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Deep Down We're All The Same

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Deep down we're all the same
No matter species, race or name
Whether fur or scales or skin
We all want to protect our kin

It matters not whether you talk
Or if you fly or climb or walk
We all share one important part
And that's the beating of a heart
Inspired by an old collage I did: [link]
Probably my shortest poem ever!
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prettyflourHobbyist General Artist


 

Hey there,

 

Prettyflour here on behalf of :iconPoeticalCondidtion: with the critique you requested.

 

I think this poem is successful in every way. The brevity works nicely- you say a whole lot with just a few words!  The rhyme and flow of the poem are spot on, which makes it easy to read and understand.  A good read with a powerful message. I have no other constructive criticism to offer…

 

Thank you and have a great night.

 

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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much! And apologies for the late reply!
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plymouth2074Student Traditional Artist
not only are the words put together so perfectly that it instantly grabs the readers attention, but it also sends an inspiring, honest message. Amazing job <3
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :) :heart:
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Aw so sweet and true. I love it.
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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KoinuPuppyHobbyist General Artist
So short, but true and beautiful.
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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Giraffe3001Hobbyist General Artist
AWESOME AND SOO SOO TRUE
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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Giraffe3001Hobbyist General Artist
No Prob! :D
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acdalProfessional Writer
beautiful!
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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chanceroxHobbyist Digital Artist
honest and lovely.
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Lady---VengeanceHobbyist Photographer
Thank you :)
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