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Ascendant Flame - Chapter III
At the bottom of the ladder were a network of caves that stretched off into the distance.  The walls were plain grey and some of the passages were somewhat narrow.  However, they were well-lit by the same stones in the wall by the ladder and Tiffany could even feel a faintly salty breeze blowing through from somewhere further back.  It was also pleasantly warm and even smooth underfoot.
What caught her attention more, though, were the people in the large area beyond one of the arches.  It was crowded with people, who took many different shapes.  There were more turtles and qilin, but there were other kinds of people, too.  In the doorway, Tiffany could see people that looked like foxes, fruit bats, hares, crows, and some other bird Tiffany couldn’t identify, among several others.  Several had scars, and she noticed one was missing a leg.
One of the hares looked up and noticed Tiffany.  He tapped a turtle on the shoulder, then reached over t
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Catwoman: Protector
The snow had let up that January night in Gotham City.  That still left the cold, that clawed at bit at the people in the city as they hustled between buildings, desperate to get out of the cold.  Most of them were at home, curled up around a fireplace or a heater, huddled under blankets and covered in sweaters.  A few people, though, didn’t have that luxury.
Selina Kyle was stamping her feet and breathing into her hands.  She was small for her age, her black hair sloppily cut short under her hat.  Her hair was oily, too, and her red-tinged olive skin was dull and dry.  As a breeze tore through her patchy overcoat and winter pants, Selina shivered, holding the sides of a magazine.
She’d stolen it.  Normally, she stuck to food, but she’d noticed the cover and had to have it.  As she turned the pages, she drank in the pictures of a wealthy family in a spacious manor.  In between text, pictures abounded.  In her part of t
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Jess and Alex's Excellent Vacation, Episode 3
(Note: Jess is not a predator.  SHE will be eaten by YOU unless she says otherwise.  She will probably not.  So don't ask.)
They got their first warning just before dawn.  The Japanese Defense Force had picked up something on the Prince Akihito Early Warning SONAR at five.  It didn’t seem especially enormous, just fourteen stories.  Still, that was very big.  Probably a kaiju.  Well worth sending a few ships out to track.
Just as the sun was coming up, five ships had raced southwards.  The good news was this creature was going to miss Tokyo (this year’s Sentai team had just disbanded, and it wasn’t time for the team-up yet).  The bad news was that this whatever-it-is would be moving southwards, to the island of Shikoku.  Or rather, it would be moving to not-Tokyo.  The locals were probably unprepared.
Captain Kasuga of the JDN [Sea Slug], kept a weather-eye on the horizon.  The ships under her command we
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Super Stomico: the Fanfiction
Super Sonico couldn’t believe it.  Two years ago, First Astronomical Velocity had sold its first gold album, and the Internet had taken notice.  Last year, the next album had gone platinum, and all of Japan started clamoring for them to play in their home town.  Then, almost two weeks ago, they had gotten a call that all of them had trouble wrapping their heads around: a venue in Korea wanted them to play for them.  Two hours ago, they had wrapped up a concert that had sold out.
And now, they were waiting at a table for the owner of the club they’d performed in to arrive.  A positive mountain of food had already been set out, consisting of bowls of miso, chicken galbi, oden, steaming Japanese curry, salmon rolls, and a big bowl of pork ramen.  The smell was savory, rich, and just the right sort of spicy.  And it was all Sonico and Suzu could do to keep a hold on Fuuru’s elbows.  “Hang on,” Suzu told her.  
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Three Minutes at the Gas Station
Carol leaned against the wall that January evening, her heart pounding and her palms sweating.  The doe’s shiny hooves felt sticky from the gas station floor, but at least she couldn’t smell anything from the nearby bathroom.  That was a plus.  She could still remember this morning, when she’d stopped to fill the car up at a different gas station.  The way it smelled, she was half expecting the trash monster from Star Wars to pop up out of the toilet.
She hoped that was why she’d thrown up.  Unfortunately, given the fact that it’d happened twice before, she had to consider some alternatives.  She didn’t have a fever, and she’d cooked at home for the past two nights.  And hope though she might, that left one very big possibility.  While her periods weren’t the most regular thing in the world, the last one felt like it’d gone a little too long.
As someone turned the corner towards her, Carol
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You're Welcome, as sung by Officer Wilde
OK, I see what's happenin', yeah,
The foxxy's got a badge, it's kinda' strange,
It's kind of a big thing to ask, it's OK.
Y'know, it's nice to see you bunnies never change.
Work with me please, Flopsy, dear,
No, this isn't just a costume, so we're clear.
I'm not gonna' make ya' see the light,
'cause I just don't wanna' have that fight.
So what can I say except 'you're welcome',
For walkin' the beat for squat.
Hey, it's OK, it's OK, 'you're welcome,'
It isn't like I really do a lot.
Just get up ev'ry day before the sun
For a psycho with a handgun
That's fun!
Coffee break mid-day,
Chase down two thugs along the way,
Like everybody, nay?
Hey!
I haggle for hostage release,
(You're welcome)
Then Naked Drunk disturbs the peace.
Long after daylight has died,
(You're welcome)
Bam! Duodecuple homicide!
So what can I say except you're welcome,
for dealing with punk gang wars,
There's no need for praise, it's OKs, you're welcome,
Just keeping safe this neighborhood of yours.
You're welcome...
You
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Jess and Alex's Excellent Vacation, Episode 2
(Author’s note: Jessica-Rae-3 does not like being a predator, as she has stated herself.  I make this depiction of her as a predator with her express permission and her explicit trust.  Don’t ask her for either and do not ask her to eat you.  It won’t happen.)
The next morning, Jess pulled herself awake.  The brunette with the brown mouse ears reached up to rub her eyes, her other hand still on her stomach.  The swell had dropped in the night, and her stomach was no longer aching with too much cheese.  However, now it was her back that ached.  As she carefully made her way up on her feet, she arched her back.  She kept this up for a few moments, then she started to walk off into the forest.
“AAAHH!”
Instantly, Jess’s eyes shot open and sped down to the ground.  At her feet was a… she didn’t know what it was.  She very carefully put her foot down.  If she didn’t know better, she
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So, for the past few months, I've been reading through the Redwall books.  I grew up with the books, though my sister was really the one that read them.  However, now that I'm older, I've established that I want to be a writer, and I've gotten nostalgic, I decided to go back through them, all twenty-two.  As of this moment, I've finished the front half and I'm just recording my thoughts here before I start on the second.

For those of you who don't know Redwall, someone described it as Lord of the Rings with mice.  This isn't a bad summary, but it also misses a few things.  Basically, Redwall is a generational epic: the story of the various creatures of Redwall Abbey and the lands surrounding.  The plots are pretty standard: some vermin causes trouble, a hero rises up to stop them with the oblique help of the ghost of Martin the Warrior and his indestructible sword.  Along the way there are colorful characters, riddles, and a lot of focus on food.  The books, at least in the early days, were great critical successes, and the first one in particular has garnered some attention as an animated series and a stage musical.

It's a landmark series.  Before Harry Potter, it was the book that proved children could stomach books of 300+ pages and some pretty intense scenes of combat.  It and me have disagreements, though.

Fans of the series, let me just say there's a lot to like.  A lot of effort's clearly gone into the setting, and you get the feeling this is an established world without going into too much depth.  The situations the characters find themselves in are pretty good, too, and is actually pretty clever on several occasions.  There's also some good humor.  However, the tension doesn't tend to last very long, and the villains tend to come off ineffective as a result.  And that's not including the many times in the series that vermin are treated as inherently evil, which is spelled out so bluntly that it's more than a little uncomfortable.

Don't get me wrong, though.  There's still a bunch of stuff to like in the series.  As a writer, I've actually gotten a few ideas out of it, which I just love to ponder over.  That doesn't excuse a lot of its flaws, though.  I'm going to be reading the series twice, once after I've already finished the series, so that my thoughts will be accurate.  However, this time around, I want to focus on first impressions.  Thus (and since I wanted to do something), here's a ranking of all the Redwall books I've read so far, from worst to best:

11. Mossflower

This is a little unorthodox, I'll admit.  Most fans don't start hating books until a little later, but I couldn't help myself.  Remember when I said that Redwall books have a problem with holding tension?  Well, that's on display in force here.  The villains have a water rat that makes traveling by river difficult?  Good guys happen to have a pike that kills the rat.  Bad guy has an army?  Good guys have untrackable squirrel archers.  The worst part of this is a scene with a crab, where a fight against an armored juggernaut just turns into a joke.  And then there's Gonff.  I get the impression a lot of people in the fandom like him, and I think I get why: he's that sort of confident, unflappable kind of person like Malcolm Reynolds from Firefly but he's just too unflappable for my tastes in some of the worst places.  He feels a little too unrealistically prepared.  The nail in the coffin is that the plot thread featuring the focal character goes a long way just to ultimately come to almost nothing.  The villainess is pretty interesting, and the good guys' ultimate plot is one of the coolest and most inventive I've ever seen, but that doesn't save the rest of the story.

10. Outcast of Redwall
I wanted to like this one.  Unlike Mossflower, the plot is basically OK and it can actually hold onto tension.  The premise is interesting: what happens when a vermin is raised by goodbeasts and a goodbeast is effectively raised by vermin?  Even better when the goodbeasts were recently tyrannized by vermin.  The problem is that the story doesn't seem to want to actually explore its own central question.  So it cops out in a way that hangs like a musty smell over the whole story.  It turns out being raised and abused by vermin does effectively nothing to your personality.  Worst of all is Veil Sixclaw, the titular character whom we don't even meet 'til halfway through.  And the story just goes out of its way to describe how evil he is because he's a vermin.  This sinks him because he's unpleasant and the abbey dwellers because they expound something so unpleasant.  Make a few changes, make Veil a little more sympathetic and give him a little more focus, and you'd have one of my favorites in the series.  As-is, though, this is just unpleasant.

9. Salamandastron
We're out of unpleasant territory now, and we've simply moved into the 'meh' section.  There are a few problems here, though.  Jacques has a tendency to not really discipline the dibbuns (children), so they tend to get pretty bratty.  And this one has one with a bow and arrow and very few problems shooting them at random.  Though at least this time he gets to see the consequences when someone else does it.  There's another disconnected plot, this time involving a plague.  On the plus side, we've got two vermin who (while lazy and incompetent) are sincerely interested in joining Redwall (even if it doesn't end well).  This stuff could've been engaging, but it just didn't click with me.

8. Martin the Warrior
This one was made into its own animated series, and it's OK.  Just OK.  The villain's a joke and the heroes succeed way too early and way too much.  You've also got a travelogue style story with the title character and they go through some interesting locations, but the main characters aren't really that interesting.  They do one thing at the end and it's done pretty well, but there really isn't much else in this story.  There's a brief moment with a b-character and a rat, but that doesn't go anywhere.

7. The Long Patrol
I tend to hate hares whenever they show up.  I already know the villains are going to be defeated without gaining an inch of ground, and the hares' joking around really drives home that they're jokes a lot of the time.  So logically I should hate this story, right?  Wrong.  The main character is Tammo, a young hare wanting to join the elite Long Patrol.  It doesn't sugarcoat a whole lot, either: Tammo is really reluctant to kill and every time he does so, it sends him into hyperbolics.  He's not a wet blanket, though.  He'll do it, he just doesn't feel good about it afterwards.  That's interesting to see in a kid's series.  A pity there's not really much else interesting in the book.  You've got a badass squirrel but those are a dime a dozen.

6. The Bellmaker
The title is a bit of a lie.  The Bellmaker (named Joseph) really has little to do with the story.  The plot's OK, but the villain is a bit of a laughingstock, and certain characters don't die even when they're in a good position to.  I don't mean they're annoying, they're not, it's just that they almost died but then came back for rather contrived reasons.  And then you've got Blaggut, who is one of the sweetest characters in the series so far.  He also happens to be a loyal vermin and that just makes his plotline even sweeter.  Which makes Outcast of Redwall being the one written right after this all the more mystifying.  But yeah, bland main plot, excellent subplot.

5. Marlfox
This is going to be a bit of a contradiction, and it might be its position, but this one I was glad to read.  Granted, its got situations the characters escape from too easily, even for rather contrived or cliche reasons, but it tries a few interesting things.  Despite a horrible false start, the Marlfoxes actually do manage to do some lasting damage to the good guys and they're easily one of the more effective villains up to this point.  It also toys around with vermin and goodbeast a little bit: one tribe of vermin are only working with the villains due to fear and one tribe of goodbeasts are secretly jerks.  There's even a pinch of character drama.  I wish that Jacques had expanded on that stuff more, but I like what he tried.

4. Redwall
Yes, this is only number four.  This isn't a knock against the book, though.  The story is self-contained, both sides get to shine at various points, and it's got good characters.  Overall, it's an engaging read without any cheating to get out of tough situations.  However, Cluny is made a bit of a joke through the story and I think that the three further up on this list did things a little better.

3. The Pearls of Lutra
Or simply Pearls of Lutra in the United States.  You've got some good character play here, and the search for the titular pearls leads to some interesting places as well.  You've also got quite a few interesting settings, easily the furthest the series has ever gone.  The best part, though, is the villains.  Even though they're fighting each other a lot, you still get to see how effective they are.  Ublaz is my favorite, though.  He's got an interesting gimmick and it's always fun to see a vermin look at Redwall and go '...eh, I think I'll pass'.  The vermin are also given more room for characterization, which gives us the sympathetic Romsca.  It's sympathetic, but the story never forgets that these vermin are marauders as well, so it doesn't cut them too much slack.  Granted, they still die rather easily when the heroes show up, but Ublaz takes a while and they do better than the baddies in other books.  All-in-all, I like it.

2. Mariel of Redwall
This is one of the darker works in the series so far.  The title heroine has a backstory dark enough that it's actually psychologically affected her.  We also watch the main villain, Gabool the Wild, steadily go increasingly insane.  And then there's the assault on Redwall, which is actually pretty desperate compared to everything else in the series up to this point.  There's some convenience right at the end, but it makes sense and the heroes' journey isn't too easy.  That's why I like it.

1. Mattimeo
Yes, I think of this as the best one.  A lot of Redwall did, Mattimeo improved on.  The villain is (in addition to familiar to readers) pretty competent, and both villains actually keep the heroes on the ropes.  The final fight is actually pretty damn tense as well, and there's this sense of unfamiliarity with the land everyone ventures into that I really like.  It's got a few flaws, but they don't happen too often.  In short, it's the series that does the most right, and that's why it's my favorite.

So that's my list.  It will change as I read the later books, but I won't be releasing a sequel list until I've read them the first time.  Expect more in-depth reviews of each book including changes I'd make once I go over the series again.  Until then, though, I've said my peace.
I think that, if Nintendo makes a Super Mario movie, they'd do better to borrow less from Lord of the Rings and more from Alice in Wonderland.  A series of linked setpieces following their own fairy-tale logic.

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I'm not sure everyone knows this, but I have autism.  Part of autism is that sometimes your focus gets hooked on something for a good long time.  As such, I've probably played this clip over and over about fifty times over the past two days.



I've been a fan of Doctor Who since I was a kid, when my parents recorded episodes of the Fourth Doctor from our local PBS station.  This continued into 2003, when I found out there were more doctors and a whole history of the show I wasn't aware of, into 2004, when I found and recorded the Eighth Doctor's movie on Showtime, then into 2006, when I found out the show was coming to the Sci-Fi channel.

Around 2010, though, I started running into problems with the show.  Apart from the show's... let's be honest, bigoted view of religion, I also had problems with the narrative.  It's not the worst show ever, but I started having problems with the Doctor being practically all-powerful, with the destruction of the Doctor's birth world of Gallifrey, characterization, and with all sorts of other things.  This came to a head in A Good Man Goes To War, when I finally got so mad at the show I just gave up on it not five seconds in.

I still kept track of it, though, trying to figure out when it would fix its problems and I could come back.  I'm a little more interested in watching it again, though I'm pretty sure it's going to be a struggle based on what I've seen.  However, this scene ameliorates one of the problems I had with the show, and that's the Time War.

Behind the scenes, the Time War was thought up because Davies couldn't think of anything to do with the Time Lords, a (supposed) race of near-gods that the Doctor came from.  This also made for easy drama, since you can milk a lot of angst out of the Doctor being the last of his kind.  However, I could never shake the artificiality of the move.  How unnecessary it was.

Here, though?  It's not just a quick fix or a recipe for drama.  The drama of the episode is already there, in the form of two groups spoiling for a fight that all but spells genocide.  Here the Doctor's experiences in the Time War are not part of the plot.  They just inform his character.  They give a new reason to something he was going to do already, a reason which gives this scene depth.  Finally, in my mind, the Time War has a definitive point.  It's not a big point, but it helps.
Original Star Trek species - Domlin
Hey, been a while since I've done anything with this, so I thought I'd compile this and release another fan species for Star Trek.  This one is the Domlin, of the planet Domal.  As you can see, the females have spines on their heads while the males don't.  Women are also a little bit taller than men, but both sexes move and think twice as fast as other humanoids.  And regarding their uniforms?  Well, here's how that goes...

During the Dominion War, the Federation was strapped for resources and fighters.  Even with the help of the Romulans and the Klingons, it was still a touch-and-go fight.  Thus, the Federation started snapping up member worlds as fast as it could... even if they really weren't ready for the Federation.  Such was the case with Domal, an Alpha Quadrant world near Breen that had actually been known since before Earth developed the warp drive, thanks to their early development of subspace communication.  Two things stopped them from being inducted, though.  One, their lack of warp drive, and two, the fact that they have over six hundred nations on their planet that are almost constantly at each-others throats.  Still, any port in a storm, and they were actually smacking Breen invaders around like nobody's business, so Domal officially (and eagerly) joined the Federation in 2375.

Three months later, the war was over, and the Federation was stuck in a quandary.  On the one hand, the Domlin were nowhere near the Federation ideals of peace and cooperation, and many people wanted them out.  On the other, they were instrumental in propping up the Alpha Quadrant against the Breen and various other threats.  Thus, the Domlin became part of a special arrangement with the Federation.  In exchange for their continued assistance, they could stay, and furthermore they would be allowed to alter their uniforms to reflect their nation of origin.

The most notable quality of the Domlin are their ability to hold grudges.  The political situation on Domal is intense and complicated.  And if you put two members of the wrong nations next to each other, you're probably going to see a physical fight before too long.  As a result, a lot of Starfleet ships just flat-out refuse to accept more than one Domlin.  Paradoxically, though, members of almost every nation on Domal apply to Starfleet and honestly want to explore.  When it comes to off-worlders, they are among the most curious, thorough, and dedicated Starfleet has ever known.  They just can't get along with members of their own species.
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So, for the past few months, I've been reading through the Redwall books.  I grew up with the books, though my sister was really the one that read them.  However, now that I'm older, I've established that I want to be a writer, and I've gotten nostalgic, I decided to go back through them, all twenty-two.  As of this moment, I've finished the front half and I'm just recording my thoughts here before I start on the second.

For those of you who don't know Redwall, someone described it as Lord of the Rings with mice.  This isn't a bad summary, but it also misses a few things.  Basically, Redwall is a generational epic: the story of the various creatures of Redwall Abbey and the lands surrounding.  The plots are pretty standard: some vermin causes trouble, a hero rises up to stop them with the oblique help of the ghost of Martin the Warrior and his indestructible sword.  Along the way there are colorful characters, riddles, and a lot of focus on food.  The books, at least in the early days, were great critical successes, and the first one in particular has garnered some attention as an animated series and a stage musical.

It's a landmark series.  Before Harry Potter, it was the book that proved children could stomach books of 300+ pages and some pretty intense scenes of combat.  It and me have disagreements, though.

Fans of the series, let me just say there's a lot to like.  A lot of effort's clearly gone into the setting, and you get the feeling this is an established world without going into too much depth.  The situations the characters find themselves in are pretty good, too, and is actually pretty clever on several occasions.  There's also some good humor.  However, the tension doesn't tend to last very long, and the villains tend to come off ineffective as a result.  And that's not including the many times in the series that vermin are treated as inherently evil, which is spelled out so bluntly that it's more than a little uncomfortable.

Don't get me wrong, though.  There's still a bunch of stuff to like in the series.  As a writer, I've actually gotten a few ideas out of it, which I just love to ponder over.  That doesn't excuse a lot of its flaws, though.  I'm going to be reading the series twice, once after I've already finished the series, so that my thoughts will be accurate.  However, this time around, I want to focus on first impressions.  Thus (and since I wanted to do something), here's a ranking of all the Redwall books I've read so far, from worst to best:

11. Mossflower

This is a little unorthodox, I'll admit.  Most fans don't start hating books until a little later, but I couldn't help myself.  Remember when I said that Redwall books have a problem with holding tension?  Well, that's on display in force here.  The villains have a water rat that makes traveling by river difficult?  Good guys happen to have a pike that kills the rat.  Bad guy has an army?  Good guys have untrackable squirrel archers.  The worst part of this is a scene with a crab, where a fight against an armored juggernaut just turns into a joke.  And then there's Gonff.  I get the impression a lot of people in the fandom like him, and I think I get why: he's that sort of confident, unflappable kind of person like Malcolm Reynolds from Firefly but he's just too unflappable for my tastes in some of the worst places.  He feels a little too unrealistically prepared.  The nail in the coffin is that the plot thread featuring the focal character goes a long way just to ultimately come to almost nothing.  The villainess is pretty interesting, and the good guys' ultimate plot is one of the coolest and most inventive I've ever seen, but that doesn't save the rest of the story.

10. Outcast of Redwall
I wanted to like this one.  Unlike Mossflower, the plot is basically OK and it can actually hold onto tension.  The premise is interesting: what happens when a vermin is raised by goodbeasts and a goodbeast is effectively raised by vermin?  Even better when the goodbeasts were recently tyrannized by vermin.  The problem is that the story doesn't seem to want to actually explore its own central question.  So it cops out in a way that hangs like a musty smell over the whole story.  It turns out being raised and abused by vermin does effectively nothing to your personality.  Worst of all is Veil Sixclaw, the titular character whom we don't even meet 'til halfway through.  And the story just goes out of its way to describe how evil he is because he's a vermin.  This sinks him because he's unpleasant and the abbey dwellers because they expound something so unpleasant.  Make a few changes, make Veil a little more sympathetic and give him a little more focus, and you'd have one of my favorites in the series.  As-is, though, this is just unpleasant.

9. Salamandastron
We're out of unpleasant territory now, and we've simply moved into the 'meh' section.  There are a few problems here, though.  Jacques has a tendency to not really discipline the dibbuns (children), so they tend to get pretty bratty.  And this one has one with a bow and arrow and very few problems shooting them at random.  Though at least this time he gets to see the consequences when someone else does it.  There's another disconnected plot, this time involving a plague.  On the plus side, we've got two vermin who (while lazy and incompetent) are sincerely interested in joining Redwall (even if it doesn't end well).  This stuff could've been engaging, but it just didn't click with me.

8. Martin the Warrior
This one was made into its own animated series, and it's OK.  Just OK.  The villain's a joke and the heroes succeed way too early and way too much.  You've also got a travelogue style story with the title character and they go through some interesting locations, but the main characters aren't really that interesting.  They do one thing at the end and it's done pretty well, but there really isn't much else in this story.  There's a brief moment with a b-character and a rat, but that doesn't go anywhere.

7. The Long Patrol
I tend to hate hares whenever they show up.  I already know the villains are going to be defeated without gaining an inch of ground, and the hares' joking around really drives home that they're jokes a lot of the time.  So logically I should hate this story, right?  Wrong.  The main character is Tammo, a young hare wanting to join the elite Long Patrol.  It doesn't sugarcoat a whole lot, either: Tammo is really reluctant to kill and every time he does so, it sends him into hyperbolics.  He's not a wet blanket, though.  He'll do it, he just doesn't feel good about it afterwards.  That's interesting to see in a kid's series.  A pity there's not really much else interesting in the book.  You've got a badass squirrel but those are a dime a dozen.

6. The Bellmaker
The title is a bit of a lie.  The Bellmaker (named Joseph) really has little to do with the story.  The plot's OK, but the villain is a bit of a laughingstock, and certain characters don't die even when they're in a good position to.  I don't mean they're annoying, they're not, it's just that they almost died but then came back for rather contrived reasons.  And then you've got Blaggut, who is one of the sweetest characters in the series so far.  He also happens to be a loyal vermin and that just makes his plotline even sweeter.  Which makes Outcast of Redwall being the one written right after this all the more mystifying.  But yeah, bland main plot, excellent subplot.

5. Marlfox
This is going to be a bit of a contradiction, and it might be its position, but this one I was glad to read.  Granted, its got situations the characters escape from too easily, even for rather contrived or cliche reasons, but it tries a few interesting things.  Despite a horrible false start, the Marlfoxes actually do manage to do some lasting damage to the good guys and they're easily one of the more effective villains up to this point.  It also toys around with vermin and goodbeast a little bit: one tribe of vermin are only working with the villains due to fear and one tribe of goodbeasts are secretly jerks.  There's even a pinch of character drama.  I wish that Jacques had expanded on that stuff more, but I like what he tried.

4. Redwall
Yes, this is only number four.  This isn't a knock against the book, though.  The story is self-contained, both sides get to shine at various points, and it's got good characters.  Overall, it's an engaging read without any cheating to get out of tough situations.  However, Cluny is made a bit of a joke through the story and I think that the three further up on this list did things a little better.

3. The Pearls of Lutra
Or simply Pearls of Lutra in the United States.  You've got some good character play here, and the search for the titular pearls leads to some interesting places as well.  You've also got quite a few interesting settings, easily the furthest the series has ever gone.  The best part, though, is the villains.  Even though they're fighting each other a lot, you still get to see how effective they are.  Ublaz is my favorite, though.  He's got an interesting gimmick and it's always fun to see a vermin look at Redwall and go '...eh, I think I'll pass'.  The vermin are also given more room for characterization, which gives us the sympathetic Romsca.  It's sympathetic, but the story never forgets that these vermin are marauders as well, so it doesn't cut them too much slack.  Granted, they still die rather easily when the heroes show up, but Ublaz takes a while and they do better than the baddies in other books.  All-in-all, I like it.

2. Mariel of Redwall
This is one of the darker works in the series so far.  The title heroine has a backstory dark enough that it's actually psychologically affected her.  We also watch the main villain, Gabool the Wild, steadily go increasingly insane.  And then there's the assault on Redwall, which is actually pretty desperate compared to everything else in the series up to this point.  There's some convenience right at the end, but it makes sense and the heroes' journey isn't too easy.  That's why I like it.

1. Mattimeo
Yes, I think of this as the best one.  A lot of Redwall did, Mattimeo improved on.  The villain is (in addition to familiar to readers) pretty competent, and both villains actually keep the heroes on the ropes.  The final fight is actually pretty damn tense as well, and there's this sense of unfamiliarity with the land everyone ventures into that I really like.  It's got a few flaws, but they don't happen too often.  In short, it's the series that does the most right, and that's why it's my favorite.

So that's my list.  It will change as I read the later books, but I won't be releasing a sequel list until I've read them the first time.  Expect more in-depth reviews of each book including changes I'd make once I go over the series again.  Until then, though, I've said my peace.

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