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Journal Entry: Mon Jan 22, 2018, 4:12 PM
I posted a status but I don't think anyone caught it. I sometimes think they get lost in the noise. Anyway I was saying why is it when writing at times we feel we are writing complete garbage? I felt like I was grasping for straws last night and words for narration. I feel even though this scene is completely plotted out on paper and I know exactly what I want from the scene. Which is character development and a relationship developing, why can't I write. Bangs head on keyboard.  Steph Banging Head Didn't there used to be a gif for this? Bang your head into keyboard till bloody stump the eye even fly's out of the dudes head? It would be more appropriate for the occasion.
The Innocence of Children            The breeze was cool and the sun shone bright over a calm lake. Despite the grass being cold and wet from the rain the day before ****** was sitting on the edge of the bank waiting for *** while tossing stones into the water. The splashes flicked cold water on her legs, but she didn’t mind. There was a sad look on her face and she quickly got bored. She looked around momentarily to see if she could spot him before slumping into herself. Holding onto her knees tightly, staring into the grass underneath her, it was everything she could do to occupy herself and not cry. Things were hard back home, and there was no pleasing anyone. Despite her training which was going well, it was like no one noticed anything unless she screwed up.
            I will wait for you… as long as it takes…  
            His little feet were




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sealweal11 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't understand
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LadySeshiiria Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh I was just stating earlier last night in a status the same thing. Being frustrated at writing. I was asking for feedback and thoughts on the opening to this chapter.
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sealweal11 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Where is the chapter?
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LadySeshiiria Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Its the thumb going to sta.sh
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sealweal11 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think I've found it.
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JesusFreakBlue Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Student General Artist
I know the feeling SMH 
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LadySeshiiria Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
So what do you do when this happens to you? Do you just keep writing and fix it later or quit for the night? Oh did you think the transition was okay?
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JesusFreakBlue Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Student General Artist
I usually just stop for the night and set it aside for the next day. Sometimes it's best to get out of your head, and let it be for a night or so. And I think the transition was alright.
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LadySeshiiria Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah transitions are hard from what I read and people don't like jumping scenes in a jarring manner, so if its alright I'm hearing it needs improvement. Scene transition is my weakness and word choice.
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JesusFreakBlue Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2018  Student General Artist
Oh, I don't think your transitions are that bad. I think they're just fine.
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LadySeshiiria Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
K I just no I'm bad at them, a lot of people say on other forums that transitioning scenes should only happen from chapter to chapter unless you approach it a certain way in chapter.
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JesusFreakBlue Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2018  Student General Artist
Yeah, I understand. 
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