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Shimmering Road Chapter 00.001a by lirale Shimmering Road Chapter 00.001a by lirale
First part of Chapter 00.001. Find the prologue and follow the story on Line Webtoon's Challenge League www.webtoons.com/en/challenge/… :la: 

Manga Studio Ex 5, OpenCanvas 6
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ShinguAmito Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2015
This is some excellent work! Very impressed by the flow and looking forward to more :)

The only thing that struck me as maybe requiring some thought for future pages, is how closely you decide to zoom in on your character. When she is being chased by the darkness and her full body is visible, I felt that maybe shrinking her down a little bit to emphasize the danger of the darkness (or bring more tension) might have been a good call. But that all depends on what you actually intended with the darkness in the first place.

Scale of characters to backdrop is really a more aesthetic fine tuning, but I find it can add some extra layers to meaning in comic works, should you decide to mess with it.
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Unidad26 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015
Dreams are a issue for me, they make me tired -_- so having one that pulls you back sounds terrible, but ill like to see how this goes, the place were you live looks so calm and nice so clean.
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TeachingMyselfSpeed Featured By Owner Edited Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very intriguing! I like this long-page format when it's done so well.

I'm not sure if I should point this out, but... The first pose of your character running, the position of her left leg is opposite to what's normal while running. :) With her right arm fully in front, her left leg should already be extended. As it is, it feels as if she's about to fall forward rather awkwardly! (Edited for clarity)

But besides that, I didn't spot any glaring problems. Lovely photos btw!
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lirale Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
Thanks for the pointer! And glad you like this page :) I've been hooked on long-page formats for a while now, for web-publishing it replicates well the pace and feeling of time elapsed of turning pages, all that without those pesky loading times and flashing screens in between pages! Glad my first try at the format got out so well, it sure is different from regular pages planning! :)

And thanks for liking the photos, I do very much love my hometown! (I wish I could cookie-cut the whole area and bring it closer to me! XD) 
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