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Another new chapter, with extra nightmare fuel! :D

EDIT: Whoops. A guy on fanfic.net pointed out that I had majorly goofed in the last paragraph. It's been fixed
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SilentPianist's avatar
Gosh, your fanfic is made of gold. I really like it. <3
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Yeah. I'm taking a break due to writers block at the mo, but hopefully I can get back on it soon.
I've been loving this story so far! It's certainly more gruesome than the game, but everything feels absolutely spot-on. I really liked the use of the name Limbo; did you choose it to continue the theme of Jeego and Tengo, or was it a happy coincidence?
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Limbo was deliberate choice to play on Jeego and Tengo, once I found out what thier names actually meant.

I know that character derailment can kill a fanfic, so I try to keep things in check.
ailaghast's avatar
Great chapter! You sure know how to create a twist... =p

Also, expect some fanart for this chapter. ;)
junochan's avatar
Quite an amusing idea, that ambassadors garden and I liked the somewhat sentimental scene with Mr. Daruma and son.

Nice speeding up of events at the end, made me totally feel the despair of Sissel and the detectives.

Extra points for using the term "whipper-snapper" :rofl:

Overall another gripping chapter, it's just a pity that Dandy had no lines (yet) :P

For the next chapter, I expect they urgently need to do something for poor Cabanela... and I think they need more power to stand a chance against Mister Twister :hmm:
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Dandy will show up, I promise. And the next chapter will be all about the effort to rescue Cabanela... wish them luck
scytheskid's avatar
i can't see how they are going to beat the twister anyway great chapter
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Hey, this is Sissel we're talking about here! If he can't save the day, no one can! :D
soralover012's avatar
NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! Cabanela!! D8

Damn that Twister!!! :shakefist: I was in a good mood this morning until he showed up in the story! Poor Detective Jowd D:

Ami: I bet he's lonely... *curls tail*
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Try cuteoverload.com. That'll cheer you back up
soralover012's avatar
*goes on website* ...... It ain't working!! DX *jumps under desk* TT^TT

Ami: *sighs* That's just like her, Nya~
soralover012's avatar
*gets hugged* TT^TT

Ami: *sighs, possesses a suit of armour, walks over to me, picks me up and walks off*

Me: Gah! DX I should have never given you this ability!
soralover012's avatar
Me: *is placed down after calming down* Well that's better!

Ami: *returns to her body* I'm off to see what events may occur next~ *walks off to see what the group are going to do*

Me: She's determined, i have to say!
FirefuryAmahira's avatar
GAaaaaaah, ogods, that IS nightmare fuel! High-octane even!

Awesome. :XD:
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