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I had fun writing the romantic scene between Yomi and his lady friend here :giggle:
PS: yes, I know milk is bad for cats but it's such a cute image I couldn't resit!

EDIT: I realised that MissSis was veering way too close into 'Mary Sue' territory. I still have some fine-tuning to do, but hopefully I can now salvage her as a character.
EDIT2: Mary Sue averted!
...
I hope
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tonetone1224's avatar
omgomg! I have not found a good fic in quite some time! For Ghost Trick at least. Maybe I just have to look harder...

and yay Mary Sue aversion! FFFFU you are awesome x3
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Beware the terrible Mary Sue... :iconohnoesplz:
tonetone1224's avatar
BEWWAAAAARE *ghostly wale*
Haha, this is getting really good! I can't wait for the next installment!
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Thanks, I'm working on it as fast as I can :D
FirefuryAmahira's avatar
Man, you are just flying with this thing! The line about the bus just cracked me up, as did Sissel spoiling Yomiel's romantic aspirations for the night. :XD: The plot gets curiouser and curiouser... I wonder how Sissel taught himself to read, anyhow?

My only (relatively minor) gripe is that it's pretty clear that you are blazing through writing this, and as a result there are a fair number of typos, skipped words, and other minor errors that a beta reader or a slight delay between writing and posting ought to iron out.

Still... I am looking forward to the next chapter! :D
Manga-in-a-Bottle's avatar
Blazing... that's bad, right? >_<; I guess I should slow down a bit and try and work out the kinks. I'm working on the next chapter right now and I was hoping to post it tonight, but I'm seeing little plot holes pop up here and there...
FirefuryAmahira's avatar
I think we can survive having to wait a couple of days while you polish and fine-tune your plot! :lol: It's much preferable to have to wait a little while for a good chapter than to have the instant gratification and an author not having enough time to make their work the best it can be!

I always advise folks to set aside a completed chapter for a day or so and then re-read it for the typo checks and everything. If you do an editing read right after you finish writing it, you'll literally not see the typos because it's still too fresh in your mind.

And blazing isn't bad, just means you're writing fast. Nothing wrong with that, it just helps to slow down a touch between writing and publishing, or get a beta to do the typo-check for ya ;)
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