm honestly not sure if your method was good for it as it took me out of the story here and there but I myself would not know how to present it if I were to include it. For the future, I say be careful on not throwing it in too much.
There are spots in your art where it seems you could've drawn your characters a bit better. It almost seems rushed sometimes. Not sure if its because you put yourself on a deadline. Which isn't a bad thing. And I know because there are other times where you do a superb job in drawing out your characters. My biggest evidence to this is when you drew the character I gave you as a extra. You drew the character better than I did and I designed him. Maybe give yourself a little extra time in the future to practice drawing out your characters. I think your values also suffered from this too. As in some panels you do have a pretty decent range of values but there alot of panels that if the lines weren't there, all you would see is just a melting pot of grays.
Closing thoughts Your writing is actually the best part of your comic but your art is not far behind either. You started your story and made sure that every moment was a important part making for a quick and efficient read. To draw a comic you have to be able to draw everything, and I think you can but you might have needed a little more time. I also ran through the same problems with my fan comic. On an extra note with values, trying doing your character turnarounds in color and then grayscale them and make a separate file of it. It will help you to see values better. See what's darker and lighter. Keep up the good work and I hope this helped!
Your Lineart seems to be spot on for the character. Except for the strip of hair to his right shoulder. I honestly think it should be a little higher to match the other side.
Your coloring and shading are good too. Seems you have a consistent lightsource all around.
The holes on his neck and his lower jaw I think should have a bit more of a ripped to them. It looks a little like if that was his actual skin and someone bit him. Really hard.
The line "I will get up again" I think should have not been on the bottom. I almost missed it because it was too light and on BlackWar, as opposed to "If you see me fall", which is placed above in the background. But that one I also think should have been a bit darker.
I think the rain for stuff like this might be overdone but honestly I wouldn't know what else to do it with either.
Overall, your a perfect example of what happens when someone continues to better themselves. You continue to improve. Each time. Keep it going. This might be your best work so far.
The challenge of making a realistic looking creature into a Pokemon is to make it a more simplistic style but still have key features that make it look like the base.
I think that's something you were able to pull it off.
The color is nothing that is dramatic but gets the idea across and doesn't seem that dramatic is what you were going for.
As for the anatomy, it looks okay but the original monster seems to have been modeled after The T. Rex. I think if you would have practiced how to draw a T. Rex a little more this would have helped in the overall look.
In conclusion, you nailed the main idea just fine but the anatomy could have used some work. Keep up the good work.