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7 years old

My dad calls me and my siblings to the living room
Where he and my mom sit, smiles on their faces
That, looking back, I'm not sure were genuine anymore

My dad asks
"Imagine we moved to an island with two tents;
One with your mom, and one with me. Which one would you like to live in?"

I don't know much but I know I don't like this question
So I answer
"I would put the two tents together so we can all live in one big one!"
Because that's the only answer that doesn't leave my tongue
With a foul taste, like when I somehow got soap
On my Ringpop

My parents smile,
but I know my imagination
isn't welcome on this imaginary island



9 years old

I'm way too young
to feel like the tape
you use to close that tattered box
that somehow became too small to hold your Christmas tree

But putting the tree back at work today
I realize that's exactly how I felt



11 years old

My parents are fighting
(Again)
And I guess it must've been really bad
Because my mom storms up
And tells us whatever the reason they were fighting
(Or maybe just because of the fighting)
She was moving out Feburary of next year

I remember crying
But I don't remember being sad
Or surprised



14 years old

Twice as old as I was
When they first asked
And I still don't like
Choosing tents



16 years old
I love her enough to call her "Ma"
But mom doesn't like that so I stop
I wonder if she knew the love was
Still there

I wonder if it's my fault
She left



19 years old

In a few years
It'll be socially acceptable
For me to get married

And of course
If that happens
I hope it works out

Of course I hope
Life in general will work out
That I'll make my parents proud

But if it doesn't
When it doesn't
I hope they remember
Who it was that taught me
Promises are made of glass
I realized for the first time today disappointment goes both ways in a parent/child relationship, and this is the product

This is kind of misleading for a few reasons

:bulletorange: My parents were never married, so technically they never got divorced. They just split up
:bulletorange: The overall tone (I think) makes it seem like the disappointment is that my parents didn't work things out. Honestly, even at a young age I supported their decision and realized it was for the best
:bulletorange: On that note, I don't blame their divorce for my failures. I take full responsibility for those. But my parents still shaped who I am to an extent, and that's what I'm trying to get across in the last line. (WHICH IS MY FAVORITE PART I LOVE THAT GLASS METAPHOR SO MUCH FOUR FOR ME)
:bulletorange: It didn't take my mom three years to move out. She left when she said she would. It's just... guilt tripping was rampant at that time. >.>

On the note of age, I fudged a lot of them. I know for certain my mom moved out when I was 12, and I'm 98% sure the majority of the guilt tripping happened early in high school. Everything else is a guess.

WITH ALL THIS IN MIND, I hope you like this poem. I'm actually fairly proud of it myself.


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FairyTail445 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
What an amazing job. I have a similar problem.
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aimeloverppgz Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Can I make a poem titled "separation" like this one with my own twist in it?
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
OH MY GOSH SUPER LATE REPLY TIME

Absolutely! I'm sorry I took so long to reply, I've mostly been lurking on here once every blue moon. Hopefully you haven't lost that muse n_n;
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23rd-earl Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2015  Hobbyist
This is really good x3! Chinatsu Yoshikawa (Good Job) [V3]  I was wondering if it would be okay to use this in a fanfiction? I will credit you of course, but it is okay if you don't want to - It will most likely be a Hetalia character x reader Dango-sweatdrop 
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
FUCK MY LIFE YOU'RE THE SECOND PERSON TO ASK IF YOU COULD USE THIS AND I'M  S O  L A T E
Yes, you absolutely can! I'd like to see it when it's done if that's okay! And you haven't completely forgotten your idea...
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Fyres-Descent Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful and this comment is a little late wow, I understand exactly where you're coming from.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm sorry you understand where I'm coming from though
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EleanorfaShion Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist
"Promises are made of glass" AMAZING!!

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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I DON'T THINK I'LL EVER WRITE A LINE I LOVE AS MUCH AS THAT ONE

Thank you!
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EleanorfaShion Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist
Your welcome!!。^‿^。
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johnson-alias Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I am very suprised after I read this excellent poem. I have not experienced your situation but I can feel what you say. It is weird, isn't it? I hope that you are going to live happily ever after with your other half.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're the second person to tell me that, and it makes me really happy. I'm glad that people who haven't even experienced this can empathize with it, that makes me feel like I did a good job :D

And thank you! Same goes for you 
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jennifibber Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't usually favorite literary works of any kind. I couldn't not +fav this. Very raw, very emotional. I've never experienced the kind of pain described by your parents' split, but the amount of empathy you pulled out of me with this certainly brought me to an understanding. I'm sorry you had to grow up with this emotional upheaval.

Overall, wonderful job. Thank you for your contribution to the literary community. ♥
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! Gahhahoarehieowi comments like this make me so happy I'm so honored to be the few pieces of literature you favorited thank you

And it's all good, I'm okay :)
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jennifibber Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're quite welcome. ;] Keep up the great work.
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frozen-chosen Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Student Writer
this is wonderful work. but that last line is my favorite. just wow. 
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!

*whispers* it's mine too
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derse-dreamers Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014
DUDE I LOVE THIS BC USUALLY WHEN PEOPLE TRY TO WRITE SAD THINGS [ LIKE ME] IT ENDS UP BEING REALLY CHEESY AND SHIT [LIKE MY STUFF] 

BUT YOURS JUST LITERALLY MADE ME SAD A++++
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'M ACTUALLY NOT THAT GREAT WITH THIS STUFF EITHER LIKE IDK I GUESS I JUST SNAPPED WHEN I MADE THIS

Anyway, glad you liked it!
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Riverclan23 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student
That last line has so much truth in it that if it were any louder it would make me go deaf. I really love this poem, good job on it.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That was a nice  analogy you made there.

And thank you! Glad you liked it!
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Riverclan23 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Student
Thank you very much and you're welcome. I didn't just like it, I loved it.
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the last line "promises are made of glass"
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'M REALLY PROUD OF THAT TOO OH MY GOSH I FEEL SO CONCEITED BUT I AM.

And by that I mean thank you for your compliment
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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ingechan Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2014
why did this make me cry :(
it's well written anyway...
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well I mean, it's a sad topic :shrug:

Glad you liked it though!
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mountainfisher Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014
Very well written. The message is slightly sad, but realistic. The last line is brilliant!! I love it!! Very good piece! :)
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I don't like to brag but I'm really proud of that line myself like gah I wish I wrote like that all the time
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itsbumblebee Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful and sad.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! I'm glad you liked it! (but sorry it was also sad)
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Wiggle16 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You should definately be proud of this! The last stanza nearly made me cry, keep writing stuff like this! But not always so sad maybe...
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry you nearly cried, but I'm glad you liked it!
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IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.......reading this was a little like traveling back in time for me. All the feelings, the sick taste in the mouth, and the guilt, came rushing back as I read this line for line. You did a brilliant job at capturing the emotions! And I love how you broke up the poem into sections according to your age and thoughts at the time! :clap: 
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh stop it you, you're gonna make me blush :iconohstopitplz:
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IRideAMagicalLadle Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't help it, its the hard, hard truth ;)
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Gandalfgirl579 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Man, it must be tough for kids to go through something like their parents splitting. I was seventeen when my mom and dad divorced, and I know I took it awfully hard...
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Personally I was kind of... glad? That it happened because my folks were fighting so much. But I imagine that's not too common
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Asterlia Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student General Artist
"14 years old 

Twice as old as I was 
When they first asked 
And I still don't like
Choosing tents"


I really love these lines. They show the emotion the child was going through in such a subtle and beautiful way. All of your metaphors in this poem were beautiful, actually. :D
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! :D
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
My parents got divorced when I was like 1, so I've never known them together- just their immense hatred for one another. I love the last line as well and the overall poem is something a lot of people can relate to. Nice job :clap:
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I honestly can't remember my parents ever getting along either, so we have that in common.

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It sucks, but there's not much one can do about it at that ripe infant age lol And you're welcome :D
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TheSleepingGods Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm personally dealing with a divorce right now. When you spoke about feeling like the tape, that really struck me. I'm the only stone right now and both of them unload on me. I'm really not sure how to tell them that their troubles are breaking me.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry you're going through that right now.

Depending on how they are, it might be best to just... tell them. Give it to them straight. At the end of the day, you're their child, and it's not fair to put their worries on you.  (idk you probably didn't want advice sorry)

No matter what, stay strong. It gets better, I promise
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redpinkandwhite Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That last line only reminds me: I read somewhere that children of divorce are more likely to be divorced themselves. That last line of the poem is why.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Could be :shrug: Like I said though, I take responsibility for my actions
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redpinkandwhite Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
True. There is that element, too. I mean, I guess I would see it as a shared blame, but definitely I had a hand/role in it, too.
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Kaniahlies Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
This is beautiful! Well done!Llama Emoji-08 (Crying) [V1] 
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!
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