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last night,
you kissed my fingertips
one by one
and promised you’d never leave
again.

last night,
you kissed my forehead
as you reached out
and tentatively caressed my
aching heart.

but you wound a noose
of pretty roses
around my neck while i slept,
and when morning came, you had vanished.

when morning came,
i hung.
a poem by me. 
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Given 2018-09-13
83 Roses by luxwar ( Featured by squanpie )
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BATTLEFAIRIES Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2018
That was SO WORTHY of a DD! Congratulations :heart:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2018  Professional Digital Artist
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation!!! :iconflyingheartsplz:Love:iconflyingheartsplz:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2018   Writer
Interesting. I like most of the images very much. Congratulations on your feature!
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Buyer3517 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018
Nice work, and congrats on the achievement. I've never done anything like poetry before, but reading your work kinda made me wonder if I could pull it off. I'm a writer by hobby, but a coal miner by profession, with a dream of what possibilities may some day be. So, I'll let you tell me what you think or if this holds promise. This one's for you Luxwar.

The morning crept over my face

My dream-swept fingers reaching for yours

My heart bloomed in verdant promises made in the night’s passions.

 

Last night you lovingly caressed my soul

We shared a true embrace that promised eternity’s bliss

Each weighted breath, sigh of release, and gasp of elation shared as one.

 

But my eyes opened and you’d left me once again

My heart’s song turned to deep aching tears of deafeningly silent doubt

I question, I ask, I ponder ever more so each time I think of you

 

Will you stay with me this next time

Or will I drown in your arms again.

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dolores5 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! <3
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Championx91 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018
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luxwar Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Professional Photographer
thank you!
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Championx91 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2018
You're welcome! :love:
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snoogaloo Featured By Owner Edited Sep 13, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
congrats on getting the DD!! :iconcheerplz:
i knew that this was a winning poem from the moment i read it.
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luxwar Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Professional Photographer
omg!!
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snoogaloo Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
Omg is right!!
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Mxtress Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018
I love everything to do with rose imagery, and I love your twist of turning a romantic symbol into something deadly.  Nicely done!
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nicely done!! Clap Clap Clap 
Congratulations on your much deserved DD!  :)
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Ellysiumn Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2018  Professional Digital Artist
Congrats on ur DD!! :happybounce: :happybounce: 
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Lycaenyx Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2018  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful and heartbreaking.  Amazing ending.  :heart:
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luxwar Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2018  Professional Photographer
thank you!
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snoogaloo Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
wow!  you know how to end a poem!!  really well written! :squee:
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luxwar Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2018  Professional Photographer
awe I appreciate this. <3
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snoogaloo Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2018  Hobbyist Photographer
you're so very welcome <3
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calsixty Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2018
Whoa! Thorny ending there😮
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luxwar Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2018  Professional Photographer
yea lol
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