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Away, Away, My Love Has Gone

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I remember his smile,
but it's fading away,
his eyes were blue
(or were they gray?)
as he kissed me once more,
nothing left to say
as he went on his way in the morning.

Away, away, my love has gone,
away he walked in the morning sun,
away he walked while the wind blew free,
but what will I do if he comes back to me?

I remember his laugh,
or I think I do,
he could make me laugh
with a word or two,
but what those words were,
I wish I knew,
as he went on his way in the morning.

Away, away, my love has gone,
away he walked in the morning sun,
away he walked while the wind blew free,
but what will I do if he comes back to me?

His hair was quite sandy,
although my mother claims brown,
if he said my name wrong,
it would make me frown;
I was not the only girl weeping
in my little home town
as he went on his way in the morning.

Away, away, my love has gone,
away he walked in the morning sun,
away he walked while the wind blew free,
but what will I do if he comes back to me?

I wept for a week,
then I sighed for another,
then one day at noon
I ran into his mother,
who invited me over
to come meet with his brother
after he went on his way in the morning.

Away, away, my love has gone,
away he walked in the morning sun,
away he walked while the wind blew free,
but what will I do if he comes back to me?
A little twist on the theme of the girl who was left behind while her true love went off to find his fortune...
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I remember his smile,
but it's fading away,
his eyes were blue
(or were they gray?)

I love that. This was a very realistic piece and I thought it was quite beautiful.
Candygal72's avatar
This poem reminds me of my love, He became a little intense and got reported because I was younger.I beged for them not to take him awaybut they did. He's been searching for me as I have been for him.
knittingknots's avatar
Of course! And thanks for the kind words.
Leaving-My-Mark's avatar
I like the rhyming pattern. It really adds rhythm that makes the poem flow very nicely. The repeated verse, almost like the chorus of a song, also helps do the same, and I really liked the usage of the repetition.
I really liked the second to last verse, especially the part, "I wept for a week,/ then I sighed for another."
Interesting story overall, and I liked it. One question, though: Does she fall in love with the brother?
knittingknots's avatar
Of course! And thanks for the kind words.
Leaving-My-Mark's avatar
Mt-Jester's avatar
Cute~ So, does she fall in love with the brother? :D
knittingknots's avatar
feelingsarefutile's avatar
Wowww. That's REALLY good! I kinda plucked out a tune for it while i read it. very beautiful. actually, i think i wrote something like it...yes. "The Return". :]
knittingknots's avatar
It really does need a tune...I had various folk song images in my head as I wrote it, but twisted a bit.
feelingsarefutile's avatar
Haha well it's always good to have a tune in your head. :]
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