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New York Day 2 Ch.18

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New York Day 2 Ch.18

 • My sandwich lies cold in front of me. • I'm no longer hungry. • The man returns to the present. • Smiles. • I want to ask 'what then'? • He seems to know what's on my mind. • Says that the authorities declared that the guests died in an accidental house fire. • The manor staff disbanded. • Hints that the last he heard of Ashton was him working on 'Friendship and something'. • I ask 'is that a ship'? • "of sorts." smile. • What did you do? • He went off and made a life of my own. • He stopped living other people's lives. • Stopped trying

New York Day 2 Ch.17

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New York Day 2 Ch.17

 • Much much later, fire brigade arrives with police. • There's an investigation and main char is asked many questions. • He answers honestly: he doesn't know. • Main char is shocked at his emptiness. • He so desperately wanted to know the story, to fill himself with their lives. • But now he would never know. • All evidence, anything lost. • The vacuum hangs in him painfully. • He cries, realising what he is. • He's always been a gossip because he's never had his own story. • Never made his own life. • Never looked to his own world as a source of joy and enter

New York Day 2 Ch.16

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New York Day 2 Ch.16

 • Sounds. • Somehow, sounds. • Main char realises that Eli covered him and took most of the force. • He struggles to take a breath. • He hears sounds. • He finds it in him to make a noise. • He's inhaling ash when light, painful light, hits him. • They're both pulled clear from the wreckage. • The rest of the staff are either laughing or crying. • Main char notices Kris cuddling a weeping Ashton and Claire crying over a wounded Eli and he allows himself a smile. • He's dazed and still coughing ash. • His thoughts turn to Logan and Kathryn. • What happen

New York Day 2 Ch.15

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New York Day 2 Ch.15

• Finds the entrance to the loft.   • Finds bullet casings on the floor, trap door still open, bullet holes in the ceiling and walls. • He starts to jump and see if he can pull himself up. • He's startled by Eli who has managed to catch up to him. • He pleads to Eli to lift him up so he can see what's up there. • He needs to know what they saw, declaring it to be the central piece to everything. • Eli refuses initially and goes to take the main char. • They wrestle. • He argues and shouts and they get violent. • Eli is a lot stronger and doesn't take long to be in the advantage. R

New York Day 2 Ch.14

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New York Day 2 Ch.14

 • Upstairs they hear what sounds like creeping, footsteps, movement from up in the loft. • The main char urges them to find the entrance hatch hidden in a cupboard. • They find the hatch. • Kathryn goes up first and Logan follows. • The others have almost broken through into the main room. • Just as Logan gets up there's shouting and screaming. • Bodies fall back down the stairs and the gun keeps going off until there are no more bullets to be fired. • There's shouting. • Barely hears Logan shouting that his ankle is broken. • There is running and inaudible shouting. ̶

New York Day 2 Ch.13

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New York Day 2 Ch.13

 • The storm is going full fury on the outside of the house. • It all but drowns out conversation. • But what conversation is limited and short-lived. • The food is chewed and a fire is lit and they wait. • Thunder strikes. • Thunder strikes again. • Thunder strikes again and there's a shattering scream along with a gunshot. • Part of the room main char is in collapses. • He struggles to move the audio equipment in time to avoid the collapse. • The others outside redouble their efforts to get to him. • Kathryn and Logan are asking each other about the shadow that th

New York Day 2 Ch.12

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New York Day 2 Ch.12

 • The next few reels he plays through quickly. • Setting up the room with fuel for the night and food. • Barricading. • Small talk, barely any chatter. • Logan decides to put Amanda's diary back into her room in her suitcase.  ○ "It feels right." • Then waiting. • Lots and lots of silence. • Then they begin talking. • Logan says that 'you're not like Amanda'  ○ "What's that meant to mean?"  ○ You're not making me happy.  ○ You're not making any sense.  ○ Amanda gave me happiness.  You're not giving me anything. • Kathryn explains that all

New York Day 2 Ch.11

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New York Day 2 Ch.11

 • In the house the main character goes downstairs. • Discovers very technical equipment that is ruined. • Find undamaged audio reels in protective casings. • Ask the other what it is. • Told that Sir had an audio recording system throughout the house and used it for his business and also instructed the heads of the house to turn it on over the weekend in order to keep an ear on the guests. • Main char wonders what he could have done if he knew that the house could be listened to at his whim. • Starts playing the tapes. • Logan and Kathryn arguing about what happened to Amanda. • T

New York Day 2 Ch.10

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New York Day 2 Ch.10

 • The day passes. • They alternate between okay and angry tension. • They go searching but nothing. • Amanda hasn't forgiven Kathryn. • Amanda gets the strong feeling that Kathryn would like to apologise and make up. • Her emotions start to get the better of her and she turns to Logan for support. • "Should I apologise to Kathryn?" • "What do you need Kathryn for?" • She uses him for emotional support but everything she gives is just swollowed into his depths. • She knows that if she continues like this then she'll never be able to find it in her to get back together. R

New York Day 2 Ch.9

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New York Day 2 Ch.9

 • Three return to the house. • They eat food silently, confused and full of various emotions. • Amanda is thoroughly scared and she starts to panic. • The other's don't get why, saying he's just lost and they'll find him soon. • Amanda writes how they misunderstand her fear. • It is one part concern for Dustin but the rest is concern for the fact that she doesn't have a support to lean on. • Logan almost slowly clicks that Dustin isn't around and gets a bit closer to Amanda. • Kathryn gets a bit angry at Logan for acting odd. • Amanda reacts angrily to Kathryn, gratefully using Lo
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New York Day 2 Ch.18

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New York Day 2 Ch.18

 • My sandwich lies cold in front of me. • I'm no longer hungry. • The man returns to the present. • Smiles. • I want to ask 'what then'? • He seems to know what's on my mind. • Says that the authorities declared that the guests died in an accidental house fire. • The manor staff disbanded. • Hints that the last he heard of Ashton was him working on 'Friendship and something'. • I ask 'is that a ship'? • "of sorts." smile. • What did you do? • He went off and made a life of my own. • He stopped living other people's lives. • Stopped trying

New York Day 2 Ch.17

N

New York Day 2 Ch.17

 • Much much later, fire brigade arrives with police. • There's an investigation and main char is asked many questions. • He answers honestly: he doesn't know. • Main char is shocked at his emptiness. • He so desperately wanted to know the story, to fill himself with their lives. • But now he would never know. • All evidence, anything lost. • The vacuum hangs in him painfully. • He cries, realising what he is. • He's always been a gossip because he's never had his own story. • Never made his own life. • Never looked to his own world as a source of joy and enter

New York Day 2 Ch.16

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New York Day 2 Ch.16

 • Sounds. • Somehow, sounds. • Main char realises that Eli covered him and took most of the force. • He struggles to take a breath. • He hears sounds. • He finds it in him to make a noise. • He's inhaling ash when light, painful light, hits him. • They're both pulled clear from the wreckage. • The rest of the staff are either laughing or crying. • Main char notices Kris cuddling a weeping Ashton and Claire crying over a wounded Eli and he allows himself a smile. • He's dazed and still coughing ash. • His thoughts turn to Logan and Kathryn. • What happen

New York Day 2 Ch.15

N

New York Day 2 Ch.15

• Finds the entrance to the loft.   • Finds bullet casings on the floor, trap door still open, bullet holes in the ceiling and walls. • He starts to jump and see if he can pull himself up. • He's startled by Eli who has managed to catch up to him. • He pleads to Eli to lift him up so he can see what's up there. • He needs to know what they saw, declaring it to be the central piece to everything. • Eli refuses initially and goes to take the main char. • They wrestle. • He argues and shouts and they get violent. • Eli is a lot stronger and doesn't take long to be in the advantage. R

New York Day 2 Ch.14

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New York Day 2 Ch.14

 • Upstairs they hear what sounds like creeping, footsteps, movement from up in the loft. • The main char urges them to find the entrance hatch hidden in a cupboard. • They find the hatch. • Kathryn goes up first and Logan follows. • The others have almost broken through into the main room. • Just as Logan gets up there's shouting and screaming. • Bodies fall back down the stairs and the gun keeps going off until there are no more bullets to be fired. • There's shouting. • Barely hears Logan shouting that his ankle is broken. • There is running and inaudible shouting. ̶

New York Day 2 Ch.13

N

New York Day 2 Ch.13

 • The storm is going full fury on the outside of the house. • It all but drowns out conversation. • But what conversation is limited and short-lived. • The food is chewed and a fire is lit and they wait. • Thunder strikes. • Thunder strikes again. • Thunder strikes again and there's a shattering scream along with a gunshot. • Part of the room main char is in collapses. • He struggles to move the audio equipment in time to avoid the collapse. • The others outside redouble their efforts to get to him. • Kathryn and Logan are asking each other about the shadow that th

New York Day 2 Ch.12

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New York Day 2 Ch.12

 • The next few reels he plays through quickly. • Setting up the room with fuel for the night and food. • Barricading. • Small talk, barely any chatter. • Logan decides to put Amanda's diary back into her room in her suitcase.  ○ "It feels right." • Then waiting. • Lots and lots of silence. • Then they begin talking. • Logan says that 'you're not like Amanda'  ○ "What's that meant to mean?"  ○ You're not making me happy.  ○ You're not making any sense.  ○ Amanda gave me happiness.  You're not giving me anything. • Kathryn explains that all

New York Day 2 Ch.11

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New York Day 2 Ch.11

 • In the house the main character goes downstairs. • Discovers very technical equipment that is ruined. • Find undamaged audio reels in protective casings. • Ask the other what it is. • Told that Sir had an audio recording system throughout the house and used it for his business and also instructed the heads of the house to turn it on over the weekend in order to keep an ear on the guests. • Main char wonders what he could have done if he knew that the house could be listened to at his whim. • Starts playing the tapes. • Logan and Kathryn arguing about what happened to Amanda. • T

New York Day 2 Ch.10

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New York Day 2 Ch.10

 • The day passes. • They alternate between okay and angry tension. • They go searching but nothing. • Amanda hasn't forgiven Kathryn. • Amanda gets the strong feeling that Kathryn would like to apologise and make up. • Her emotions start to get the better of her and she turns to Logan for support. • "Should I apologise to Kathryn?" • "What do you need Kathryn for?" • She uses him for emotional support but everything she gives is just swollowed into his depths. • She knows that if she continues like this then she'll never be able to find it in her to get back together. R

New York Day 2 Ch.9

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New York Day 2 Ch.9

 • Three return to the house. • They eat food silently, confused and full of various emotions. • Amanda is thoroughly scared and she starts to panic. • The other's don't get why, saying he's just lost and they'll find him soon. • Amanda writes how they misunderstand her fear. • It is one part concern for Dustin but the rest is concern for the fact that she doesn't have a support to lean on. • Logan almost slowly clicks that Dustin isn't around and gets a bit closer to Amanda. • Kathryn gets a bit angry at Logan for acting odd. • Amanda reacts angrily to Kathryn, gratefully using Lo

6 Steps to Writing a First Turning Point

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6 Steps to Writing a First Turning Point

PLEASE NOTE THAT WHILE THIS PAGE WILL REMAIN ACTIVE FOR PURPOSES OF EDUCATION AND RECORDS, IT IS OUTDATED. CLICK HERE TO ACCESS THE NEWEST VERSION. 6 Steps to Writing a First Turning Point (Call to Action) Anybody Can Write a Novel   Chapter 4 “Plot Points” – Section 3 “The First Turning Point” With Links to Supplementary Material We have finally arrived to the last part of Act I in your story, when your Protagonist-driven story will really take off. The First Turning point, also called the “Call to Action” or the “Minor Inciting Incident,” can be thought of as a tremor event after th

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My Bio
Heya. I started on DA as a writer and i still take great enjoyment writing but I've also branched out into some 3d/visual effects and even some drawing (le gasp! And trust me, i was confident the day i drew anything would result in the Armageddon)

But nowadays I just enjoy making art and keeping a (usually) weekly journal on funny things that happen in my week.

Favourite Visual Artist
Visual effects.
Favourite Movies
Batman- The Dark Knight.
Favourite TV Shows
I quite like Lie To Me
Favourite Bands / Musical Artists
Nickleback!
Favourite Books
tough one. 'little brother' and 'shades children' stand out amongst many good ones.
Favourite Writers
phillip reeve, douglas adams, horowitz a few more
Favourite Games
not sure. I like MMO's as well as FPS. and worms. just because.
Favourite Gaming Platform
the only one i really own is a PC. oh, and a ps1.
Tools of the Trade
claws...teeth...full moon...and on the odd occasion a pen and paper
Other Interests
raw meat...paintballing...writing...the fun stuff and all.

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RankaStevicProfessional Digital Artist
Thank you kindly for the watch. Hug Here's a kiss for you, my love!
comatose-cometHobbyist Writer
thanks for the faves :rose:
lycan-risingHobbyist Writer
Not a problem :D
z0mdeeHobbyist Traditional Artist
Eey~ I'm jus droppin off some love~
Was going through old journal stuff nd happened to see your comment there so came to drop off some extra due from 2~3 years ago~:heart::la:
lycan-risingHobbyist Writer
haha :D well, it eventually arrived and is appreciated.
junkscribeHobbyist Digital Artist
tahnaks for the fave. :)
4hellcatHobbyist General Artist
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