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Rain in the Twilight by Liefesa Rain in the Twilight by Liefesa
The previous poll result voted for a Twilight Princess themed work - Here it is at last!

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Do let me know what you think!

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Art and Lyrics ŠLiefesa
Original game ŠNintendo
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:iconjohndennis4209:
Johndennis4209 Featured By Owner Edited Aug 11, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
You are really great with rhyming! The flow of this is really nice. It's short but very descriptive and pleasing to read. You definitely captured the feeling of Twilight Princess with this. I'm curious, what do you use to format the layout and colors of your poems? The way you present your poems adds so much mood and feeling to each one in a way a plain block of text just can't compare to. I've written a few Zelda poems, and if you don't mind, I'd love the opportunity to try and present mine to a similar effect using your methods :)
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014
Hiya, thank you! Glad you enjoyed it! :D

I use Photoshop - gives plenty of flexibility for colours and fiddling with the background :)
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ScribbelzAndScraps Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
legendary :)
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012
:D Thank you! ^^
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ScribbelzAndScraps Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
XD seriously amazin
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2012
:highfive:
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:iconneo1708:
Neo1708 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
nicely done! :D
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
:D Thanks! ^^
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Neo1708 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
:aww:
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xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You've got quite the poetic touch. Lovely!
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012
:D Thank you!
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:iconxmjjmoonwalker:
xMJJMoonwalker Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!~
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Iceworlf Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
this is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
:D Thank you!
Glad you like it!
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:iconiceworlf:
Iceworlf Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
ur welcome:)
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chazstudios101 Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012
I hate to have to do this, but I am going to "grade" this poem... thingy.

Spelling: 5/5
Thought: 5/5
Message: 3/5
Enjoyability: 4.5/5
Rhyming: 5/5
MidLinkness: 1.5/5

So overall, I give it a 24/30. Great poem, but the only place you really lost points was the "MidLinkness", and only because I'm a real MidLink...ologist? Yah, MidLinkologist. But this wasn't really to that standard. But, It's still a wunderbar poem! Keep up da goooooooooood work!
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
^^ Thanks for the grades!
It doesn't really tell a story, so the 'midLinkness' isn't all that present...
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chazstudios101 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
Like I said, It's still a great poem, and don't let my MidLinkness interfere with that
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
^^ Thanks :D
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Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Wow" is what I think^^
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
And "thank you!" is what I say! ^^
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:iconkublakhan27:
Kublakhan27 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :)
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ultimatedarklink Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That is so awesome. =^.^=
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D Thanks! Glad you like!
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ultimatedarklink Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome and it is a long story made short. =^.^= That is what makes this so awesome. =^.^=
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D
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ultimatedarklink Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
=^.^=
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
Awesome, as always. :D

Can I ask you something about punctuation, by the way?
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D Thank you!

Of course - ask here, or note me if you like ^^
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:iconmajorasmasks:
MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
A comment will be enough, I think... I just wanted to know when you believe it's better to use punctuation in a poem, and when it's not. ^^
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
Hmm... The simple answer would be: use punctuation when it is helpful.

I think I used to over-use it in my work... Because I wasn't confident that the rhyming would come across correctly, I used punctuation to divide up each line in such a way that it would force readers to hear it correctly. After feedback, I realised readers didn't need such heavy guidance.

In this poem I think the words are enough. Sometimes (like in the Tingle poem) an occasional comma or exclamation mark helps to make things clearer ^^

Hope that answers your question! :glomp:
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:iconmajorasmasks:
MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
It was really useful, thank you very much! :glomp:

Another thing I noticed is that you didn't used capital letters in this poem, either: is it something linked or the omission of punctuation, or something unrelated?
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
Well, capital first letters are a type of punctuation... But using capital letters is much less intrusive than commas and so on. I think using them here would have been fine, but without them, it looks more clean...
Does that make sense? :p

BTW, I'll be in Italy next month :D
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
It does, thank you! :)

What place(s) will you visit, here in Italy? ^^
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JosephineReally Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thats very well written! I like it a lot!
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D Thanks! Great to hear! ^^
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MaySplash Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're poetry is AMAZING. This is my new favorite of yours!!
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D Thanks! I hope my next ones can live up to it! ^^
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MaySplash Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
They will!!! :D
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012
:D :highfive:
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goldentorch4 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student General Artist
I got chills reading it!!! This has such wonderful rhythm!!!!! Great job! :D
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:D Thanks! I'm pleased the rhythm and theme are both good! ^^
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mullent169 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Speechless as usual... D:
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
^^ Thank you!
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Cradger Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing, Truly amazing work.
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
^.^ Great to hear! Thank you!
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linkzeldaganondorf Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
:'( why cant i be as talented as you...?
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:iconliefesa:
Liefesa Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
:giggle: I'm not 'trained' or anything - practice certainly helps. Write something then post it on DA to get feedback to see if there's anything you can improve. :D
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Triforcefangirl Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely instant fave :)
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