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Let me swallow you whole
and trace my tastebuds around
every tender drop of who you are,
starting with those world-worn,
mud-trodden, kiss-me-tender eyes.

I'll open the centre of your smile
and work my way inwards:

ramble over the
rude roughness of tongue,

trip against the scar
tensed below the surface,

enumerate each eager emotion,

stumble amongst psychosises
howling for salvation,

submerge myself in memories
so macabre they have no end

and graze these lips upon every
guarded groove of goodness.

Then, maybe, below the bile and bitterness,
I'll reach the core of you and ring it
as bright as childhood.
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sound-soldier141 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010   Writer
great sensuality..."graze these lips upon every
guarded groove of goodness."..."ring it as bright as childhood"...i love this. your description is fantastic. i was wondering if maybe you could check out some of my work as well...i would really appreciate it!
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brookworm Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2008  Student Writer
'enumerate each eager emotion'

love the alliteration! =p
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2008  Student Writer
:hug: Thank you so much.
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brookworm Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2008  Student Writer
yw =)
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IAmPhoenixMoth Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2008
you're a story i desperately want to write...
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redcrake Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2008   Writer
"as bright as childhood" i love that :) very pretty
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2008  Student Writer
Thank you, dearest.
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007
this has such a winsome feel to it. yet tinged with sprinkles of hope. your write so pretty little one..
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007  Student Writer
I can't believe you're going to read my work like it's nepenthe.

You really are unbelievable.
:smooch:
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enchanted-lullaby Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007
:blowkiss: just keep writing so i can keep reading!
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2007  Student Writer
:glomp:
Gah.
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TwelveStep Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
:hug:
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007  Student Writer
:glomp:
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psyence-a-gogo Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
this is just .. amazing.
i envy your writing style >_<
i absolutely love the way you've use the brackets in this.
*faves*
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007  Student Writer
Thank you so much!!!
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
Woah, do you know how strange that is? I love coincidences. I clicked on this from the front page.

And darling, you'll find that someone. :hug:
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LoveShotEyes Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007  Student Writer
That is a real strange coincidence. Ha. :hug:

Thank you, honey.
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saturnineguise Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
You're welcome, and it's true. :hug:
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