Featured in collections
I really like the way you've separated the text from the image, but in future situations, you may have to use speech bubbles.
Your drawing is good, but the fact that you only use pencil, and don't finalize your work kind of makes it hard to make the images out. I've read Fo:E, and I know this scene, but to those who haven't, they may have a harder time picking out things.
I remember a piece in this series you did a while back that I could barely make out the image.
I'd recommend coloring or finalizing with pencil.
However, I know lots of Fo:E fans are out there looking for a visual to the comic. I know you're doing your best, so go about it any way you want. Though with better quality comes more viewers.