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StarBlazeKirara Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Aside from some editing I'm in the processes of working on, what did you think of `Illness`? and I am back from vacation
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MagicalCrystalWings Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm almost done reading it. I've been taking it in parts for my break from drawing.

1) So far, commas are your friend. They are very helpful to make sentences run smoothly.

2) A little predictable that she was going to get sick due from the title. So maybe a different title??

3) As much as I would love to learn all of your characters, I feel that there are too many people in the story and it would need to be more focused on Yuli, Selena, Ryo, Anne, and maybe an pop in from another character every now and then. If you have too many characters in a scene, it makes it very congested and a little hard to read since you have all of these characters to keep in mind. 

4) Welcome back from vacation! How did it go?
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StarBlazeKirara Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Well sometimes titles are my thing, other times not so much, I'm really thinking or renaming it once I think of a better title, but my trip went smoothly just long road trip down and back
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MagicalCrystalWings Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's good. I usually sleep during long car rides if I'm not the one driving. They're way too boring. :P
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StarBlazeKirara Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
I can't sleep in a car, I've tried before and just can't, and my dad wants to get going so early😰
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MagicalCrystalWings Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh boy. One of those early starter road trip dads. My dad was like that too when I was still living with them.

It's one of those things that if you can sleep in the car, you can. I just like the movement of the car when it's on the road.
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StarBlazeKirara Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Well he mainly wants to get through Atlanta before it gets bad, my folks use to live there years ago and they know how it can get
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MagicalCrystalWings Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Gotcha. We used to travel all around the country when I was younger. Now we just drive up to Minnesota for Mall of America and back after we spend a few days up there.
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